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Eden's Demise

Updated on November 12, 2011

Eden's Demise

"Hello pretty lady,
how does it spin?
You surely do have
some fine, fine skin,"
hissed the serpent
in the garden's fair light.
Yes, she was, no doubt,
a delectable sight.

"Is there any tree here
forbidden to you?
In this heavenly garden,
what could be taboo?"
Tell me, my sweet,
what is your taste?
Surely no desire here
should go to waste!"

"We can feast on any
of this tasty fruit,
but there is one tree
that is of nil repute.
If we dare to touch or
taste, we'll die...
and this singular fruit
we are loathe to try."

With cunning and charm,
the clever serpent laughed,
and said, " Sweetheart,
you should know that's daft!
The tree to which
you do refer
is the most delicious,
why would you defer?

And it will not kill you,
it will make you wise...
you'll be just like God,
oh yes, and have His Eyes!
Trust me,Little Darlin!
I am in the know...
Just ask The Man cause
He will tell you so!"

Eve looked deep into
the serpent's eyes,
swooned and missed
his evil, snakely guise.
She waltzed right up
to the forbidden tree,
picked its fruit and
nibbled eagerly.

It tasted sweet and juicy
like she knew it would...
so she called to Adam
as any good wife should,
and offered her hubby
a half to share
which lured him on into
the wily serpent's snare.

Now, once the couple ate
the forbidden fruit,
evil was planted and
quickly took to root.
Shame was born from
the forbidden seed
and Mankind banished
for their misguided need.

Flattery and charm
held the key to trust...
when the serpent told Eve
of her fruity lust.
For the rest of time,
Mankind would pay
for the serpent's lie
and the woman's sway.

Now, we yearn for the garden,
yes, and blame poor Eve
for the woes of life
that hold no reprieve.
But the true fault lays
in the serpent's eyes
for his silver-tongued tale
was Eden's demise!

"Copyright 2011, All Rights Reserved."


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      tnderhrt23 6 years ago

      Ahh, thanks, Max. This is one of my personal favorites...poor Eve got a bum rap!

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      BeyondMax 6 years ago from Sydney, Australia

      What an awesome poem! Aren't we all ask this question at one point of our lives "why oh why Eve took that apple..." Rarely we look around and see the real trouble's eyes... What a lovely read!

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      No_Clue 6 years ago

      Ahh, star! Always a pleasure, a visit from you! Thank you, my friend! Lots of love!

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      Annette Donaldson 6 years ago from Northern Ireland

      Another masterpiece from you my friend. I always no where to stop by for amusement, fun, and always love.x

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      No_Clue 6 years ago

      Thank you, tillsontitan! It was a fun write, to add a modern day spin to an age old tale! I appreciate your read and great comment!

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      Mary Craig 6 years ago from New York

      Great presentation. I have to agree with all the comments above. I'm sure many more would be touched if they read your version. A really good re-telling of our biblical beginnings. Keep up the good work. Voted up and awesome.

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      No_Clue 6 years ago

      Movie Master, I am really tickled at your comment!

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      Movie Master 6 years ago from United Kingdom

      I agree with Gus as well!

      This poem is brilliant, absolutely brilliant, love it.

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      No_Clue 6 years ago

      Sharyn, thank you! A different perspective...I appreciate your read and visit!

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      Sharon Smith 6 years ago from Northeast Ohio USA

      This is a really awesome poem. And I agree with Gus above. A big vote UP!!!


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      tnderhrt23 6 years ago

      Now, Gus, I believe you may be right! Thanks for stopping by!

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      Gustave Kilthau 6 years ago from USA

      Hi No_Clue - Perhaps, had we kids had this to read back when there was "catechism class," we might have paid better attention to the good pastor.

      Gus :-)))

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      No_Clue 6 years ago

      Hello, weed, thank you, maam! Genesis with a touch of spice! I appreciate your read and lovely comment, as always!

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      No_Clue 6 years ago

      Cardisa, your comment has made my day! Its funny, I saw the hub of the day yesterday, I think it was, that had a picture of a snake on it...and got to thinking about Eve and the serpent in Eden...That serpent had to have used some slick finesse to convince her to sample that forbidden fruit...and of course, she would talk her dear husband into trying it too....wouldn't any wife worth her salt? poor Eve always gets the blame! anyway, it was a fun write and worth it, from your sweet comment! Thank you kindly!

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      tumblintumblweed 6 years ago

      Great job with this one,Ms tnderhrt!

      This is the 'new version' of Adam & Eve!

      Hope all is well with you!



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      Carolee Samuda 6 years ago from Jamaica

      This is by far the best read of the day! There should be a new hub of the day award! I am impressed and delighted to have found this while bunny hopping around. If people thought the story of Adam and Eve was old and boring, they should surely read this because it is anything but. You keep writing like this and you will definitely get a lot of attention.

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      No_Clue 6 years ago

      Thank you, Binaya! Myth or no, a new twist is fun. I appreciate your read and comment!

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      Binaya.Ghimire 6 years ago

      Your poetry is like old wine in a new bottle. The myth has a new twist and perception.