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He Fell Down In Love

Updated on April 30, 2012



Pretentious is the feeling, stabbing wounds in the back

Piercing through your heart, ripping through soul



Deceitful is the act, pouring feelings from eyes

Roll down hit the rock, Spatter… the man cries



Trembling, his hands clasped on his chest

He mourned He wept, Torn in disdain



Evil the repayment made in his blood

His blood which spoke of her each thud



Fickle, the expressions tore open scars

Spew out red liked thwarted by bars



Treachery at hand so heart-felt

Left him for dead, on thorns he knelt



Tyranny left thee smothered each moment

Perennial sorrows he shall solely lament



Cruel the hands inflicted so much pain

A specter remained … soul lost , slain



Brutal the carvings in his soft skin

He was unrecognizable, even to his kin



Selfish the thoughts of one dark lady

Shred the selfless being. Painfully unready



Deeper he fell and Lunacy took its turns

The fire eluded, the scar still burns



Pain! Thy heart fell on the bed of nails

For it was love he fell in, he had no sails



© rahul0324.hubpages.com / Rahul Rakesh




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      Jessee R 5 years ago from Gurgaon, India

      I am glad you connected to it Naimishika.. Thank you so much

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      Jessee R 5 years ago from Gurgaon, India

      I am humbled by the support you have offered me Max! Really my friend, you comments make my day :)

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      BeyondMax 5 years ago from Sydney, Australia

      Overwhelming, so intense and mind blowing poem, I was literally stunned into emotional silence from such powerful experience.

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      Jessee R 5 years ago from Gurgaon, India

      Thanks Alex! Glad you liked my work!

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      Alex Jose 5 years ago from Cleveland, Ohio

      Truly awesome poem....very touching...

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      Jessee R 5 years ago from Gurgaon, India

      What a beautiful comment we have My friend Vincent!

      "His soul bleached by the venom left there by the eve who killed his heart in the process"

      I am amazed by the line you put which speaks volumes more than my words..

      What an honor to receive such feedback

      Thank you Sir :)

      I cannot express how humbled I am

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      Vincent Moore 5 years ago

      You painted from your wonderful brilliant colors of dark and greys the pain and affliction suffered by a man who is lost. His soul bleached by the venom left there by the eve who killed his heart in the process. Your pictures fit the sadness this epic piece it portrays. You are a gifted poet and I admire your work. Bravo, well done Voted up, awesome, beautiful, yet a broken man left in it's path.

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      Jessee R 5 years ago from Gurgaon, India

      Hi Raci! Thank you so much

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      Jessee R 5 years ago from Gurgaon, India

      Thanks a lot GBY! Much Appreciated :)

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      raciniwa 5 years ago from Naga City, Cebu

      what a powerful emotion you have expressed here Rahul...so intense...

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      stars439 5 years ago from Louisiana, The Magnolia and Pelican State.

      Fantastic expression, and work. GBY.

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      Jessee R 5 years ago from Gurgaon, India

      Thanks Nate:)

      much appreciated:)

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      Nathan K 5 years ago from Kansas

      This is pretty good man!

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      Jessee R 5 years ago from Gurgaon, India

      Thanks for the words of kindness Sheila! Much Appreciated!

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      sheilanewton 5 years ago from North Shields, UK

      Great stuff with lots of light - and lots of darkness too. Wonderful imagery in your language. Voted up and awesome.

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      Jessee R 5 years ago from Gurgaon, India

      Hi Lily! Thanks for stopping by and ushering your kind comments!

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      Jessee R 5 years ago from Gurgaon, India

      Thank you for stopping by and commenting Bhanu!

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      Lillian K. Staats 5 years ago from Wasilla, Alaska

      Very, very good-brutal and tender at the same time... love it! lily

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      Bhawana Salaria 5 years ago from Australia

      Really Good

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      Jessee R 5 years ago from Gurgaon, India

      Hi Blaise! Thanks for the heart-felt comment!

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      Fehl Dungo 5 years ago from close to you...

      Shattered pieces so deeply felt..Just pounding. Excellent.

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      Jessee R 5 years ago from Gurgaon, India

      I agree with you Timetraveller! One is incomplete wihtout the experience love gives

      Thank you for stopping by :)

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      TIMETRAVELER2 5 years ago

      This was beautiful, and I just loved the title. Love certainly is a double edged sword, but "tis better to have loved and lost, than to never have loved at all". Great job here!

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      Jessee R 5 years ago from Gurgaon, India

      Thank you Perspy! Your kind comments are much appreciated! Your work is truly far more skilled and polished than mine...

      Thanks again Sir!

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      Demas W Jasper 5 years ago from Today's America and The World Beyond

      There's not much that I can add to what has already been said, except keep going. Thank you for your comments on my efforts. Onward and upward!

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      Jessee R 5 years ago from Gurgaon, India

      Thank you Sannel! I am humbled in the presence of your kindness! :)

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      SanneL 5 years ago from Sweden

      Oh, so much sorrow and heart-wrenching pain. This was quite moving my friend. You succeeded to bring so much power into every chosen word. Voted up and shared. Great work1

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      Jessee R 5 years ago from Gurgaon, India

      Hi Juris! Its so nice to see you! Thank you for your kind words

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      D.Juris Stetser 5 years ago from South Dakota

      rahul, you are truly amazing. every image captured me and made me feel the pain and anguish. You are a master!

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      Jessee R 5 years ago from Gurgaon, India

      Jamie... the pleasure is all mine :)

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      Jessee R 5 years ago from Gurgaon, India

      Jennifer! Thank a lot for stopping by!

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      Jessee R 5 years ago from Gurgaon, India

      Thanks Anan! Your a gem of a person! Thank you for your blessings!

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      Jessee R 5 years ago from Gurgaon, India

      Thanks Mike...

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      Jamie Lee Hamann 5 years ago from Reno NV

      Thank you. Jamie

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      Vampsdes 5 years ago from Missouri, US

      That was quite beautiful! You are definitely gifted! Voted up :)

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      Anan Celeste 5 years ago from California

      As always, a masterpiece of emotion. You were blesses with the gift of words and a heart of a true poet. Blessings.

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      empire mike 5 years ago from empire, colorado

      superb!!!

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      Jessee R 5 years ago from Gurgaon, India

      Thank you Lesley! I am glad you liked it :)

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      Movie Master 5 years ago from United Kingdom

      Awesome writing rahul!

      Loved it and voted up, take care Lesley

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      Jessee R 5 years ago from Gurgaon, India

      Thanks Camo!

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      Jessee R 5 years ago from Gurgaon, India

      Thanks weestro! Glad you liked it :)

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      Jessee R 5 years ago from Gurgaon, India

      Thanks so much Stacy! It's a poets delight to hear such kind comments like these!

      Love you loads :)

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      Jessee R 5 years ago from Gurgaon, India

      Thanks Dawn... your comments are always appreciated!

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      Jessee R 5 years ago from Gurgaon, India

      Thanks Lord! Kind comments coming from the Lord himself!

      Glad you appreciated my efforts! :) Thanks for stopping by

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      Camo Girl 5 years ago

      Very Good Hub!!!!

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      Pete Fanning 5 years ago from Virginia

      Great job, that was fantastic!

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      Stacy Harris 5 years ago from Hemet, Ca

      Wow, wow, wow.... this was absolutely amazing. Some people just have a knack for poetry and using regular words and making them strong... You have this power! Absoltuely beautiful!

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      shimmering Dawn 5 years ago

      Lovely work Rahul! Have a blessed day!

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      Joseph De Cross 5 years ago

      Wonderful piece Rahul. I see you growing and bettering your work. HP is becoming aware of yor potentiality and your friends and followers pour the best of comments. There is not much to add... than overwhelming!

      LORD

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      Jessee R 5 years ago from Gurgaon, India

      Thanks for stopping by DK!

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      dkalvarez 5 years ago from Boca Raton, FL

      Voted up. Nicely done.

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      Jessee R 5 years ago from Gurgaon, India

      Hi Mary! Thanks for such kind words and your time! I am glad you liked it!

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      Mary Craig 5 years ago from New York

      This is one of those poems that makes you stop with each line and think about what you have just read, try to take it all in. A truly thought provoking and beautiful piece. Voted up.

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      Jessee R 5 years ago from Gurgaon, India

      Thanks Vellur! Glad you connected :)

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      Nithya Venkat 5 years ago from Dubai

      Deep thoughts of betrayed love beautifully expressed. Voted up.

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      Jessee R 5 years ago from Gurgaon, India

      Colin! Thank you for your visit! I am honored to be visited by the Lord Himself!

      9 35 am IST

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      Jessee R 5 years ago from Gurgaon, India

      Thanks for the Visit Sheila! Your kind comments are much appreciated!

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      Jessee R 5 years ago from Gurgaon, India

      I am glad you connected in such a manner love! A poets dream is to create vivid pictures and feelings in the readers mind. Thank you!

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      epigramman 5 years ago

      ...a great poet you are of the highest order Sir Rahul - and two emotions which are universal to the entire human race - laughter and tears - lake erie time 10:29pm

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      sheilanewton 5 years ago from North Shields, UK

      LOVED your starter words for each stanza. Amazing. Love the message you send out too. Exceptional work.

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      lovedoctor926 5 years ago

      The imagery is awesome! While reading this poem, I felt true emotions. You're a gifted poet.

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      Jessee R 5 years ago from Gurgaon, India

      Voronwe! I am so humbled by your words... I always try to share feelings with ink and I am glad you connected!

      Thank you for your time! It is much appreciated! :)

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      Jessee R 5 years ago from Gurgaon, India

      Thank you Calo! Nice to see you!

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      Jessee R 5 years ago from Gurgaon, India

      Tobusiness! You have always been too kind to me... thank you for your time and care you have shown!

      Love you!

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      Jessee R 5 years ago from Gurgaon, India

      Hi Snigdha! Thanks for the kind comment and time you took out for my work! I am humbled! Glad you connected to my work!

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      Jessee R 5 years ago from Gurgaon, India

      Unknown Spy, thank you for your words of kindness

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      Jessee R 5 years ago from Gurgaon, India

      Hi Rose! Thank you for such kind comments and the votes! Glad you connected to the pain!

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      Jessee R 5 years ago from Gurgaon, India

      Thank you for your time Nighthag! I am glad you liked my work and connected in such a manner!

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      Voronwe 5 years ago

      There's a sort of deep silence in your poetry...your words draw us in to feel them, not just to read or appraise them from far. Brilliant work!

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      Daniel Cavazos 5 years ago from El Paso, TX

      Nicely done!

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      Jo Alexis-Hagues 5 years ago from Bedfordshire, U.K

      Rahul, you are the magician, you transform mere words into magic to grab the reader, then you hold us till the bitter end. You're blessed with an amazing gift.

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      snigdha.s 5 years ago from India,mumbai

      You expressed pain very well.One can feel it while reading this wonderful poem.Your choice of words is brilliant to say the least.It leaves an everlasting impression.

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      IAmForbidden 5 years ago from Neverland - where children never grow up.

      you are so good in writing poems Rahul. Keep it up!

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      Gypsy Rose Lee 5 years ago from Riga, Latvia

      Rahul it rates all three voted up, awesome and beautiful. Took my breath away and so heart wrenching. Pain with every heartbeat. You expressed it so well.

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      K.A.E Grove 5 years ago from Australia

      This was very very good, a powerful read that bathes the reader in emotion from begining to end. Artfully done!

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      Jessee R 5 years ago from Gurgaon, India

      Thank you Debbie! Your love and care grow more on me each moment!

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      Deborah Brooks Langford 5 years ago from Brownsville,TX

      wow my dear Rahul.. my son this is AMAZING!!!! Your words make me speechless.. it is that beautiful

      I am sharing my son

      Debbie

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      Jessee R 5 years ago from Gurgaon, India

      Thank you Deborah! It feels nice when some one connects to your pain! :)

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      Deborah Turner 5 years ago from Surprise Arizona

      Wow! That was very powerful, emotional, and heartfelt. I could feel it through each painful word. Sad yet beautiful.

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      Jessee R 5 years ago from Gurgaon, India

      Thanks Faith! There's a definite heart wrench here... straight from my heart... as it now lies in a pool of its own blood :(... glad you connected to the pain!

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      Jessee R 5 years ago from Gurgaon, India

      Good Morning Angel! I am certainly not the best! :)

      Just wrote what I was feeling in these wee hours... for me.. pen and poetry have become my friends and HP my family!

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      Jessee R 5 years ago from Gurgaon, India

      Thanks for stopping by Darryl! Your kind comment is much appreciated!

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      Jessee R 5 years ago from Gurgaon, India

      Hi Ishika! Glad you liked the poem!

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      Jessee R 5 years ago from Gurgaon, India

      Thanks Joyce for the kind words! I am glad you liked my work!

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      Jessee R 5 years ago from Gurgaon, India

      Thank you Audrey!

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      Faith Reaper 5 years ago from southern USA

      Rahul, I could feel the heart-wrenching pain in every word. Well done! In His Love, Faith Reaper

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      Angelme566 5 years ago

      Wow..you're an amazing poet dost ! Your lines are soothing and soulful..every bit seems pinches a reader. This such a class A poem. You're the best ! Good Morning !

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      win-winresources 5 years ago from Colorado

      Rahul-

      Very heartfelt.

      -DW

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      Venugopaal 5 years ago from India

      Wow!!!! Rahul Nice. i found it so interesting and meaningful.

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      Joyce Haragsim 5 years ago from Southern Nevada

      Wow! This is an throughly excellant.

      Voted up awesome and beautiful.

      Dr Cil is right trying to find the right words.

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      Audrey Howitt 5 years ago from California

      Beautifully done!

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      Jessee R 5 years ago from Gurgaon, India

      Thank you Cil!

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      Dr Cil 5 years ago

      So Beautiful, words can't express the feeling that came over me when reading this wonderful piece of art!