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Falling For It: Flash Fiction by cam

Updated on December 17, 2016
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Chris has written more than 100 flash fiction/short stories.Working Vacation took 21st out of 6,700 in the 2016 Writer's Digest competition.

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Falling For It

Eric is sitting with his legs sticking out of the airplane doorway with Buz straddling him from behind, snapping their harnesses together.

“Ready, Set, Go.” shouts the pilot. Buz shoves Eric out the door providing him no opportunity to say, No, wait, I’ve changed my mind.

The Cessna whisks away as they begin their descent. The wind tears at Eric’s skin, ripping the goggles from his face, his eyes watering.

“I can’t see.” he screams.

“I’m deploying the parachute in five, four, three, two, one.” Eric hears from above. He waits.

“What’s happening?” Eric calls out.

“Parachute didn’t open. Opening Emergency chute.” Buz’s emotionless voice is barely audible over the whistling and roaring of wind in Eric’s ears.

“I can’t hear you.” cries Eric.

“Neither chute will open.” The news comes louder this time.

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“Noooo!” howls Eric, holding the note like an opera singer, wind and fear contorting his features, the image of his scream plastered against the bones of his face. “Nooo.... Pull it again.” No response from above. Eric twists his body and reaches for the cord on Buz’s pack as they plummet toward the earth.

“No, Don’t do that.” comes the rebuke as they tumble sideways giving Eric alternate glimpses of earth and sky.

“Mona.” Eric wails, realizing his beloved is waiting for him below. Vomit sprays from the sides of his face as hot urine burns his skin. He suddenly remembers his parents-remembers that he never told them....but his remorse is interrupted as he senses Buz’s movements above. The tumbling stops. His body is jerked backward even as momentum seeks to complete the dive to death.

”What’s happening?”

“The parachute.”

Eric looks up to see a multicolored canopy. He looks down and sees the earth.

“Ready yourself for landing.”

Eric hears the instructions, but his body will have none of it. Limp legs buckle on impact as Buz’s weight drives Eric forward ending with an audible crunching sound when his nose meets the blessed earth.

Buz unsnaps the tandem harnesses, and Eric struggles to his knees. Tears stream through blood. Mona holds him against her breast, soothing her distraught man with gentle words and touches.


“Geez kid," says Buz. "Can’t you take a joke?"

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      Chris Mills 2 years ago from Maple City, Michigan

      Deb, it is probably obvious from my description of skydiving, that I have not yet taken this particular leap. "Yet" is the key word of that last sentence. My goal for a while was to become certified, but I've decided to focus on scuba diving instead. I'll go for one skydive, and probably call it quits there. Thanks for reading. Glad to hear that you enjoyed diving. It gives me a little more courage.

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      Deb Hirt 2 years ago from Stillwater, OK

      I have skydived, and the last thing that I worry about is whether or not the chute is going to open. It's that inevitable free fall rush that does it for me. Cheers!

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      Chris Mills 2 years ago from Maple City, Michigan

      Ann, What do you Mean? Do you actually have a problem with falling toward the earth from several thousand feet at 190 km/h? I just don't understand. (Heavy on sarcasm here). Thanks for reading, Ann.

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      Ann Carr 2 years ago from SW England

      Wonderful!

      I never did fancy sky-diving and now you've definitely put me off it for good!

      Ann

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      Chris Mills 2 years ago from Maple City, Michigan

      Faith, I think Eric should give up sky diving, and I also think Buz should give up having any interaction with other humans. Thanks for reading this story.

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      Faith Reaper 2 years ago from southern USA

      Oh, I would have had a heart attack! That warrants opening up a can of whoop butt on him real good too ... LOL Yes, he did fall for it ...perfect title for this flash fiction.

      Exhilarating read, Chris.

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      Chris Mills 2 years ago from Maple City, Michigan

      Frank, Off the wall good?? A new rating......I like it. Thanks for reading. Glad you enjoyed Eric's misfortune.

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      Frank Atanacio 2 years ago from Shelton

      my goodness lol this was off the wall good..:)

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      Chris Mills 2 years ago from Maple City, Michigan

      Thanks Nell, I'm glad it's causing some chuckles.

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      Nell Rose 2 years ago from England

      lol! in this case horrible means hilarious! LOL!

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      Chris Mills 2 years ago from Maple City, Michigan

      John, if it's any consolation, I think Buz became unemployed/unemployable after this incident, and possibly, Eric didn't need to work anymore. Thanks for reading.

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      John Hansen 2 years ago from Queensland Australia

      I felt for poor Eric, and despised Buz. I wanted Eric to get up and punch him in the nose...what a cruel joke. Good flash fiction Cam.

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      Chris Mills 2 years ago from Maple City, Michigan

      Nell, :) I'll take that as a compliment. When I wrote that, the effect I wanted was for people to laugh as they winced in pain. Or something like that. I think it's working pretty well. Thanks for reading and for the "compliment."

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      Chris Mills 2 years ago from Maple City, Michigan

      Bill, there is lot's of flash fiction being written here these days, so you have good choices of reading material. I was thinking today that you must do a mountain of reading on HP every day. Everywhere I go, you've already been. I know everyone appreciates your interest and efforts. I know I do.

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      Nell Rose 2 years ago from England

      lol! oh you are horrible! scary stuff, but sort of funny too! lol!

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      Bill Holland 2 years ago from Olympia, WA

      I love flash fiction. It seems to be all I have time for. I get the maximum of satisfaction our of a minimum of words. LOL You do this so well, my friend.

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      Chris Mills 2 years ago from Maple City, Michigan

      Shauna, Buz needs to be a shoe salesman. It's difficult to hurt anyone when all they are doing is trying on loafers.

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      Shauna L Bowling 2 years ago from Central Florida

      Not funny! With friends like Buz, who needs enemies?

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      Chris Mills 2 years ago from Maple City, Michigan

      Martin, I hate it when the girls "Man" us into things. We can't say no, so we just lay our heads on the chopping block. I haven't been skydiving....yet, but I will soon. I'm moving to Oregon till at least through Christmas. Maybe I'll do it there. Thanks for reading, Martin. Have a very good week.

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      Chris Mills 2 years ago from Maple City, Michigan

      Tragic joke. That one has been around for a while, but I thought I could bring it out one more time. Thanks for reading, Becky. Have a nice week.

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      Becky Katz 2 years ago from Hereford, AZ

      Good story, but that was not much of a joke.

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      Martin Kloess 2 years ago from San Francisco

      A girl "manned" me into parachuting.

      I can honestly say, I hate it.

      But I liked this