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I Would Go Away With You

Updated on December 26, 2011

I Would Go Away With You

I would go away with you

as the sun sets from orange

to red

like a cooling ember.

Night opens its many eyes.

Still I think I would follow

even if we went through


blue-grey and chill

as shadows in nighttime clouds

and silent too.

I am drawn

by the still sound of your footsteps

light as dust, irrevocable

as the stars.

Our places are set.

You look at me

sure as ever,

holding out one hand

like a cool fire,

the only kind that lasts.


A Little About the Poem

I'm not the first one who has expressed some frustration with the Hubpages platform for publishing poetry. Line breaks and line spacing are very important in poems, and effect the whole feel of the piece, but Hubpages won't let the writer control these elements.

Well, anyway, this is a poem about my relationship with God, and I was trying to play with the ideas of light/ dark and hot/cold in relationships, turn those ideas on their heads as it were. Dark and cool are usually negative when characterizing closeness, and light and warm positive, so I was trying to show intimacy with cool and dark images, rather than the more common opposite.


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      graceomalley 6 years ago

      Writeronline - Thank you so much. I'm touched by the compliment.

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      writeronline 6 years ago

      Grace, when I read this, I thought it was about a man and a woman. And I thought it was beautiful.

      Then I read your notes to find it's actually about a woman and her God. And that makes it awesome.

      Luckily there's a rating button for each.