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I Will Be Your Son: Hope & Faith

Updated on August 4, 2012

For Part One of this Story please click here

For the final chapter please click here


The home of the Shrivastavas had lost its roof. In the days to come a dull gloom took over their abode. Like the rusted leaves of autumn, each sentiment of the family went dry and the child of the house Ayushi… went morose. The loss of the father became an irreparable puncture in her soul. In days to come she saw her mother consumed by depression and her sisters ripped of any guidance.


Her grandmother, a traditional Indian In-law started to blame Mrs. Shrivastava for the death for her son. Since the ancient Indian traditions this kind of woman subordination had been a common practice. She would scorn at her, “You vamp! You ate away my son”. Ayushi would clench her fists in anger but she was helpless, she was a mere child.


Mrs. Shrivastava was a skilled gynecologist and as for now the only bread winner for the family. But the loss of her husband accompanied by the jeers of her In-laws had tore her apart and propelled her into acute depression, a black hole where once lost, recovery seems impossible.



Ayushi saw it all. The young mind was clever enough to realize the broken state of her family and the gradual doom they awaited. At this tender age she could see the devastation which had took over her loved ones and the incoming losses this present state of jeopardy would foster.


She noticed her sisters being made fun at school, her uncles exploiting her house’s premises for their own shrewd profits, her grandmother torturing her mother with excruciating amounts of pain and stress… she noticed her papa’s world falling apart!



“My daughter! My princess”, a mourning voice echoed, “How gravely I have failed you! I am alone up here and I cry each moment looking at all of you. Such despair you face at the hands of MY ill fate. I cannot express how sorry I am my child, but my soul bears umpteen scars from the pain you suffer. I yearn to see all of you smile. My soul will only reach redemption when I see the happiness and rise of my family which I have left in such shackles… I am sorry my child” the voice sobbed, “I am sorry” … and it fainted away.



Ayushi suddenly sat up from her sleep, trembling and yelled in sudden spurts of hope,” Papa! Papa! Don’t go… don’t leave us Papa! We have no one!”, but the dream had already ended.


That night sleep eluded Ayushi. The words of the dream kept echoing in her mind…, “I yearn to see all of you smile. My soul will only reach redemption when I see the happiness and rise of my family.” Unlike any other child who would have succumbed to such losses and got lost in the mists of doom, Ayushi decided to act. She decided to bring redemption to the soul of her beloved father. She built a determination to bring out her family from the broken state. She decided to fight for her life.



“I will set you free papa! I will see to it that no one you love has to suffer. I will live your dreams. I will make you proud. I will take care of everything.”


The night is darkest, just before the dawn and now with fresh will Ayushi, during that one night became hell bent to bring about the dawn for her family.

For Part One of this story please click here

For the final chapter please click here



to be continued

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      Jessee R 4 years ago from Gurgaon, India

      Thanks so much Sir Rajan.... your kindness humbles me :)

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      Jessee R 4 years ago from Gurgaon, India

      I am sorry for your loss my friend.... and I am glad ,my piece helped you in some way.... That i what it is meant to do..

      Thanks again :)

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      Rajan Singh Jolly 4 years ago from From Mumbai, presently in Jalandhar,INDIA.

      A compelling continuation of the awesome story, Rahul. Off to the final part.

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      The Stages Of ME 4 years ago

      Beautiful writing having lost my dad some four years ago I am so uplifted by your piece. A powerful story of strength and fortitude. Blessings to you.

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      Jessee R 5 years ago from Gurgaon, India

      Wonderful words of philosophy Sir Vincent... and who can deliver them in such an enrapturing manner.... except you :)

      Sadly... though my story is a work of fiction... there are realities like this which need to be told... which need to be heard..

      Thank you Sir VIncent... for your continued support :)

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      Vincent Moore 5 years ago

      The passing of the physical life to the spiritual realm is often burdened with sadness for those left behind to mourn. This very young daughter saw the agony and pain left by the great loss of her papa. To unite the family from the other side is possible, he will come to her in constant dreams and she will be the saviour dressed in white, his little princess, his eldest son. I pray that the ending fares well for all. I am off to read now. Peace to you young poet.

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      Jessee R 5 years ago from Gurgaon, India

      Thank You Integrity :)

      Much appreciated

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      IntegrityYes 5 years ago

      That is cool,Rahul. I voted up.

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      Jessee R 5 years ago from Gurgaon, India

      Hi Maria!!

      Thank you so much Maria... for being so kind to me... :)

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      Jessee R 5 years ago from Gurgaon, India

      Hi Mary... I am truly humbled by your kind and warm comment.... I never thought my story would connect like this to people like you :)

      Thank you for motivating me so much :) this will only increase my efforts :)

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      Jessee R 5 years ago from Gurgaon, India

      Hello Lika.... you are right... this is the true reality in many homes... sadly... there story goes untold.......

      Thank you for connecting and reading my friend :)

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      Jessee R 5 years ago from Gurgaon, India

      hello Faith!! I am glad you liked the story....

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      Jessee R 5 years ago from Gurgaon, India

      Hello Sue.... I am glad you liked my work...

      I am truly humbled by your kind and continued support... and believe me it motivates me all the more

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      Jessee R 5 years ago from Gurgaon, India

      Hi there Mr. LoveDoc.... I am humbled to say the least by your warm words of appreciation and kindness.

      I used my own imagination to construct these lines....

      Thank you for your kindness... it is warmly appreciated

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      Maria Jordan 5 years ago from Jeffersonville PA

      "She decided to fight for her life."

      This is an empowering story that inspires hope that our legacy can live on. Your words are compelling, Rahul.

      Voted UP and UABI. Hugs, Maria

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      Mary Craig 5 years ago from New York

      Oh Rahul, what a touching story. I cried for each of them...the lost father, the trodden wife, the grieving mother and the beautiful Ayushi...Ayushi it seems will be the strength of the family. This is beautifully written with great detail about what is happening...you are such a good writer, not just poems but this lovely story. I can't wait for the next chapter!

      Voted up, awesome, and interesting. Also sharing with my followers so they can follow Ayushi.

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      LikaMarie 5 years ago

      A child's strong will to love, as well as to be brave in a scary world where those who are supposed to help you are ripping out the soul of the family unit... yet this happens in reality.

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      Faith Reaper 5 years ago from southern USA

      Gripping story - your words are glorious!!! Final chapter is sure to please. Voted Way Up In His Love, Faith Reaper

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      Sueswan 5 years ago

      Hi Rahul

      Beautifully written. I am looking forward to the final chapter to see how Ayushi brings the family back together. It is clear that her father's spirit lives within her.

      Voted up and away

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      Mr Love Doctor 5 years ago from Puerto Rico

      "My soul will only reach redemption when I see the happiness and rise of my family." I don't know whether you drew that line from just yourself or from a deeper proverb, but if that does not tap into the longing every father has for his loved ones then I don't know what does. That is a haunting line. Wow.

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      Jessee R 5 years ago from Gurgaon, India

      Moments like those with your mother Rasma... are named as moments of Change..... these moments lead to turn overs which are beneficial for the family in abstract ways....

      I know what your mother must have gone through after the loss but I am glad she moved out for good..... good of the family... good ... for you... :)

      Thank you for the kind visit Rasma... hugs from Doon

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      Jessee R 5 years ago from Gurgaon, India

      It is unfair isn't it... but such stories are common around the world... and when these young shoulders hold their heads high and straight...

      there is nothing which will stop them

      Thank you for the kindness Max :)

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      Gypsy Rose Lee 5 years ago from Riga, Latvia

      Rahul your creativity leaves me in awe. So sad yet hopeful. I had an awful experience after my dad died. My mom was starving herself to death for love of him. One night I was in bed and the woman who was meant to be my governess came into the room. She pushed my mom into this full length mirror and said look at yourself. Do you want to die and leave your daughter alone? It frightened me to no end but it did help my mom to pull herself together and continue with her life. Can't wait to find out what happens next.

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      BeyondMax 5 years ago from Sydney, Australia

      The tragedy unfolds, so much falls on the young shoulders. It's so unfair how the other family members treat them!

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      Jessee R 5 years ago from Gurgaon, India

      Thank you Vinaya... It is an honor to receive words like that from you :)

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      Vinaya Ghimire 5 years ago from Nepal

      Rahul, I see you growing in your stories. With every piece, you are becoming better.

      Good luck with your project!

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      Jessee R 5 years ago from Gurgaon, India

      Hello Martin.. glad to see you back!

      I am glad you liked my story :)

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      Jessee R 5 years ago from Gurgaon, India

      Hi brother Josh! Thank you for the kind words...

      I am glad you liked it my friend :)

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      Jessee R 5 years ago from Gurgaon, India

      Hello Sister !

      Somewhere you are right about me.... but on the brighter front... I have met the blessed support and love of people like you who help me voice myself better and fill me with vigor, humbleness and dexterity :)

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      Jessee R 5 years ago from Gurgaon, India

      Effer! Your words bring a smile on my face... If my words can connect to your emotions they can connect to more ....

      When such things happen... the sufferings tend to increase until the tough question their mantle themselves and Ayushi is one such girl

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      Jessee R 5 years ago from Gurgaon, India

      hello Sir Bill!

      Thank you for your feedback... you are always kind to me :)

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      Jessee R 5 years ago from Gurgaon, India

      Thank you so much Patty.... there is one more part ...

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      Jessee R 5 years ago from Gurgaon, India

      Hey Klara.. you are right... these things do happen to a poor soul.. as we talk here...

      Thank you for the visit

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      Jessee R 5 years ago from Gurgaon, India

      Hello mother.... To have you as a mentor is a blessing in disguise... I am humbled by your kind feedback and reviews of my work...

      Thanks and the story still has one more chapter...

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      Martin Kloess 5 years ago from San Francisco

      Touching... well written... Thank you for this.

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      Joshua Zerbini 5 years ago from Pennsylvania

      Rahul,

      This story is so sad, but so very powerful as well! Your passion is flowing through these words; you are a superb writer buddy!

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      Shauna L Bowling 5 years ago from Central Florida

      I love Ayushi's strength! She's overcoming what is destined for women of her time, at her tender age, to bring her father's soul to peace and to divert the minds of those who chastise! What an awesome story and what an appropos message!

      My brother, I believe you have an Ayushi that has risen you from your grave trials to speak to the world today.

      Speak and speak loudly, my brother!

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      Paula 5 years ago from Beautiful Upstate New York

      These words have ripped through my soul and caused me to grieve for this family.....all of them, the sad, the innocent, young and old.....even those too ignorant to know what destruction they cause..........UP ++

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      Bill Holland 5 years ago from Olympia, WA

      This really is sad Rahul, but as I have come to expect, it is written with passion and exquisite feeling....very beautiful.

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      Patty Kenyon 5 years ago from Ledyard, Connecticut

      This is truly sad, but well written!!!

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      klarawieck 5 years ago

      Such a sad story, Rahul! :-( Unfortunately, these things do happen often. Keep them coming! :)

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      Deborah Brooks Langford 5 years ago from Brownsville,TX

      My son.. how sad.. and wow what a story.. a continuation again I hope?

      You are an exquisite writer.... I stand in awe..

      blessings and sharing

      Debbie