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Death Was So True

Updated on February 13, 2015

It was so dark,

I really couldn’t see,

the night struck such a chord

of terror in me,

I felt myself going mad,

I think it absorbed

all the capacity of terror I had,

the light refused to help me,

even after I insisted,

the terror just persisted,

and my blood would slowly drain,

exploding, vein after vein,

and I felt a sharp pain,

, shoot through my hip,

it was insane,

as I couldn’t slow the quiver

in my lower lip,

here life and death met,

and I had so much regret,

standing alone now with my heart dry,

and my eyes wet,

I would cry and cry,

knowing that death was so true,

and my life was just a lie.

© 2012 Frank Atanacio

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      Frank Atanacio 5 years ago from Shelton

      thank you Sava bless you Frank

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      savanahl 5 years ago

      I love this one. Great use of metaphor and very nice meter and rhyme. :) Voted up and beautiful.

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      Frank Atanacio 5 years ago from Shelton

      lol thank you raci :) Frank

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      raciniwa 5 years ago from Naga City, Cebu

      oh, why would it be a lie? i love the thought of lying...lying in bed now...so sleepy Frank...your work keeps me awake a bit...

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      Frank Atanacio 5 years ago from Shelton

      duffsmom.. bless you

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      P. Thorpe Christiansen 5 years ago from Pacific Northwest, USA

      Chilling - excellent

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      Frank Atanacio 5 years ago from Shelton

      ill take it the comment Phoebe coming from you have a wonderful day

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      Phoebe Pike 5 years ago

      Fascinating work Frank! It is my personal belief that death does not exist until we have experienced it ourselves... for example, no child thinks about their death or life ending until they are affected by it. Death is a truth that hits everyone and can never be forgotten once experienced.

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      Frank Atanacio 5 years ago from Shelton

      thanks Senoritaa for your comment

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      Senoritaa 5 years ago

      A wise man once said -- Death is the ultimate truth of life. Vivid work Frank!

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      Frank Atanacio 5 years ago from Shelton

      thank you once again Sueswan :) cheers and be blessed

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      Sueswan 5 years ago

      Hi Frank

      "here life and death met,

      and I had so much regret,

      standing alone now with my heart dry,

      and my eyes wet,"

      Beautiful and poignant. Amazing work Frank.

      Voted up and away

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      Frank Atanacio 5 years ago from Shelton

      im sorry for your loss shim-dawn Frank

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      shimmering Dawn 5 years ago

      Frank, I lost a friend to cancer today and your words like arrows pierce.. I am left wondering do we really care about the kind of life we live or do we live each day as it comes, not caring so much about each decision we make... Great work here Frank. Your poems are always food for thought! Be a blessing! Peace!

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      Frank Atanacio 5 years ago from Shelton

      thelyicwriter thank you :)

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      Richard Ricky Hale 5 years ago from West Virginia

      Voted up, awesome, and interesting Frank. I agree with Moms, you have that special gift that makes a poet great Frank. Awesome work. Hope you have a great day pal.

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      Frank Atanacio 5 years ago from Shelton

      thanks you so much momssecret for feeling my words :) Frank

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      Lissette 5 years ago from Central Florida

      I don't think you know how your writing hits me. Your descriptions take a hold of me and produce your work visually. I can see it sometimes more clearly than I would like. Your words make me an empath which is a good thing but this one hurt.

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      Frank Atanacio 5 years ago from Shelton

      thanks for your comment Eddy..bless you Frank

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      Eiddwen 5 years ago from Wales

      The work of a true artist;great words Frank and has to have a very worthy 'up up and away!!'

      Take care my friend and have a great day.

      Eddy.

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      Frank Atanacio 5 years ago from Shelton

      thanks so much reik and welcome hope to check out more of your hubs too :)

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      reikieffect 5 years ago

      Very deep and impactful poem. Loved it!

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      Frank Atanacio 5 years ago from Shelton

      thank you writer20 :) Frank

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      Joyce Haragsim 5 years ago from Southern Nevada

      Awesome peom Frank,voted up and awesome. Joyce

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      Frank Atanacio 5 years ago from Shelton

      me neither :(

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      Susan Zutautas 5 years ago from Ontario, Canada

      Powerful poem! I hope death is not like this at all.

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      Gypsy48 5 years ago

      Excellent poem, love the last two lines!

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      Sky9106 5 years ago from A beautiful place on earth.

      You go boui. Death was so true and life just a lie! You are now officially in the of the graduates because lines like those simply leaves you in AWE!

      Great job brethren frank.

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      Justin W Price 5 years ago from Juneau, Alaska

      Lovely work, Frank. Good job!

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      LaDena Campbell 5 years ago from Somewhere Over The Rainbow - Near Oz...

      Awesome once again Frank!

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      Deborah Brooks Langford 5 years ago from Brownsville,TX

      OHHHH Frank your life is not a lie. I need you to keep writing for me these wonderful poems. You are awesome Frank love love love your poem.

      Voted up

      Debbie