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Giving Up - A Poem From The Edge

Updated on December 4, 2016

This is a poem dedicated to the madness I feel inside, because I'm trying to give up smoking! It might turn out rubbish, but it's giving me something to do with my hands.....


Foot tapping

Fingers drumming

Clock ticking

Heart beating

What's the time?


Patch on

Arm itching

Constant reminder

Nervous twitching

Never mind!


Shall I cheat?

Who would know?

Who have I told..... anyway?

I could try again

Another day

To save some pennies

And my brain

From this constant craving

Going insane....


Damn...

I told my mum and dad,

My husband,

My son

And Facebook too!

Shit!

I must have been going

Through a fad

Of madness....

Only one thing to do...


To carry on

Foot tapping

Fingers drumming

Heart beating

Clock Watching


Because If I fail

They all will know!

I can't give up

Giving up

My deadly foe...


So could my tale

Of madness

Become a tale

Of strength?


Too soon to know....




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      Jennifer Stone 5 years ago from the Riverbank, England

      Victoria Lynn, thank you for your words, I'm glad you enjoyed it! :-) Jen

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      Jennifer Stone 5 years ago from the Riverbank, England

      CloudExplorer, I'm truly flattered, thanks! Thank you also for the vote and share.. Jen

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      Jennifer Stone 5 years ago from the Riverbank, England

      ChristyWrites, thanks! I'll confess to a minor relapse over the weekend, but am back on it now... :-}

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      Victoria Lynn 5 years ago from Arkansas, USA

      Wonderful poem! I love it. I can feel the anxiety, the craving in your poem. Well done!

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      Mike Pugh 5 years ago from New York City

      Yo! Jennifer this poem is the bomb, wow I love how quick it moves while reading it, and I don't wanna ruin all the fun for others whom will see this comment, but you have a awesome mastery of words as a poet.

      Wowwy! superbly written, and this one is getting shared everywhere I can, voted up indeed!

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      Christy Birmingham 5 years ago from British Columbia, Canada

      I am not a smoker and now I am glad as it does sound like quite a struggle. I wish you all the best in overcoming the habit!

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      Jennifer Stone 5 years ago from the Riverbank, England

      Thanks Julie, so far so good... :-)

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      Blurter of Indiscretions 5 years ago from Clinton CT

      This poem was wonderful. I hope you succeed in your journey!

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      Jennifer Stone 5 years ago from the Riverbank, England

      Movie Master, you really made me smile... just at a point of near weakness too (looking longingly at my husbands tobacco...)! Thank you, and well done! I knew it was possible... lol

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      Movie Master 5 years ago from United Kingdom

      A very funny, creative poem - loved it and can relate to the feeling, this was me this time last year!

      Stick with it - it's going to be a 'tale of strength!

      good luck and voting up

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      Jennifer Stone 5 years ago from the Riverbank, England

      Thanks PHILLYDREAMER, I've actually been looking through your inspiration topics, and may have a different take on the end of the world coming for you soon.... ;-)

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      Jose Velasquez 5 years ago from Lodi, New Jersey

      You've got it bad. Good for you on trying to quit!

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      Jennifer Stone 5 years ago from the Riverbank, England

      Thanks Billy, practising smiling sweetly whenever I feel like ripping someones head off! hehehe Actually feeling pretty good at the moment... so far so good! :-)

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      Bill Holland 5 years ago from Olympia, WA

      Jen, best of luck to you! It is hell trying to quit smoking and I hope today gives you a little more peace.

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      Joshua Zerbini 5 years ago from Pennsylvania

      LOL :) You are welcome Jen, anytime! :)

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      Jennifer Stone 5 years ago from the Riverbank, England

      Thanks Josh... worth a try I thought, and now I have to give up because I've literally told the whole world! lol :-D

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      Jennifer Stone 5 years ago from the Riverbank, England

      Thanks snakeslane, I appreciate your feedback! It gave me something to do for a while... :-)

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      Joshua Zerbini 5 years ago from Pennsylvania

      Very creative idea Jen! I hope you are able to give it up, know that you are not alone Jen. Voted up and interesting.

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      snakeslane 5 years ago from Canada

      Hello Jennifer, writing a giving up smoking poem is probably good therapy, and could be helpful to others. I appreciate the humor. Regards, snakeslane