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Enchanted Evening (a haiku)

Updated on December 30, 2015
Evenings orchestration...moments of fond elation...
Evenings orchestration...moments of fond elation...
Windswept clouds shining bright...
Windswept clouds shining bright...
as frogs and crickets chirp in the night...
as frogs and crickets chirp in the night...
Moonshine enchantment spreads...all is well...
Moonshine enchantment spreads...all is well...



Wind swept clouds, aglow,

Enchantment...in the evening,

Sundown's gifting bow.


Birds all fly toward shore,

Frogs and crickets serenade.

Loon's night songs add more.


Clouds evaporate,

Star lights shining through the veil.

Time is growing late.


Moon light comes at last,

Shadows crisscross broad landscape.

Dreams of times, long past.




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Dream time casts its spell...
Dream time casts its spell...

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      whonunuwho 20 months ago from United States

      Thank you Hub Pages this is number 700 and going strong. whonu

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      Demas W Jasper 20 months ago from Today's America and The World Beyond

      Out of curiosity, why the comma in the last line.

      Fine poem. I like the loons, frogs, crickets, ....birds flying to the shore, and BTW the last line. No place is given to rate this so here is mine:

      Thumb Up, Awesome, Beautiful, Interesting.

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      whonunuwho 20 months ago from United States

      Perspycacious, my friend, I believe the comma used comes under "Poetic License" although I do not use commas that often, I like the ...quite alot. Thanks for the heads up my friend. whonu...

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      Demas W Jasper 20 months ago from Today's America and The World Beyond

      was this an aberration, or has HP done away with the Thumb, useful....Interesting scoring?

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      Shauna L Bowling 20 months ago from Central Florida

      Beautiful poem, whonu. But then that's no surprise!

      Perspycacious, HP has done away with the thumbs and voting buttons. They say there wasn't enough engagement. I still find myself scrolling up to vote. Why they think people weren't voting is beyond me!

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      whonunuwho 20 months ago from United States

      Thank you for the review and info my friend. whonu

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      Linda Rogers 20 months ago from Minnesota

      Wow, this is an excellent Haiku. I've told you before, I love your style of writing Haiku. I never thought of having line 1 and 3 rhyme or make the haiku long like this. Just love it! Voted up and hit many buttons.

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      manatita44 20 months ago from london

      Great Bro,

      You've mastered it. So Beautiful! And in adding the appropriate scenery, you've created a masterpiece!!

      Now, my friend, my Teacher always spoke of Self-transcendence. You've added beauty. Now add wisdom like the ancient Seers did:

      (Human Condition)

      "Frog in narrow well,

      To Frog coming from the sea.

      "Sea? No such thing! Out!"

      (Dying to Self)

      " You desire Heaven?

      Camel through the needle's eye.

      Or kill attachments."

      Then you'll be unique and an absolute genius, my Brother!

      Love you, Whonu.

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      whonunuwho 20 months ago from United States

      Thank you so much for your fine support my friend. whonu

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      Faith Reaper 20 months ago from southern USA

      Oh, your haiku poetry is spectacular! Lovely photos as always.

      God bless you

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      Patty Inglish 20 months ago from North America

      I would like a month of evenings that you have wonderfully described with your Haiku!

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      Frank Atanacio 20 months ago from Shelton

      love these little haiku whonu..:)

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      Audrey Selig 20 months ago from Oklahoma City, Oklahoma

      Love haiku with glorious descriptions and vivid photos. I have tried to write them but not much success achieved. Never give up. You should be proud. Blessings, Audrey

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      Bronwen Scott-Branagan 20 months ago from Victoria, Australia

      700? Wow! It's beautiful and so are the photos.

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      Deb Hirt 20 months ago from Stillwater, OK

      I really enjoyed this one!

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