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I fell asleep

Updated on April 30, 2011

you were there

even though you weren't there

and i fell asleep

your breath on my neck

sweet whispers to me

you were there even though you weren't there

and i fell asleep

so strange

something that used to be so easy

has become a struggle

falling into the deep escape of rest

was what i waited for

and now

i have to fight my way through the dream chamber

just to get a few hours of relief

but you were there

even though you weren't there

with a key

kissing my forehead

and allowing me to fall softly into the darkened forest

where i am always home.

i know you weren't there

but it felt like you were.

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      Cagsil 6 years ago from USA or America

      Short and to the point Pink. :) But, I guess the biggest question is 'who' were you referring to. It isn't a question you have to actually answer, but it does make one think about what you have been thinking about. More accurately, "who" you have on your mind. As always it's a pleasure. :)

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      the pink umbrella 6 years ago from the darkened forest deep within me.

      catch me on fb and ill tell you, but im sure he knows. he feels like a best friend thats far away.

      love you cags!!!!!

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      JadedLove 6 years ago

      I feel the depth of a closeness so wonderful and painted true in your words of rest. i must say if he doesnt know, maybe you should tell him.

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      the pink umbrella 6 years ago from the darkened forest deep within me.

      he knows.

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      Abie Taylor 6 years ago from Wakefield, United Kingdom

      Great poem. Very effective. Yes, that is right. Who is it? Is it like you broke up or something?

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      the pink umbrella 6 years ago from the darkened forest deep within me.

      no, its like because of everything that has happened my emotions are a little tired sometimes and instead of allowing me to sleep, my mond just wont stop and let me sleep. but someone came and held me last night even though he wasnt there.

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      Tricia Mason 6 years ago from The English Midlands

      Lovely work :)

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      the pink umbrella 6 years ago from the darkened forest deep within me.

      thanx trish

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      4elements 6 years ago

      awesome this was. I enjoyed it.

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      Nikkij504gurl 6 years ago from Louisiana

      "you were there even though you werent there." maybe your ghost? or just simply a deep enough memory, I could feel your presence lingering, and though you werent there physically, I was able to feel comfort through the senses of when you used to be. I could smell you on my pillows, see the things you left behind, with so much to remind me of you, it brought you back to life. ~~Nikki J.

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      the pink umbrella 6 years ago from the darkened forest deep within me.

      no, im sure it was the essence of him.

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      Kathi 6 years ago from Saugatuck Michigan

      You use words like a brush stroke on an empty canvas waiting to be identified

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      sligobay 6 years ago from east of the equator

      Hi Pink'um: The "darkened forest" is a great image for the dreamworld. The specter of fond memory is comforting and the longing is palpable.

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      mikielikie 6 years ago from Texas

      Well lady you have made me think about the one I love again through reading your work. Always such a wonderful adventure into your emotions. And oh how mine seem to weep until I read more from you. Great job. Such beauty.

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      ememstephen 6 years ago

      this is lovertalk. it's shows pink umbrela is a passionate woman.

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      Nikkij504gurl 6 years ago from Louisiana

      that was just a little poem i came up with after reading this.

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      the pink umbrella 6 years ago from the darkened forest deep within me.

      fossillady- well i used to pain, maybe i am using hubpages as an endless canvas!

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      the pink umbrella 6 years ago from the darkened forest deep within me.

      slingobay- the darkened forest is how ive always refered to my escape place in dreams or in meditation. and actually i go to it in dreams alot now because i focus on it being my escape place so much.

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      the pink umbrella 6 years ago from the darkened forest deep within me.

      mikielikie- thank you, you are a sweetheart. im so glad you recognize your own feelings when looking into my hubs.

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      the pink umbrella 6 years ago from the darkened forest deep within me.

      ememstephen- i am passionate. when im mad im a monster, when im happy im over the moon and when im romantic im soft as silk. the extremes are challenging for anyone at my side, but also very rewarding because i put my all into whatever i touch. thanks for seeing me.

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      the pink umbrella 6 years ago from the darkened forest deep within me.

      Nikkij504gurl- yea i know and what you came up with on the spot really is quite beautiful. i was just answering what may have been taken by some as a question within your piece. :)

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      epigramman 6 years ago

      ....you take to places I've never been ....and that, for me, is always a hallmark of a great writer - thanks for these poetic memories ..... it's been quite a journey ....and we're not even there ..... yet!

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      Poetic Fool 6 years ago

      Lovely, pink umbrella. If I understand you, I think I've been there too. When she comes in my dreams I am released into rest. Then I wake up ...

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      the pink umbrella 6 years ago from the darkened forest deep within me.

      epigramman- you name the time and the place. id love to create anything with you.

      poetic fool- you got exactly what i intended. that makes me feel comfortable in my own writers skin.

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