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Fall Short

Updated on September 12, 2011

What did I lose when I came here to find

Could it have been a piece of my mind?

I trampled upon a time that was unlit

Wanting to place a piece that wouldn’t fit

In circles and circles I started to spin

Tugging and tearing at my outer skin

A lock hole covered with grey cement

Key never straight but claimed to be bent

A window ajar when I looked to my left

A crime committed a severe grand theft

Out I flew into the open space in front

Was I committing a life altering stunt?

It didn’t matter I took to the sky

Traveling like a wild butterfly

A release that never felt greater

Leaving to find heaven and hells equator


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      TheManWithNoPants 5 years ago from Tucson, Az.

      Whoa! Where'd that come from? It is beautiful and can be taken many ways depending on where a person is in life. A+ my friend. You're good! :)


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      Erica Sanchez 5 years ago from California

      Thanks ManWithNoPants, I got on paper what I needed to say and I said it many different ways. I read it a few times and got three different outlooks. Thanks again!!

      smiles :)


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      Carolee Samuda 5 years ago from Jamaica

      Bella, you are the female version of Epigramman, and you must know that he is a wonderful poet here on HP. What a pleasure it has been to read your stuff.

      A spirit needing to be set free. Sometimes even when alive we feel this way and just want to flee from the cement that holds us down.

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      Joyce Haragsim 5 years ago from Southern Nevada

      Wonderful written poem. I loved reading it and had no choice to vote up.

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      hafeezrm 5 years ago from Pakistan

      I loved this piece: "It didn’t matter I took to the sky. Traveling like a wild butterfly"

      Thanks for sharing.

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      rjsadowski 5 years ago

      I don't understand it completely. but I like it.

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      moneycop 5 years ago from JABALPUR

      beautiful peace of work...carry on..

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      Julianna 5 years ago from SomeWhere Out There

      The poem goes in every direction, I read it twice. What a release and to be freed like a butterfly is wonderful! Keep on writing! :)

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      Matthew I Crawford 5 years ago from Greeley, Colorado


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      Nefarious_Misery 5 years ago from on the move

      Wonderful piece! Just a myriad of visuals and emotions pulling you in different directions.

      Voted up beautiful and awesome.

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      Erica Sanchez 5 years ago from California

      Car, Thank you very much I really appreciate the praise although I do not feel it at times but I will be more than happy to accept the comparison to Epi. A dear old fella that I cherish. Thanks a bunch.

      Writer, thank you! you are the bestest hugs!!

      Haf, Thank you one of my fav. lines as well.

      Rj, Lol its talking about someone who is lost and wants to be freed like a butterfly and jump out a window. Its talking about a person who is tired of hitting road blocks and always stumbling. Thanks for the comment and the honesty I really do appreciate a honest comment rather than a fake comment!!

      Money, Thanks a bunch!!

      AE, Thanks a bunch for the comment I really have read it over a dozen times and everytime I read it it is something new I see in it.

      Mc, Thank you!

      Nef, I have to agree with you on this one.

      smiles all

      Virtual hugs


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      Mentalist acer 5 years ago from A Voice in your Mind!

      Traveling like a wild butterfly

      A release that never felt greater

      Leaving to find heaven and hells equator...

      I'm reveling in this discovery of a place between extremes Bella.;)

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      Movie Master 5 years ago from United Kingdom

      Wonderful Bella, I've read your poem several times and found something different each time, lovely and voting up.

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      Ruby Jean Fuller 5 years ago from Southern Illinois

      Wow Bella, This has so many turns, escape, away from it all. Great write....

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      Erica Sanchez 5 years ago from California

      Acer, A wild butterfly I am. ;)

      Movie, I have done the absolute same thing cant decide which point ive proven

      Always, lol I believe it does as well. Thanks a bunch :)

      smiles :)


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