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Her last ride, Flash fiction
She wondered what it would feel like riding in a limo, seeing a broadway show in New York.
Tina was driving her ford F-150 pickup truck through the quiet uneventful streets in her little hometown in Skidmore, Tx., population nine hundred and twenty five. Driving past the high school, one lone grocery store, the dairy queen, where she worked in the summer before starting college in Saratoga Springs, just a few miles away.
Tina's eyes were tearing up so badly.
She promised Ted, her fiancé, they would get married in June. They both just graduated from college. Ted had gone to work where everyone else in town worked, the Shell oil company. He was hired for a really good paying position. He would be head of the petroleum engineers where they designed and developed methods for extracting oil and gas from deposits below the earth's surface.
Waking up this morning, feeling rushed and uncertain. Tina wanted something more but what?
She pondered what it would be like to ride in a limo, see a broadway show, visit the art musium in New York, but how could she possibly explain her need for something more before settling down in this sleepy little town?
Tina and Ted grew up next door to each other. Fell in love in highschool. After graduation from college their families had planned a beautiful June wedding.
The sudden urge to step on the gas pedal and high tail it out of Dodge was strong and persistent. The interstate was up ahead, all she had to do was go east to find the excitement she craved. Never looking back once, waving her final goodbye, and floorboarding the gas pedal, she entered the interstate.
The impact of the crash was a crushing blow
The last thing she saw was a long black limousine covering her body before death took her permanently from her sleepy little hometown.
Comments
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Hello Cam. Happy you enjoyed. Thank you..
Well done here, Ruby. Way to take the story in a direction no one was expecting. I like that.
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Kevin, I hadn't replied to your last comment, if you'll notice my comment is just under your comment. Anyhow, thank's again...
Which one Ruby? You replied to the one that I made 13 days ago.
Kevin
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Kevin, I just now saw your comment. Thank you again. I don't know how I missed it...Cheers
You are welcome Ruby. :-)
Have a nice day.
Kevin
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Well now, that's something to think about Kevin. Thank's for the encouragement...
How about a book of Flash Fiction, Ruby?
Kevin
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Hello again Kevin. I can't imagine me writing a book, really I have no desire to, but thank you for thinking I might. I've just recently started writing flash fiction. It really is a lot of fun. I'm so glad you liked it. Thank you so much..
It was a surprise Ruby but you did give it the title "Her Last Ride". I just became so enthralled in the story that it hit me by surprise but there are many books on the market by great writers which have the same thing. Write more like that and we may see you out there!
Kevin
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Hello Kevin. I'm so glad you liked my story. I wasn't too sure about the ending, but I went with my dark muse. lol Thank you for sharing...
That story was terrific Ruby! Well, not the ending but the writing was. It was so real and life-like. I voted it up, up, up and away, shared, FB and pinned it.
Kevin
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Hello Lisa. So glad you enjoyed. Surprise endings are fun to try...
Wow this was really good! I certainly did not expect it to end that way! I truly enjoyed it. Thank you for sharing!
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Woopie, Mar arrived on the scene with a BANG! Your comment BLOWS me away. I love taking risks, let's face it, I love to use my imagination in writing a story. I'm thrilled you think it's a hit, go figure, I didn't want to rhyme. Hee..Thank you dear one..
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Hello radhikasree. Thank you for your compelling read comment. So happy you enjoyed and thank's for sharing..
Shazam...! I'm in a 'Ruby state of mind...' - and that's a state of euphoria, dear girlfriend.
Your writing is never, ever predictable. I love the risks you take and the range you share with us... this was a HIT...!
Voting UP and UABI and sharing. Love and hugs, mar
It was a compelling read Ruby, though tragic. Voted up, beautiful and interesting. Shared also.
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Hello Susan. I'm thrilled that you enjoy reading my hubs. Thank you...
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Thank's Will. Glad you didn't see it coming...
Amazingly written Ruby. I always enjoy reading your hubs.
Whoa! I never saw that coming! What an ironic tale.
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Hi Peg. I'm happy that you enjoyed my story and surprise ending...Thank you so much..
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Hello Mary. I had no idea that you could find out so much just by googling a question. Bill is a great teacher. I've learned so much from reading his hubs. Thank you for the awesome vote....
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Hi daghoglund. Flash fiction is a newer genre for me, I usually write poetry, but I enjoyed reading flash fiction so much, I had to try it. Happy you liked the surprise ending. Thank you for sharing...
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Hello Genna. I absolutely love writing flash fiction, go figure? I really did think about taking Tina to N.Y. but my mean ole muse stepped in. lol..Your comments on my hubs are so endearing. Thank you so much...
Interesting twist of fate in this one Ruby. I enjoyed this story and the surprise ending.
You definitely got us all with this one! So well done my friend. Here we thought we were going to NYC, plus you did a great job with Bill's challenge.
Voted up, awesome, and interesting.
Some time ago I wrote some flash fiction stories but got back to some longer ones. You did well to get a surprise twist to the ending. sharing.
Wow, Ruby! You are getting so skilled with this genre! Like Tina, I really didn’t see that one coming; it was hard hitting and resolute, such as the way life hits us sometimes, out of nowhere, as we embark upon our dreams. And the sight of the limousine... Excellent writing. Voted up and sharing
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Hello Iris. I love writing flash fiction, it's short and usually has a surprise ending. So glad you liked this one. Thank you..
Nice job. I've just started reading flash fiction. It seems to demand not just creativity but constructive skills as well. I liked your a lot.
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Hello Shyron. I don't like unhappy endings but this is where my muse took me, sigh..I'm glad you thought it was interesting. Thank you.
Blessings dear friend
Ruby, that one was a curve ball for sure, I thought Tina was off on an adventure that would continue, on for a few more hubs.
It was very interesting anyway. I hope Ted did not realize that she was leaving him had she not died.
Voted up, AI and shared
Blessings dear friend
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I meant description Blossom...
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Hello Blossom. Young and foolish would be a good description. Thank you so much...
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Hello manatita. I thought about taking her to New York, but my dark muse jumped aboard. Lol. Cheers my friend..
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Hello Jo and thank you for the awesome comment...
Oh, dear! We do need to learn to be happy with our lot in life. If your story was real, and I guess it's been played out many times in real life, what sadness she has caused for her loved ones by only thinking about herself. Good write!
I did think that it was going to be sad. Interesting way to go. Well written Hub. Much peace.
A life cut short, sad and so very tragic. Life can be so cruel. You really excel at writing these flash fictions. Interesting and pretty awesome.
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Shauna, I agree. Thank you..
Oh, how tragic! Lesson learned: be careful what you wish for.
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Hello DDE, so glad you enjoyed. Thank you for commenting..
You are showing a hidden talent more and more in all your writing. I am glad to have stopped by here. I enjoyed reading!
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Hello Frank. You and Cam are the master flash fiction writers. I'm learning as I go. I must say that I love this genre. Thank you..
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Hello Theresa. Your awesome comment makes me a happy camper! thank you so much...
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Hello John. I had fun with this one, writing about a place I'd never been. I'm happy you liked it. I was going to take her to New York but my dark muse insisted on the tragic ending. lol. thank you...
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Hello DJ. Just spreading my wings, trying something new. Thank's for the great job comment.
You are getting so much better.. I really enjoyed this piece of fiction.... didn't feel too short.. but it was quick :) LOL voted awesome
Wow, Ruby, this one really grabs hold and then ... KABOOM! What a great flash fiction piece here. Did not see that coming, and that means it is awesome.
Up awesome and interesting, tweeting, pinning, G+ and sharing
Be careful of what we wish for!
Keep these coming ...
This was great flash fiction Ruby..loved the surprise ending even though it was tragic. You are getting really good at this.
I was surprised on the ending of this one.
Great job, Ruby!
DJ.
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I did what you said this week about writing about a town you'd never been in. I googled a small town in Tx. And Skidmore, Tx. came up with all the info. It was fun. I'm happy you enjoyed my ironic piece. Thank you...
I think that falls under the category of "ironic." :) I didn't see that one coming, but I enjoyed it greatly.
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