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Girl in the Rain

Updated on December 12, 2013
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Once there was a girl who was walking under the rain

Alone

Soaked up

Tears flowing on her face with the rain drops


Thunders rumbling

She got more scared

Lightning striking

Still she walked alone


Along the way

She met someone

Quite hard to explain

But she forgot the gray sky

There were sunshine and rainbows

Fireflies and butterflies

She realized she burned again


The rain fell again

This time washing away the fire

Flames of love turned to ashes

Once again, there she was…


Walking under the rain

Alone and soaked up

Tears flowing on her face with the rain drops


Flashbacks of dancing under the rain

With the reason of her smile

Didn’t care who could see ‘em

Swirling round and round

Once there was a girl who loved the rain so much


Sweet memories couldn’t bring back the smile

Warm tears flowed instead

Breaking her gentle heart

Coz no more dancing now


Once there was a girl

Who loved dancing in the rain

Hope she could burn again….



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    • Micky Dee profile image

      Micky Dee 7 years ago

      This is very nice. There's nothing like love or the absence that helps words flow. They sometimes intermingle with tears. Thanks for beautiful poetry.

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      Dim Flaxenwick 7 years ago from Great Britain

      Really well written for such personal and heartbreaking content. So, So, good. peace.x

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      Fehl Dungo 7 years ago from close to you...

      last time I saw you, you were in Jealous avenue :)

      yup yup words flow much often when the heart squeeze..THANKS so much for the beautiful comments Micky! :)

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      Fehl Dungo 7 years ago from close to you...

      so so good to see you here :) Thank you Dim. God bless :)

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      peptalk 7 years ago

      This is nice...

      The tears and rain are great imagery.

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      Tammy Lochmann 7 years ago

      Cry in the rain so no one notices.

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      Fehl Dungo 7 years ago from close to you...

      Thanks a lot peptalk and Tammy :) Yah, the rain, no matter what,is a beautiful imagery..

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      carolina muscle 7 years ago from Charlotte, North Carolina

      This is a pretty little poem!

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      Fehl Dungo 7 years ago from close to you...

      wow, thanks CM :) always good to see you

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      Karen Russell 7 years ago

      I JUST LOVE YOUR POETRY, THANKS FOR SHARING...

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      Cathy Nerujen 7 years ago from Edge of Reality and Known Space

      Cheeky Girl pointed me in this direction. Wow! Strong and beautiful images of the girl in the rain. That sense of being left in the moment and we are at its mercy, somehow. I like the message at the end too.

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      Fehl Dungo 7 years ago from close to you...

      @KR

      thanks so much :)

      @Cathy

      I have to thank your Cheeky Girl for pointing you up to my hubs :) I gotta read yours, too..It is nice meetin you two.

      glad you liked it. THANKS again Cath! :)

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      cupid51 7 years ago from INDIA

      "Sweet memories couldn’t bring back the smile" - What a powerful expression! I really loved it!

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      Fehl Dungo 7 years ago from close to you...

      ow thank you Cupid :)

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      I*n*v*i*c*t*u*s 7 years ago

      Lovely poem, blaise! :) you take us on quite a heartfelt journey. I love the rain and it's great to incorporate the imagery. Enjoyable to captrure other perspectives of it too. :)

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      Fehl Dungo 7 years ago from close to you...

      hello Invictus! I missed you ;p Ah, the rain..quite interesting to draw lots of perspective. But my fave would be curling up under the sheets during rainy days lol

      Thanks my friend! :)

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      Moulik Mistry 7 years ago from Burdwan, West Bengal, India

      Loved its simple words, very well done...

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      Fehl Dungo 7 years ago from close to you...

      thanks Moulik Mistry :)

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      Moulik Mistry 7 years ago from Burdwan, West Bengal, India

      Lovely poem, great imagery - keep writing more...

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      needs_a_break 7 years ago

      oh wow i loved it!! simple yet profound... hmm i doubt i spelt that right oh well lol.. but ya.. i loved it, it had so much feeling and depth, i loved the msg as well can't wait to read more :)

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      Fehl Dungo 7 years ago from close to you...

      @Moulik

      you're here again :)

      @needs_a_break

      you spelled it right ;) glad you liked it. Thanks so much.

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      Micky Dee 7 years ago

      I thought I'd wander over and say HAPPY VALENTINE'S DAY-QT!

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      Fehl Dungo 7 years ago from close to you...

      thanks my sweet friend Mik! :) Happy V day!

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      cosette 7 years ago

      cool, Blaise...

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      kennynext 6 years ago from Everywhere

      A great poem that all should enjoy

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      Fehl Dungo 6 years ago from close to you...

      thank you kennynext :)

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      Kavita Trivedi 6 years ago from London

      This is beautiful though, you may want to slightly edit a couple of words to help this flow better. Something like:

      Once there was a girl, walking in the rain

      Alone

      Soaked up

      Tearful rain drops flowing on her face

      Rumbling thunder

      She got scared

      Lightning strikes

      Still, she walked alone

      Just my opinion of course, but either way, this is a very powerful piece and I enjoyed this very much

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      Fehl Dungo 6 years ago from close to you...

      Thank you Kavita :) You're a very good editor ;)

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      Ruby Jean Fuller 6 years ago from Southern Illinois

      Very sad but beautiful, enjoyed.

      Cheers

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      Fehl Dungo 6 years ago from close to you...

      Cheers! Thanks Always Exploring ;)

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      Karrak 6 years ago from Michigan

      Beautiful poem!

    • blaise25 profile image
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      Fehl Dungo 6 years ago from close to you...

      Thank you :)

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      K.A.E Grove 6 years ago from Australia

      beautiful, heartbreaking imagery, a lovely poem !

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      nishu 6 years ago

      nice

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      Two Poles 5 years ago from Morgantown, West Virginia

      So will be the love of my life...great work!

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      Fehl Dungo 5 years ago from close to you...

      Thank you so much :)

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      Eric T. Shortridge 4 years ago from MidWest

      I hope this isn't an autobiography... and that you are dancing again... it's a brilliant poem, because it is so real... and one that many can relate to these days... Hope you are well and staying warm this winter night

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      Fehl Dungo 4 years ago from close to you...

      Yes it was..and it's been so long ago. I think we all have gone through those moments. I'm so happy with my life now..and yes, dancing again :) It's amazing to know what readers see in a poem. It's like seeing a part of who they are. Thank you, Wolf :)

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      Anna Haven 4 years ago from Scotland

      Your poetry has many layers and meanings running through it. Interesting and thought provoking. I hope you have rainbows in your sky now :)

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      Fehl Dungo 4 years ago from close to you...

      I'm trying to put intrigue once in a while hehe. I'm glad you like it, Anna. Yes, there are rainbows in my life now and more beside. Have a sweet day!

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      Devika Primić 4 years ago from Dubrovnik, Croatia

      Awesome poetry with great meaning, and you did it so well

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      Veronicarain 4 years ago from Cincinnati, Ohio

      Great poetry is just flowing and I am so glad I started a hubpage. You make me have to read it twice because it just gives you stacks of thought provoking enjoyment. Have a great weekend.

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      David Charles 3 years ago from New York

      DID YOU EVEN RE READ THIS, i can tell, why would i ever finish reading it?

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      Dark Heart 2 years ago

      Oooh-that poem hurt it was so good.

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      Joy56 2 years ago

      Love love love it.... Beautiful...... You know the feeling you get when you read a beautiful poem..... I have it x 10

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