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First Awakening

Updated on December 29, 2014
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She was a victim of a mismatched love,

And it’s time that those fools realize

That she has a voice and a soul

An undefined life you know,

Yet it took decades in a tumultuous path to go.


But her dreams were cast aside

And who were they to be blind,

Pretending not to see her real needs?

She skirted on the path of windblown leaves

While her hardened heart slowly bleeds.


And she was always there for you

And all the others that she knew

Giving everything that she had physically.

She knew every need they had mystically,

And they ignored her own vitality.


When you were free to see,

The cost was much too deep

And you just moved your mind.

Then you found another one in kind,

And your new dance had been realigned.


That one had not a nickel to show

But could understand her, though,

And henceforth was the greatest of all time.

Tears and passions flowed sublime

Where the house on the loch will shine.


And I’ll always tell you what is true

Watching you while your roses bloom

For the deepest of hopes we think escape

We reach them, while our knees are scraped

And our minds and hearts can reshape.

© 2014 Deb Hirt

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      Deb Hirt 2 years ago from Stillwater, OK

      Thanks, cygnet, and that IS a good way to look at it.

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      Cygnet Brown 2 years ago from Springfield, Missouri

      What a beautiful poem. It reminds me of what I went through last year with my ex and the rebirth of my new life as I move on.

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      Demas W Jasper 2 years ago from Today's America and The World Beyond

      Deny this comment for it is meant just for you.

      I would change "bleed" to "bled" in your poem's line "She skirted on the path of windblown leaves While her hardened heart slowly bleeds."

      The rest is very poetic and strong. I am sorry I had missed it until now.

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      Deb Hirt 2 years ago from Stillwater, OK

      Thanks, Faith Reaper, I certainly appreciate your opinion and value it.

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      Faith Reaper 2 years ago from southern USA

      Beautifully expressed with a special message.

      Up ++++

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      Deb Hirt 2 years ago from Stillwater, OK

      You are so welcome, Romanian. Lots more where that came from.

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      Nicu 2 years ago from Oradea, Romania

      This is a beautiful poem. Thanks for sharing it.

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      Deb Hirt 2 years ago from Stillwater, OK

      And you are so right, Pro Shell...

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      Pro Shell 2 years ago from Vereinigten Staaten

      This reminds me of the moment when the day begins to break over the horizon.

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      Deb Hirt 2 years ago from Stillwater, OK

      Thanks, Kevin! So glad that you liked it.

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      The Examiner-1 2 years ago

      What a beautiful poem about mourning over love lost Deb. I voted up, shared and Tweeted it.

      Kevin

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      Deb Hirt 2 years ago from Stillwater, OK

      Hey, manatita! There is aways hope for everyone.

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      manatita44 2 years ago from london

      Once again, hope in darkness. I like that. Thanks Deb. Great Hub!

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      Deb Hirt 2 years ago from Stillwater, OK

      Jodah, one never knows a given capacity, unless necessity provokes it.

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      Deb Hirt 2 years ago from Stillwater, OK

      Thanks, Jodah. Life is full of so much, if we just allow things to be...

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      John Hansen 2 years ago from Queensland Australia

      A very beautiful poem Deb, thanks for sharing.

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      John Hansen 2 years ago from Queensland Australia

      A very beautiful poem Deb, thanks for sharing.

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      Deb Hirt 2 years ago from Stillwater, OK

      Thank you, iskhoso, and I wish the same for you.

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      Iftikhar ul Sami 2 years ago from Pakistan

      Great Job. Wishing you very fruitful new year.

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      Deb Hirt 2 years ago from Stillwater, OK

      Thanks, Blossom…I am never far in the sea of life...

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      Bronwen Scott-Branagan 2 years ago from Victoria, Australia

      Lovely poem with a special undercurrent. Wishing you a great 2015.

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      Deb Hirt 2 years ago from Stillwater, OK

      The same to you, too, Dave.

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      Dave 2 years ago from Lancashire north west England

      Deb, your talents are widespread indeed. Wonderful message in your words. I hope you have a Happy and prosperous New Year.

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      Deb Hirt 2 years ago from Stillwater, OK

      ChitrangadaSharan, thanks for your presence and I sincerely send the same wishes your way.

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      Chitrangada Sharan 2 years ago from New Delhi, India

      Besides a bird lover and an environmentalist, you are an excellent poet as well. Enjoyed your poem. Wish you a very happy and prosperous new year!

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      Deb Hirt 2 years ago from Stillwater, OK

      Thanks, Sha. There will always be a circumstance to consider, will there not?

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      Shauna L Bowling 2 years ago from Central Florida

      Very thought provoking poem, Deb. I love the message hidden beneath the words. Poetry suits you well.

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      Deb Hirt 2 years ago from Stillwater, OK

      Thanks, Billy. Glad that you could see what you saw.

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      Bill Holland 2 years ago from Olympia, WA

      I totally agree with Eddy! Your poetry is sublime. Oddly, this made me think of nature...but perhaps that was the purpose. :) Happy New Year my friend.

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      Deb Hirt 2 years ago from Stillwater, OK

      Ad yr un peth i chi, fy ffrind. Rwy'n credu fy mod dweud hyn yn iawn ... wnes i?

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      Eiddwen 2 years ago from Wales

      Beautiful Deb you are a wonderful poet and I wish you a wonderful run up to the New year. Lots of love from Wales my dear friend.

      Eddy.