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Death Underwater

Updated on January 1, 2015


Cascading down like a waterfall---I drown a thousand deep


---Suffering underwater----I struggle for air


Lungs fulfill with water, I drank too much than need


Here I am in my death bed---surround with the unknown


------Murdered here alone...my soul wail a sharp cry







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      chanroth 4 years ago from California, USA

      Thank you rahul0324

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      Jessee R 4 years ago from Gurgaon, India

      two words....

      Short .... Powerful.

      Nicely done

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      chanroth 5 years ago from California, USA

      Hi gypsy and waheed, thank you both very much! :)

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      Waheed Chuahdary 5 years ago from United States

      Short but such a awesome poem. Voted up

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      Gypsy Rose Lee 5 years ago from Riga, Latvia

      Ominous and hard hitting poem. Wow had to role with the punches.

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      chanroth 5 years ago from California, USA

      Hi ImKarn23, thank you very much! :-)

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      Karen Silverman 5 years ago

      Omg dear - i do believe that took my breath away!

      That was dark - AND deep - no pun intended..

      Absolutely tragic and absolutely perfectly written..

      voting and sharing with the hub-munity, my friend!

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      chanroth 5 years ago from California, USA

      Hi alyxky,fitnezz and xstatic, thank you very much for reading, commenting and voting! :)

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      Jim Higgins 5 years ago from Eugene, Oregon

      Drowning is supposed to be an easy death. It does not seem to me that it would be. This poem illustrates the terror it would bring. Up!

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      FitnezzJim 5 years ago from Fredericksburg, Virginia

      This is distinctively Chanroth, invoking in a few short words a fearful image.

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      Alyx Kemp 5 years ago from Herkimer, NY

      Short, but oh so powerful poem.