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Hopelessly Deadlocked

Updated on September 26, 2012


The morning sun once sharp as blades,

outside the courtroom window

weakens and fades,

giving way to the afternoon shades,

as the drama would coat,

six hours brought only a note

from the jury foreman,

hopelessly deadlocked,

the judge’s eyes cocked,

raw doubt stuck in their throats,

and the truth floats,

as the angry voice

of the lead detective shouted out

vulgar words of his choice,

what’s the legal system for?

The lead detective swallowed hard,

and retreated into the corridor,

as he paced back and forth

on the courthouse’s marble floor,

in a smoldering rage,

like an animal in a cage,

he gave them all they needed,

page for page,

an eyewitness, fingerprints,

a jailhouse confession,

but what he got back

was a false impression,

a compromise here

should never meet,

guilty, he goes to prison,

and in there he’ll feel the heat,

not guilty,

he goes back out on the street,

a serial killer has needs,

he’ll go back to doing his

dirty little deeds.

© 2012 Frank Atanacio

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      Frank Atanacio 3 years ago from Shelton

      thank you Marlene :)

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      lovedoctor926 5 years ago

      I like your introduction. This is really good. Your poems always tell a story. Good work Frank.

      "The morning sun once sharp as blades,

      outside the courtroom window

      weakens and fades,

      giving way to the afternoon shades."

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      Frank Atanacio 5 years ago from Shelton

      thank you Aisha :)

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      Aisha Jilani 5 years ago from Lahore

      deep words .... keep it up

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      Frank Atanacio 5 years ago from Shelton

      thanks VG ..:)

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      Vinaya Ghimire 5 years ago from Nepal

      Frank,I can feel the anticipation of the man in the witness box.

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      Frank Atanacio 5 years ago from Shelton

      thanks so much mckbird...

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      mckbirdbks 5 years ago from Emerald Wells, Just off the crossroads,Texas

      dead unlocked - you are the master of this genre. It's completely arresting.

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      Frank Atanacio 5 years ago from Shelton

      Epi thanks for stopping by my friend and Ill check out your latest entry ...Frank

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      epigramman 5 years ago

      ...what's that old line , Frank, in Dragnet, where he says -"there's a thousand untold stories in this city and Frank has told each and everyone of them" ....well I never miss an opportunity to tell you and the hub world that you are one of my favorite writer/poets here - and if you want to read a real dark funny one then check out my latest in a little shameless self promotion here called Rising to the occasion.

      lake erie time 8:09pm

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      Frank Atanacio 5 years ago from Shelton

      thans gypsy rose lee

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      Gypsy Rose Lee 5 years ago from Riga, Latvia

      Voted up. Just great. I call this a chiller thriller. Who needs a serial killer on the streets.

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      Frank Atanacio 5 years ago from Shelton

      thanks Ruch for your visit and comment..bless you

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      Ruchira 5 years ago from United States

      As usual you hit the nail at the right spot. However, I do hope that justice prevails and may the innocent be spared...Amen.

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      Frank Atanacio 5 years ago from Shelton

      Imkarn and thelyricwriter thank you for visiting and making a comment for my deadlock ... and thelyricwriter seeing is believing right? LOL bless you both..

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      Richard Ricky Hale 5 years ago from West Virginia

      Frank, now this one is a classic. Up, awesome, and interesting. Frank, when you can see what your reading, that is a special writer. I have no issues seeing with you writings, shows the level of talent you have Frank. Another awesome job.

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      Frank Atanacio 5 years ago from Shelton

      dghbrh and Rosemay thanks for visiting my deadlock and thanks for the comments bless you guys...) Frank

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      Frank Atanacio 5 years ago from Shelton

      Joyce and Faith thank you so much for stopping by my deadlock bless you guys :)

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      Karen Silverman 5 years ago

      Sigh...doesn't it seem that these days the legal system is more of a crapshoot than anything else? You've captured that beautifully here, Frank! That detective's got heart!

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      deergha 5 years ago from ...... a place beyond now and beyond here !!!

      Hey Frank its outstanding ....you really do some thrilling work here. I think its really something to put so much with so little words and that too through a poetry. All votes up and I am sharing it too.

      Thanks for sharing this one.

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      Rosemary Sadler 5 years ago from Hawkes Bay - NewZealand

      Now this is one where I want to know the end, the suspense is killing me.

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      Faith Reaper 5 years ago from southern USA

      Hello Frank,

      What an action-packed and dramatic poem to say the least! Excellent write as always, dear one. Waiting until next time on edge. God bless.

      In His Love, Faith Reaper

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      Joyce Haragsim 5 years ago from Southern Nevada

      Frank, you are an amazing writer of great poems. This is another one for your next book.

      Voted up and totally amazing, Joyce

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      Frank Atanacio 5 years ago from Shelton

      Valleypoet.. yeah I wasn't thinking that but it sounds good so Im going to say of course that's what I had in mind... thanks for the laugh and the stop over...bless you bro

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      Valleypoet 5 years ago

      Frank...you have left us in suspense again, leaving us crying out for more!...maybe you feel you have given us too many tragic endings, and you are now letting your readers decide?....another good read my friend:-))

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      Frank Atanacio 5 years ago from Shelton

      Eddy that is just so sweet bless you as always and LaThing I just think you too are good for my ego... thanks for stopping by bless you too..:)

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      LaThing 5 years ago from From a World Within, USA

      Wow Frank! Another great courtroom scene with such vivid emotions, it's absolutely mind-blowing! I am really impressed by you ability to write such poems..... Voting up and immensely awesome! :)

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      Eiddwen 5 years ago from Wales

      Brilliant Frank and I am sharing this one onto my FB page

      http://www.facebook.com/#!/EveryoneHasADream

      I have changed direction with this page and am now going to post the work of writers who have inspired me most. Therefore yours is a must and I will post others by you as I go along .

      Thanks again for this gem and here's to so many more to share.

      Eddy.

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      Frank Atanacio 5 years ago from Shelton

      yes she does LOL

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      Deborah Brooks Langford 5 years ago from Brownsville,TX

      Michelle does need to get to work doesnt she? I wonder what next.. ? Lol

      Have a great day Frank

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      Frank Atanacio 5 years ago from Shelton

      Thank you so much Justasksusan for visiting my deadlocked.. and Tilsontitan thank you to for your wonderful comment.. and Our Ms Brooks.. what????being a reporter isn't amusing enough for Michelle.. crack that creative whip and put her to work!!! LOL bless you guys

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      Deborah Brooks Langford 5 years ago from Brownsville,TX

      Good morning sweet sweet freind.. what a suspenceful exciting and trueful poem.. only Michelle's dad could do.. I think Michelle is bored...

      Sharing

      debbie

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      Mary Craig 5 years ago from New York

      Powerful! In so few words you've conveyed so much action and feeling. I voted this up, awesome, and interesting. Of course the only problem is now we want to know how the jury voted ;)

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      Susan Zutautas 5 years ago from Ontario, Canada

      Did someone get to the jury Frank to make sure that it was a deadlock :)

      Voting up and sharing.

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      Frank Atanacio 5 years ago from Shelton

      thank you Carolinemd21 for stopping by

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      Caroline Marie 5 years ago

      Wow great poem Frank. If you put all your poetry together it would make a great thriller. :)