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Hard Slap of Reality

Updated on February 5, 2015

Time would snap,

everything would unfold,

in late November and early December

the cold hard slap

of reality was told,

it was a lady of the evening

stretched out in the early morning light,

a victim of the night,

there were no signs of a struggle,

she didn't even put up a fight,

dead for hours,

before anyone found the body,

the air around her stayed red,

a plastic clear bag around her head,

only death confessed,

as she laid there half undressed,

she was one of many terrorized hookers

who failed the test,

with an unsightly hole

in her upper right chest,

her life struggled

as it ended up in defeat,

but these were the types of crimes,

that kept the police glued to the street,

cold depression would hit,

the killer was a mental case,

and there was no question about it.

© 2014 Frank Atanacio

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      Susan Zutautas 2 years ago from Ontario, Canada

      Awesome as usual Frank!

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      Frank Atanacio 2 years ago from Shelton

      thank you Susan :)

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      Bill Holland 2 years ago from Olympia, WA

      Dark but awesome, a scene playing out in every major city...the mean streets come alive in your poem, Frank. Well done!

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      Frank Atanacio 2 years ago from Shelton

      thank you billybuc for taking that walk down these mean streets :)

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      Ann Carr 2 years ago from SW England

      Another sound poem from you, Frank. It's sad how disposable some life seems to be. Great poetry makes us think and this does just that.

      Ann

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      Frank Atanacio 2 years ago from Shelton

      annart thank you i like the comment: it's sad how disposable some life seems to be... :) bless you

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      Jo Alexis-Hagues 2 years ago from Bedfordshire, U.K

      Frank, what can one say, simply awesome. Hard hitting but so very sad. As only you can do. Well done.

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      Frank Atanacio 2 years ago from Shelton

      thank you tobusiness for stopping by :)

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      Nell Rose 2 years ago from England

      Hi Frank, that was so true in every town and every city, and sadly to often, awesome poem!

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      Clive Williams 2 years ago from Nibiru

      Love the poem frank, wish it had more, was just getting into it.

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      bluebird 2 years ago

      Reality can be cruel, in life, and in poetry.

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      Frank Atanacio 2 years ago from Shelton

      thank you so much, Nell Rose, Clive and bluebird for commenting on my slap...:)

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      Ruby Jean Fuller 2 years ago from Southern Illinois

      Another one bit the dust. Sad how many sociopaths love to kill hookers. Frank you are soo good at this type of genre. Loved it...

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      Kept private 2 years ago from Northeast United States

      A Slap in the face of creativity. I needed that :) ! Great work.

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      Faith Reaper 2 years ago from southern USA

      Reality certainly slaps us hard, and even more so it seems these days, dear Frank. In the city in which I work, it matters not what time of day or person for it seems killing nowadays does not have to have any reasoning behind the motive for killing; it's just killing to kill.

      Awesome poem. Your photos of freezing weather added to the chilling scene your words already painted here.

      Blessings

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      Dora Isaac Weithers 2 years ago from The Caribbean

      How gruesome this scene, but you managed some beautiful lines: "lady of the evening . . . in the early morning light . . . victim of the night." The entire day is tainted. What a pity! Great write.

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      Frank Atanacio 2 years ago from Shelton

      thank you always exploring for reading my stuff .. bless you

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      Frank Atanacio 2 years ago from Shelton

      thanks carrie lee

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      Frank Atanacio 2 years ago from Shelton

      Faith you are always visiting and I thank you so much for that bless you girl :)

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      Frank Atanacio 2 years ago from Shelton

      MsDora thank you for the visit good to see you too :)

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      Faith Reaper 2 years ago from southern USA

      Always my pleasure : )

      Sorry I missed out on your last challenge. I have a lot going on right now, but hope to start responding to all of these wonderful challenges being issued here in HP Town by writing something myself.

      Have a blessed day now!

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      Frank Atanacio 2 years ago from Shelton

      Well, take care of your business, but i miss you my virtual friend :)

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      Mary Craig 2 years ago from New York

      Here we are again in the harsh reality of crime. Something man has tried to end for centuries and yet it seems to grow. Your writing, as always spells it out in a way that chills our souls.

      Voted up, awesome, and interesting.

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      Frank Atanacio 2 years ago from Shelton

      Till, thank you so much for reading my slap

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      Faith Reaper 2 years ago from southern USA

      Sweet of you to say ... that is the reality I like, a sweet one : )

      It is nice to be missed, and I promise to get back to writing up a storm soon.

      Hugs

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      Frank Atanacio 2 years ago from Shelton

      ill be waiting for that storm girl :) bless you

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      FlourishAnyway 2 years ago from USA

      What a way with words you have, Frank. Voted up and more, and sharing.

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      Paula 2 years ago from Beautiful Upstate New York

      Outstanding, Frank. Your works are powerful. This comes to life as we read.....you have the gift. UP++shared across the board.

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      Frank Atanacio 2 years ago from Shelton

      thanks so much Flourish always good to see you and fpherj48 thanks for the comment and visit..:) Frank

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      Maria Antonia 2 years ago from North Carolina

      Wow, what a powerful poem. In a few short words you painted such a vivid picture of a tragic event. Just brilliant!

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      Frank Atanacio 2 years ago from Shelton

      thanks Maria :)

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      Dilip Chandra 2 years ago from India

      Written so well, the describing was so awesome.

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      Frank Atanacio 2 years ago from Shelton

      than you dilip.. for reading my hard slap

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      Alastar Packer 2 years ago from North Carolina

      Maybe this a moment of synchronicity, Frank . Just last night I was going over the famous photos by Bellocq made in a brothel in New Orleans in 1912. You encapsulate it all so well here my friend.

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      Frank Atanacio 2 years ago from Shelton

      thanks so Much A&P... good to see you too bro

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      Frank Atanacio 2 years ago from Shelton

      i agree young ladyfiddler :)

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      Peg Cole 2 years ago from Dallas, Texas

      Sad end to this short life here. It seems to be a hazard of the trade for these poor women who suffer such violence and hardship. You've captured the essence of the scene well, as usual, Frank.

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      Tijani Achamlal 2 years ago from Morocco

      Hats off to you.Excellent job.Voted up.

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      Frank Atanacio 2 years ago from Shelton

      thank you so much pegcole and james for visiting my slap

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      Genna East 2 years ago from Massachusetts, USA

      These are the sights we don't see on those brutal, cold streets -- regardless of the weather or season, or century in time. Awesome writing, Frank.

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      Frank Atanacio 2 years ago from Shelton

      Genna thank you again bless you

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      StricktlyDating 2 years ago from Australia

      Voted up, you're very talented!

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      Frank Atanacio 2 years ago from Shelton

      thanks strictly...:)

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      Smilealot 2 years ago

      I have missed your hard slaps of reality Frank...good work :-)

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      The Examiner-1 2 years ago

      Interesting Frank. You have a way of putting a bit of a twist on reality.

      Kevin

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      Frank Atanacio 2 years ago from Shelton

      good to see you smilealot .. thanks for stopping by and Examiner always a pleasure having you on my pages..:) bless you both

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      Mary Craig 2 years ago from New York

      Cold depression hits us every time we hear the latest news. Poor hooker probably never hurt anyone. This certainly gives chills and pause to think!

      Voted up, awesome, and interesting.

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      Frank Atanacio 2 years ago from Shelton

      thank you again my friend Till... bless you

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      Evelia Veronica Rivera 2 years ago from Bridgeport, CT

      Thumbs up

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      Frank Atanacio 2 years ago from Shelton

      thanks A-C

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      Audrey Howitt 2 years ago from California

      Always a pleasure to read your work Frank! I really like your poetry nd would love to see more of it!

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      Kiss andTales 2 years ago

      Very well written ,but so real is this poem ,

      I live between Indiana and IL. We just had a serial killer who killed 7 women so far of this type.

      Very sad to know how people value life. Very sad when I read this poem of truth.

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      Frank Atanacio 2 years ago from Shelton

      thank you for stopping by Kiss

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      Frank Atanacio 2 years ago from Shelton

      thank you so much Audrey.. good to see you

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      lovedoctor926 2 years ago

      As I am reading this poem, I am able to visualize the images and details in my mind. The picture that you used makes a great writing prompt. Good work as usual. I am doing well, thank you. Hope you had a wonderful Thanksgiving holiday with your family. Doc.

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      Frank Atanacio 2 years ago from Shelton

      oh my goodness... so good to see you..wow Im glad you are okay and I hope you have a good holiday with your family :)

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      lovedoctor926 2 years ago

      Thank you. Really? ok. lol. Happy Holidays to you too:)

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      Frank Atanacio 2 years ago from Shelton

      of course silly..bless you

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      Tim Mitchell 2 years ago from Escondido, CA

      Awakening! I hope one day to be reading one of your books at Amazon too! Soon I hope. I have always admired your consistency discovering inspiration. Thank you for the encouragement, the comment, and the visit :-)

      tim

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      Frank Atanacio 2 years ago from Shelton

      thanks again Tsmog for your visit and comment bless you

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