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Senryu: Father

Updated on September 10, 2013
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When we are young, we all are poets, when we become old we all are philosophers. There are exceptions, people remain poets all their life, and some are philosophers from the beginning, and there are those who are poet and the philosopher, philosopher and the poet.

Poetry comes from the heart and philosophy seeps out of our mind. We learn to unfold our mind when we grow older and then our heart rapidly becomes weak.

Sometimes I’m amused at how much poetic and philosophical we are in our everyday life. Once a friend of mind said something that surprised me a lot. He said: Have you ever tried taking yourself out of you and look at yourself from that place (he pointed at the coffee mug). This guy had never read poetry or philosophy; actually he had never read books apart from his school and college textbooks.

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The senryu I present here are the actual words uttered during everyday conversations between the father and the child (that’s me).


My father said to me:


My Son

I was seeking pleasure

You arrived


I answered:


Already trodden wrong path

Cannot be corrected

Can you, father

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I remember the time when everything crashed. The following day, I packed my rucksack and took a bus. During the 12 hours journey, I began thinking about possibilities.I saw my father’s farm.


Father

I came here to be lost

I found myself


Father and the child were talking about the social problems women in Nepal faced and the new law about “marital rape.”

“Inner consolidation,” the father said and paused for a while. The child completed the sentence.


Fresh wounds of new mothers

That would be treated between men's legs

Father! You were someone there

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How often do you converse with your father?

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My ancestors had helped the Ghurkha King by giving money, during the unification of Nepal in the 18th century. They fought against the autocratic rule in 1950. One day my father was showing me a copy of a document that stated the facts and he suddenly said:


A terrible life being a legend

You are dead

Long before you die


A Publication had accepted his manuscript, but my father retired from the city and went to live in his farm. He has another book about political history of Nepal but he doesn’t want to forward the manuscript to a publication. He has aborted brilliant ideas for fictions and non-fictions. “Have you ever thought yourself as an agriculturist?” I asked. He answered: A gardener...


Burrows time to create an identity

Wants the time to stop

Tomatoes are ripe

© 2011 Vinaya Ghimire

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      Memuna Umber 3 years ago

      I stumbled here by accident, and I am so glad that I did. I really enjoyed reading your hub.

      It made me feel good :)

      Thank you for sharing it with us!

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      Vinaya Ghimire 5 years ago from Nepal

      Hello Vincent,

      Thanks for your heart warming comment. What a wonderful compliments from an accomplished poet/writer/friend.

      Regards

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      Vincent Moore 5 years ago

      Beautiful and meaningful work flowing from a philosophers/poets pen. They are all wonderful and I sense they all came from your heart. Tweeted and shared.

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      Vinaya Ghimire 5 years ago from Nepal

      @Michelle, thanks for plugging my works. I greatly appreciate your comment.

      @Don, thanks for sharing your inputs. I liked your interpretation.

      Cheers

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      DON BALDERAS 5 years ago

      There is always magic when two people converse especially if they are about things that make up their lives and relationship. Coming to terms with many experiences in life, the father would somehow be able to always relate to what the son or daughter has to say. It is in this hope that they take a road where they meet and celebrate differences for after all, life takes all of us to cover gaps created not just by age but by culture.

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      Michelle Liew 5 years ago from Singapore

      Very powerful conversation between father and child....haunting. Thanks for the sharing as well...it complements the haiku perfectly!! Thanks for the share, and I share too.

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      Vinaya Ghimire 5 years ago from Nepal

      Christy, thanks for your wonderful comment. I published poetry and stories in the beginning of my hub career, however, I have stopped doing that because of traffic and other things. Nevertheless, I feel happy when someone reads and comments on my old works.

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      Christy Birmingham 5 years ago from British Columbia, Canada

      The haiku about being a legend is haunting to read. I like the way you line up the different poem together. I looked for your writing hub you mentioned in the comment on my own hub but could not find it. What is the title?

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      Shuva 5 years ago

      Vin, you have wonderful gift. I just loved the haiku in everyday conversations.

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      Vinaya Ghimire 5 years ago from Nepal

      Hi Cathleena,

      thanks for always appreciating my works.

      I'm blessed with a wonderful reader like you.

      Cheers

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      Cathleena Beams 5 years ago from Lascassas, Tennessee

      Another awesome Haiku, Vinaya Ghimire. Love this one as well as the others that I have read. You are very good at this! I will have to give it a try to see if I can do one now that you have told us how. Voting up and sharing!

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      Vinaya Ghimire 5 years ago from Nepal

      Hi pennyofheaven,

      so nice of you to say that.

      Cheers

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      pennyofheaven 5 years ago from New Zealand

      Haikus have never appealed to me until I read your brilliant work! Very powerful stuff with so few words. Thanks

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      Vinaya Ghimire 5 years ago from Nepal

      Hello Jamie, thanks for reading and commenting.

      I hope you are having good time with your father.

      Cheers

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      Jamie Lee Hamann 5 years ago from Reno NV

      you have brought a tear to my eye this father's day. my father will be here soon and your words will resonant throughout the visit. Thank you Vinyana. Jamie

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      Vinaya Ghimire 5 years ago from Nepal

      Hello Christy, thanks for sharing my hub on social media and leaving wonderful comment here, there, everywhere.

      Regards

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      Christy Birmingham 5 years ago from British Columbia, Canada

      What a beautiful tribute Vinaya

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      Vinaya Ghimire 5 years ago from Nepal

      Hi Angel,

      In Nepal, those who don't have father commemorate their father by performing rituals.

      Thanks for wishing my dad and all the dads.

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      Angelme566 5 years ago

      Happy Father's day to your dad and to all good hub dads :)

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      Vinaya Ghimire 5 years ago from Nepal

      Daisy,

      Cyndi,

      Vellur,

      Angel,

      Rajan,

      Tillsontitan,

      Docomo,

      teaches,

      Thank you my dear fellow writers for reading and commenting on my hub. I'm blessed with wonderful friends like you. Cheers

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      Dianna Mendez 5 years ago

      Tender moments to remember for a lifetime. You have describe the Haiku process well, but I still do not have enough faith in myself to attempt such a lovely art form.

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      Mohan Kumar 5 years ago from UK

      profound and meaningful, Vinaya. You are a wise soul, with wisdom as ancient as those Himalayas you live close to. We are lucky to have you here.

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      Mary Craig 5 years ago from New York

      You are poet and philosopher! Beautifully written and very thought provoking. Both your haiku and explanations are touching and food for thought.

      Voted up, awesome and interesting.

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      Rajan Singh Jolly 5 years ago from From Mumbai, presently in Jalandhar,INDIA.

      Beautiful Vinaya.

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      Angelme566 5 years ago

      This hub made me miss more my dad ! Superb :)

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      Nithya Venkat 5 years ago from Dubai

      Great Haiku, beautifully written.

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      Cynthia B Turner 5 years ago from Georgia

      This was a unique and creative presentation of haiku, prose and pictures. Very enjoyable and a wonder way of honoring your dad and your roots. Great work.

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      Daisy Mariposa 5 years ago from Orange County (Southern California)

      Vinaya,

      This is an exquisite presentation...text and Haiku and photographs interspersed.

      Thanks for sharing your words and emotions and part of your life with us, my friend.

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      Vinaya Ghimire 5 years ago from Nepal

      Hello Audrey,

      thank you very much for reading and leaving wonderful comment.

      Regards

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      Audrey Howitt 5 years ago from California

      What an interesting set --it is wonderful that you gave us some background for them--and isn't it funny how life can generate both the conflict and the solution? Loved this deep and caring set!

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      Vinaya Ghimire 5 years ago from Nepal

      Safa, thanks for cheering me up.

      Good night friend!

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      Safa bird 5 years ago

      I will follow people who are nice to me...Don't be surprised when You see me at your door step...heheh...just kidding :)

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      Vinaya Ghimire 5 years ago from Nepal

      Safa, thanks for your wonderful comment, here there, everywhere.

      Thank you very much for sharing socially.

      Regards

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      Safa bird 5 years ago

      Wonderful post. Love the haiku and the photos, especially the first one. Well-done!

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      Vinaya Ghimire 5 years ago from Nepal

      Hi Shelia,

      thank you for always being supportive.

      I'm honored to have you are a writer friend on different writing sites.

      Regards

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      sheilanewton 5 years ago from North Shields, UK

      Splendid work - you sure know how to display a beautiful hub. And even though your poetry and your images are 100% gorgeous, I was the most impressed by your 'Poet's Note' at the beginning. how tru it is that we all start out as poets and end up as philosphers. Oh, Vinaya - this is top drawer!

      Voted up - and across.

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      Vinaya Ghimire 5 years ago from Nepal

      I recommend these wonderful hub authors to the hub community.

      http://hubpages.com/@peggy-w

      http://hubpages.com/@angelme566

      Thank you very much for your wonderful comments.

      Regards

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      Angelme566 5 years ago

      No wonder writer why you are that good..because your genes tells it..Like father like son.

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      Peggy Woods 5 years ago from Houston, Texas

      You have given us a glimpse into your life through your Haiku poetry and also explained a bit about that poetic form of which I knew nothing. One really has to be succinct and choose the few words carefully to exact the meaning intended. Like others have already commented, I always enjoy your photos that you attach to each of your hubs. Voted up and interesting.

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      Vinaya Ghimire 5 years ago from Nepal

      @lovedoctor

      @Jasmin

      Thank you for your comments.

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      Jasmin 5 years ago

      Vinaya, you are so wonderful.

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      lovedoctor926 5 years ago

      I love this piece for some reason. I came back to read again. Keep up the good work my friend:)

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      Vinaya Ghimire 5 years ago from Nepal

      Dear Christy,

      Thanks for reading and leaving a comment.

      Cheers

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      Christy Birmingham 5 years ago from British Columbia, Canada

      I have written Haiku's and I enjoyed the ones you wrote here. Well done!

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      Vinaya Ghimire 5 years ago from Nepal

      @Sunshine

      @lovedoctor

      Thank you very much for always supporting me.

      Regards

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      lovedoctor926 5 years ago

      Your work is impressive. The photos are lovely.

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      Linda Bilyeu 5 years ago from Orlando, FL

      Brilliant as always Vinaya!

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      Vinaya Ghimire 5 years ago from Nepal

      Hi Angel, You are one of my loyal readers. Thanks for leaving wonderful comment.

      take care.

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      angelji 5 years ago

      This is so so wonderful..i am always in love to your piece..loves this lines -Father

      I came here to be lost,

      But instead found myself

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      Vinaya Ghimire 5 years ago from Nepal

      Hello iamaudraleigh, thanks for reading and appreciating my works.

      Cheers

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      iamaudraleigh 5 years ago

      I really like your writings here on hubpages. I am going to try this technique sometime. You are gifted...voted up!

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      Vinaya Ghimire 5 years ago from Nepal

      Hello shimmering dawn, that was wonderful interpretation.

      Thanks for your thought provoking comment

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      shimmering Dawn 5 years ago

      Wonderful thoughts here, in the simplicity of life is born philosophy and poetry. In the reality of life they are nurtured. Beautiful hub. Thanks for sharing.

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      Vinaya Ghimire 5 years ago from Nepal

      Hello, Ram Thapa

      Haiku is Japanese poetry form composed in 17 syllables of 5-7-5 form. Traditionally, there has to be 17 words in three lines of 5-7-5 pattern. However, in modern day haiku, most of the time three lines pattern is followed while 17 syllables are omitted.

      Thanks for stopping by

      Cheers

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      ram thapa ;seru; 5 years ago

      i wanna know about haaiku i mean how can understand haaiku

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      Vinaya Ghimire 5 years ago from Nepal

      Thanks

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      Maya 5 years ago

      This is so wonderful.

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      Vinaya Ghimire 5 years ago from Nepal

      Hello SanneL, thanks for your wonderful comment. I'm honored.

      Cheers

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      SanneL 5 years ago from Sweden

      The gently glimpses of your life in this Haiku poetry, got me to visualize a true and passionate poet.

      So beautiful. . .just so beautiful.

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      Vinaya Ghimire 5 years ago from Nepal

      Hello geetbhim, thanks for reading and taking time to comment. 'geet' what a nice name.

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      sangeeta verma 5 years ago from Ludhiana India

      awesome haiku you have done a great job by narrating the story in your haiku.

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      Vinaya Ghimire 5 years ago from Nepal

      Hello Storytellersrus,

      Thank you very much for your wonderful comment.

      Regards

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      Barbara 5 years ago from Stepping past clutter

      Your haiku appears so simple, but it zings. This is my favorite aspect of a haiku, what I strive for, what you have achieved. Quite brilliant. Thank you.

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      Justin W Price 5 years ago from Juneau, Alaska

      vinaya, you are welcome

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      Vinaya Ghimire 5 years ago from Nepal

      Frank, thanks for your inputs. I understand what you mean.

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      Frank Atanacio 5 years ago from Shelton

      My son I was seeking pleasure... I think the funniest.. keep in mind that even if it wasn't intended to be so..Haiku I ever read loved it VG

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      Vinaya Ghimire 5 years ago from Nepal

      PDX, thanks for stopping by and leaving a wonderful comment.

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      Justin W Price 5 years ago from Juneau, Alaska

      Good work once again, Vinaya. Nice interpretation of the Haiku!

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      Vinaya Ghimire 5 years ago from Nepal

      rebekahELLE, thanks for your appreciation.

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      rebekahELLE 5 years ago from Tampa Bay

      Beautiful! I've always found the haiku to require exceptional talent to do well. I love how you have woven your poetry, content and photos into one very fine hub. Impressive!

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      Vinaya Ghimire 5 years ago from Nepal

      Rosemary, thanks for reading my works and encouraging me every time.

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      Rosemary Sadler 5 years ago from Hawkes Bay - NewZealand

      Vinaya I love the way you have laid out this hub, it is perfect in every way. The photos are lovely and the way you placed the Haiku seems just right to set it all off nicely.

      A very enjoyable read

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      Vinaya Ghimire 5 years ago from Nepal

      @ubanichijioke

      @Sueswan

      Thanks for your words of appreciation. Thanks for your sincere follow.

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      Sueswan 5 years ago

      "I came here to be lost,

      But instead found myself"

      I love this one.

      Voted up and awesome

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      Alexander Thandi Ubani 5 years ago from Lagos

      True to life and realistic conversation. Really fascinating how life can be! Great haiku

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      Vinaya Ghimire 5 years ago from Nepal

      Debby, I'm indebted to your kindness.

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      Debby Bruck 5 years ago

      Applause ~ Applause I am clapping hands [zen] or shall it be one hand clapping?

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      Vinaya Ghimire 5 years ago from Nepal

      Hello Debby

      You said Zen and existentialism! This is one of the best compliments anyone has given me. Thank you very much.

      Regards

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      Debby Bruck 5 years ago

      Hello Vinaya ~ I am reading here original zen and existentialism. Beautiful poetic philosophy from a living poet. Blessings, Debby

      I also agree with the other commenters, including Mar that the humor presents itself in irony.

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      Vinaya Ghimire 5 years ago from Nepal

      @Tom, your input is very illuminating. I'm honored by you presence.

      @Denise, thanks for coming back.

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      Denise Handlon 5 years ago from North Carolina

      Vinaya-well then, no worries, LOL

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      Tom Rubenoff 5 years ago from United States

      It is always a poet's conflict that the most personal things are the most fertile bases of poetry. This is fine work, heart and soul, here.

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      Vinaya Ghimire 5 years ago from Nepal

      @Denise, these days I'm writing too much about my parents. I don't know what will they say once they knew I'm making our life and thoughts public. Actually mother cannot read English and there is no internet connection where my father lives.

      @Ruchira, thanks for your nice compliment.

      @marcoujor, the morning in Kathmandu is chilly, but your comment is warming me. Thanks for believing me.

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      Maria Jordan 5 years ago from Jeffersonville PA

      My son

      I was seeking pleasure

      But you came.

      Vinaya... I have never hit the FUNNY for you before but tonight is the night! And I hereby call you a fellow philosopher and poet... as I have pushed all the other buttons with great joy as well... you are stretching and it becomes you, mar.

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      Ruchira 5 years ago from United States

      Haiku is new to me but your message was clear. I agree that a poet and a philosopher is hidden in all...how we express it is in our hands.

      You have done a remarkable job Vinaya.

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      Denise Handlon 5 years ago from North Carolina

      Vinaya-what a wonderful hub you've shared about your conversations with your father. I'm intrigued to find out more...perhaps a future hub introducing him to us?

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      Vinaya Ghimire 5 years ago from Nepal

      @Docmo

      @makusr

      @jenubouka

      Thanks for your love and admiration.

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      jenubouka 5 years ago

      Beautiful photography once again and I like how you explained the poem, and philosophy it really makes sense to me.

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      Manoj Kumar Srivastava 5 years ago from India

      Vinaya,

      Greetings. You are an excellent photographer my dear friend and have words to hang these photos on. Well done as always.

      With warm wishes,

      MAKUSR

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      Mohan Kumar 5 years ago from UK

      Very well written - I love the way the haiku is interspersed with glimpses of your life. Wonderfully poignant poetry. I agree about how the Japanese originals can reverberate in so many levels due to the pictographic nature of the alphabets and words. But yours come close to evoking such emotion. Bravo.

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      Vinaya Ghimire 5 years ago from Nepal

      snakeslane thanks for you compliment. I hated myself when I said:

      Fresh wounds of new mothers

      That would be treated between a man's legs

      Father! There, at least, you were someone

      @lyns good luck for you novel.

      @dipsmi, thanks for your appreciation.

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      dipsmi 5 years ago from Plymouth, Minnisota

      I never knew about this concept. Your hub is excellent, the pictures are awesome. Thumbs Up!

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      lyns 5 years ago from USA

      You are very welcome, my pleasure will enter more once I complete my novels, thanks for always giving your support as well. lyns

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      Verlie Burroughs 5 years ago from Canada

      This great Vinaya Ghimire, my favorite is

      "Father

      I came here to be lost,

      but instead found myself."

      Your photographs really colour this piece, and it is such a joy to read. Regards, snakeslane

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      Vinaya Ghimire 5 years ago from Nepal

      Dear lyns

      Thanks for entering into my world.

      Regards

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      lyns 5 years ago from USA

      Hello Vinaya Ghimire, thank you for sharing this hub very interesting learned alot about writings I wasn't aware of, h words interchanging, excellent I have to look more into this. I voted up, Interesting, Beautiful...

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      Vinaya Ghimire 5 years ago from Nepal

      Happyboomnurse, I have no words, I'm speechless.

      Thank you...thank you very much.

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      Gail Sobotkin 5 years ago from South Carolina

      I agree with Hyphenbird that this was beautiful although painful at times. Your imagery was clear and deep and the feeling I was left with after reading the hub in its entirety was that you received the gift of writing and poetry from your father and are embracing and following your passion and gift for writing and sharing it with the world whereas your father seemed to have trouble embracing his own gift.

      How wonderful that you are pursuing your dreams of writing. Out of all your hubs that I've read before this one touched me most as it gave the most insight into your character. You have found yourself, and at an age much younger than most.

      Voted up, awesome, beautiful and interesting.

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      Vinaya Ghimire 5 years ago from Nepal

      You have made my morning very beautiful. Thank you very much. You are wonderful hub authors and wonderful commentators. Anyone stopping here please read their works.

      Hypenbird

      Movie Master

      Flora

      always exploring

      b. Malin

      Cardisa

      PS:

      Hypenbird, thank you for following me. Shame on me I was not following you.

      Movie Master, forget about 17 syllables and remember there are only three lines. Your haiku is ready.

      Flora since this is a poetry I have tried to be sincere, anecdotes and haikus are parts of my life

      always exploring thank you very much for seeing what I wanted you to see.

      b. Malin so kind of you.

      Cardisa, you looked beyond words, so nice of you.

      jimmy, thanks for your appreciation.

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      jimmycloud 5 years ago from India

      wonderful job you done. The thing that i most liked is the image that is on top.