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Finding Life: A Diamante Poem about Life and Death

Updated on February 27, 2012

The following poem is a diamante. What makes a diamante unique is its structure. Although there is no rhyming scheme in a diamante, there is a very precise structure that allows the poem to show contrast between two ideas. My poem below is about Death and Life, two oppositional nouns that are linked by the other lines in the poem.

Structure of a Diamante

Line 1: A single noun (person, place, object, idea)

Line 2: Two adjectives that describe the noun in Line 1

Line 3: Three participles that describe Lines 1 and 2. (Participles often end in "ing" or "ed")

Line 4: Four nouns. The first two should relate to the word in Line 1. The last two should relate to your second word that will be Line 7.

Line 5: Three participles related to Line 7.

Line 6: Two adjectives describing Line 7.

Line 7: A single noun, usually the opposite of Line 1.

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Finding Life

Death

Unexpected, Sudden

Wilting, Damaged, Feared.

Cause, Casket, Service, Prayer.

Collected, Caring: Loving.

Together, Alike.

Life

The poem above is meant to illustrate that with death, we learn to be more appreciative of what is still living and therefore are able to move on from a devastating experience to a new life full of family and friends.

The poem's structure is one that allows the poet to turn around their message. The first half of the poem is somewhat like a report, or a stating of facts, while the second half uplifts the reader by giving them emotion, hope.

This poem illustrates the steps which death takes. From the cause of death to the service, death seems to be ominous and damaging. The goal of this piece is to show that although one death occurs and people gather in sadness to mourn the deceased, they find others there who are alive. They are collected, caring and above all else, loving. When death knocks at our door, it is natural to feel grief, but the challenge is to find a reason to live. Usually this reason comes in the comfort of others.

The structure of this poem allowed me to contrast two of the most oppositional forces, while also making a connection between the two. I am not sure whether I did this correctly, but the tone of the poem should change without the reader realizing it immediately. I meant to make the transition much like the one a loved one makes when someone passes. They feel alone, alienated, but once they see the family and other friends surrounding them in grief, they realize that they are not alone, but in a collective group. This group has solidarity, a reason to live.

The power that death has on our emotions is one that causes people to dig deep inside of themselves and ask "what is the meaning of life?" When surrounded by others that feel the same way, we are in turn comforted by the fact that we are still living and should not waste it worrying about death.

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      Shambrille Patrick 5 years ago

      How Nice Is This

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      Brittany Kennedy 6 years ago from Kailua-Kona, Hawaii

      Thank you so much, chaya. I'm so happy to have inspired you. Mahalo nui loa.

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      Chaya Parmessur 6 years ago from FRANCE

      Very nice and interesting! I don't know technical poems and this was a great lesson. May try one some day! But yours is so short and yet so powerful! It is almost ironical that life and death can be summed up in such few words. Bravo and voted up!

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      Stephanie Bradberry 6 years ago from New Jersey

      Very nice poem. Maybe your next one can be about yin and yang. Just throwing it out there because I really don't think I will get around to it. But you never know. Keep up the beautiful writing!

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      Brittany Kennedy 6 years ago from Kailua-Kona, Hawaii

      Thank you! Yes, they are supposed to be participles.

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      Derdriu 6 years ago

      BrittanyTodd: What precision in the movement from self-analyzing vulnerability to self-prescribing healing!

      Thank you, etc.,

      Derdriu

      P.S. Is line 5 supposed to be participles or nouns?

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      Brittany Kennedy 6 years ago from Kailua-Kona, Hawaii

      Thank you, Zen! Hopefully the next one will be done by the end of this week. It will be a little longer and have more depth, so I have been trying to edit to make it tight. Thanks and I will let you know when I publish the next story!

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      Hillbilly Zen 6 years ago from Kentucky

      Ms. Brittany, thank you for the beautiful example of a daimante. Thanks also for the reminder of the definition of a participle (I have a tendency to dangle them). Very nicely done - voted up, beautiful and useful! Now...ahem...when can we expect the next Hawthorne Inn story? Hmm? ;)