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Final Night

Updated on September 6, 2013


When they spoke of her,

he held on tightly to the rail,

she was much thinner

then he remembered,

and very pale,

with a moist gleam

about her face that suggested fever,

her past was history,

so it would seem,

her future a mystery,

that only God could solve,

and she never fulfilled a single dream,

her skin was dry and thin,

as he fought back the cries,

and looked into her sick,

tortured eyes,

all of his focus just tips,

as the right words

evaporated from his lips,

her situation bleak,

and it was too painful

for her speak,

she moved, but she was very weak,

her voice was mild,

she was his mother,

and he was her child,

her ghost was heard,

and death was imminent,

as he hungered after her every word,

although she was losing the fight,

her memories were keen,

holding his hand close and tight,

reluctant to say this was her final night.

© 2011 Frank Atanacio

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      Frank Atanacio 5 years ago from Shelton

      thank you Phdast7 and thank you wayne barret bless you both :)

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      Wayne Barrett 5 years ago from Clearwater Florida

      This was hard to read, not because of your writing but because of recent events in my family. Great piece Frank.

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      Theresa Ast 5 years ago from Atlanta, Georgia

      Beautifully and emotionally well done Frank. Really, really like this.

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      Frank Atanacio 5 years ago from Shelton

      thanks sofs..:) you too

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      sofs 6 years ago

      Touching! Frank you are so good with this.. you speak the language of poetry. Thank you for sharing this poem. Have a great weekend. God Bless!

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      Frank Atanacio 6 years ago from Shelton

      Sue thank you soo much :)

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      Sueswan 6 years ago

      Hi Frank

      Beautiful and heartwrenching. This one touched my heart.

      Voted up and away

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      Frank Atanacio 6 years ago from Shelton

      Thanks Eiddwen

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      Eiddwen 6 years ago from Wales

      A brilliant read and I must vote up up and away for this gem.

      Here's to so many more to share right now and in the brand New Year to come.

      Take care my friend,and enjoy your day.

      Eddy.

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      Frank Atanacio 6 years ago from Shelton

      Thanks for the comment Molly Lance

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      Molly Lance 6 years ago

      The feelings you speek of i know so well, the loss is so strange and unreal.

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      Frank Atanacio 6 years ago from Shelton

      thanks Audrey

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      Audrey Howitt 6 years ago from California

      Beautifully done Frank!

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      Frank Atanacio 6 years ago from Shelton

      thanks so much for reading Ph.. and you too Our Ms Brooks and Harpers Grace..thanks you all :)

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      Harpers Grace 6 years ago

      This is beautiful...just beautiful.

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      Deborah Brooks Langford 6 years ago from Brownsville,TX

      Oh Frank her final night.. so sad.. I take it she is going to die... this touched me so.. this is so perfect.. Mr.Frank you are a master at this.

      I voted up and awesome

      Debbie

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      Theresa Ast 6 years ago from Atlanta, Georgia

      I know you know this, but you write extremely well. What can I add that others haven't said? I didn't feel there was a single word out of place, not one too many and not one missing.

      Usually, when I read poetry, sometimes prose as well, I often find myself silently inserting or deleting a word here or there. I didn't do that with your poem, but then you probably knew what I meant.

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      Frank Atanacio 6 years ago from Shelton

      thank you so much writer20 :) happy new year to you

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      Joyce Haragsim 6 years ago from Southern Nevada

      wonderful sad poem, voted up and beautiful.

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      Frank Atanacio 6 years ago from Shelton

      thank you so much Bella :) frank

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      Erica Sanchez 6 years ago from California

      Losing someone is never beautiful but the way your words collided was very beautiful Frank!

      smiles :)

      bella

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      Frank Atanacio 6 years ago from Shelton

      Im so sorry H.. bless you

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      Brenda Barnes 6 years ago from America-Broken But Still Beautiful

      Frank, tears are on my cheeks because this describes my Father and I the night before he passed away. It is beautiful testament to love.

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      Frank Atanacio 6 years ago from Shelton

      thanks for the wonderful comment senoritaa.. and Sky good to see you again, my friend :)

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      Sky9106 6 years ago from A beautiful place on earth.

      Ok Ok I don't know how to imitate a shiver on here . But I felt a shiver. Something tells me that you are back and taking off even further that where you left off.

      Great work Frank!

      Bless.

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      Rinita Sen 6 years ago

      Touching! Could feel every word speak about the selfless bond between mother and son.

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