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Insistent Regret

Updated on April 9, 2016
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What Detective Laura Kimber hated most about a crime scene was the long period of silence, and the guessing game. The murderer expected all the detectives at the murder scene to gather in a semi-circle and close their eyes. Perhaps think of the motives first, then wonder where he had run to. It was a cat and mouse game that really struck a chord.

Colin Wright, dead in an alley with a handful of detectives standing over his body with nothing positive to add. That alone might be reason enough for Kimber to quit, but there was Colin Wright, the dead man who wanted his killer to be caught, tried and convicted. Also the dead had no voice and that was a bigger reason to stay on the job.

Laura Kimber was obligated to pursue the killer and starting from scratch was an uphill battle that will just bring in a little light into the darkness.

“Guys,” she started. “Chambers and I will stay here, and you guys go trick or treating at every door in the area. See if you can find something tangible. Turn every stone.”

The detectives nodded and went on their way.

Colin Wright, a middle aged man was on his stomach with an extension chord still wrapped around his neck. His eyes were closed, his mouth parted and his hands were extended as if he just suddenly gave up. Kimber examined the body closer and the cause of death was strangulation. In that there was no doubt.

“Caught from behind?” Chambers asked.

She nodded without looking at him.

Colin Wright still had his wallet on him and all his credit cards. He also had seventy two dollars in cash and a David Yurman wedding band. There were no witnesses and no motive, but still Wright was strangled. The alleyway was well lit between two downtown department stores on Fairfield Avenue. The sides of the buildings were clean and the garbage cans were lined perfectly, one for recyclables and the other for trash. Kimber still found herself looking at the earthly remains of a man that was strangled for no apparent reason.

“He wasn't robbed and there was no signs of a struggle scene. It appears that the killer sneaked up on him and strangled him with the chord.” said Chambers.

“There's always a motive,” Kimber said. “But why strangle him here, and in broad daylight?”

A young woman turned into the alley and screamed, not from pain or love loss, but from the sheer shock of seeing a dead man on the ground with a chord wrapped around his neck. She dropped her shopping bags and ran quickly away from the scene.

“Damn O'Brien isn't doing a great job in holding people back,” said Chambers.

Kimber nodded slowly.

Detective Laura Kimber stood up and surveyed the alley. She felt that insistent regret, that unnerving notion that the case was going to go unsolved. Everything rested on one clue, one eye witness and the hope that the killer would know the fear of a detective who wouldn't give up. She also wondered whether any suspect could even understand enough to feel that kind of fear.

“Can't win them all Laura,” said Chambers.

“I didn't lose this one yet,” she replied.

He nodded.

© 2016 Frank Atanacio

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      Frank Atanacio 15 months ago from Shelton

      thank you Genna East and as always.. good to see you

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      Genna East 15 months ago from Massachusetts, USA

      I have faith that Laura will solve this one, Frank. She is a skilled and determined professional who doesn't know the meaning of giving up at the onset. Great story Frank, as usual, and one that causes us to think about those many cases that do go unsolved, and why. "There's always a motive," and Laura has only begun to examine this case.

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      Frank Atanacio 16 months ago from Shelton

      thanks kirk

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      Kirk Cadran 16 months ago

      That Laura Krimble is one tough cop, wish they all were like her. good flash fiction. I think I am enjoying flash fictions

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      Frank Atanacio 16 months ago from Shelton

      I agree with you Peggy..:)

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      Peggy Woods 16 months ago from Houston, Texas

      Not all crimes are solved but good to know that there are detectives out there who remain committed to solving them no matter how long it takes.

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      Frank Atanacio 16 months ago from Shelton

      you are dead on winged.. dead on LOL

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      William Thomas 16 months ago from That Great Primordial Smash UP of This and That Which Gave Rise To All Beings and All Things!

      Brilliant last line, Frank:

      "Can't win them all, Laura," Chambers said.

      " I didn't lose this one yet," she replied.

      Because that is what is really important. You have frozen in time, the hope that the detectives will solve the murder for the victim's sake and his family's sake; and the ambiguity as to whether the perpetrator even fears being caught, or cares about being caught.

      Any way, well done!

      W.T.

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      Frank Atanacio 16 months ago from Shelton

      thank you so much aviannovice for stopping by.. bless you

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      Deb Hirt 16 months ago from Stillwater, OK

      Oh, this is good. There are lots of moments like this, which keeps a detective on the job. It isn't notoriety, it is the cals that a criminal has to dare the law to track him down.

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      Frank Atanacio 16 months ago from Shelton

      thank you so much savvy...:)

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      savvydating 16 months ago

      Great title. Very apropos. No doubt, Detective Laura Kimber feels this emotion constantly---even in her dreams. Strange...all the senseless murders in this world. But as Kimber said, “There's always a motive.”

      One can only wonder what is was. Another good one, Frank.

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      Frank Atanacio 16 months ago from Shelton

      thank you mckbirdbks

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      mckbirdbks 16 months ago from Emerald Wells, Just off the crossroads,Texas

      Hello Frank - you draw us right into that alley.

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      Frank Atanacio 16 months ago from Shelton

      thanks manatita for stopping by

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      manatita44 16 months ago from london

      Excellent Frank! Well on the way to a great conclusion perhaps? Happy Weekend.

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      Frank Atanacio 16 months ago from Shelton

      Thank you Dana Tate :)

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      Dana Tate 16 months ago from LOS ANGELES

      I have no doubt that Laura Will get her man.

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      Frank Atanacio 16 months ago from Shelton

      thank you Flourish...:)

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      FlourishAnyway 16 months ago from USA

      Kimber will get her man. I like the way you paint the picture with details. Makes us feel like we're there.

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      Frank Atanacio 16 months ago from Shelton

      Thank you MsDora for keeping Kimber strong :) bless you

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      Dora Isaac Weithers 16 months ago from The Caribbean

      Frank, you make us like Kimber by the spirit of determination you put within her. She stands taller than all the hurdles in her way. Never such a pleasant read involving a murder.

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      Frank Atanacio 16 months ago from Shelton

      thank you Billybuc...:)

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      Bill Holland 16 months ago from Olympia, WA

      You pack maximum punch in minimum words....and that, my friend, is a gift and talent.

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      Frank Atanacio 16 months ago from Shelton

      Missy, Faith the Reaper, and Jodah.. thank you guys so much for stopping by and giving Laura Kimber another look bless you guys :)

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      John Hansen 16 months ago from Queensland Australia

      Laura Kimber is a real bulldog of a detective. If she gives up I will eat my hat (I guess I am safe with that unless you decide to write a sequel to this Frank) :) Good work.

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      Faith Reaper 16 months ago from southern USA

      Hi Frankie,

      There's always hope to find the killer when Kimber is there with her unwavering determination! Your titles are always so cool and perfect for your chilling stories.

      Hey, you're going to love the hub I'm working on right now and hope to publish late tonight ...but we'll see. It is something right up your alley. So stay tuned, you, my faithful follower from nutmeg land.

      Blessings, you writer, you

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      Missy Smith 16 months ago from Florida

      I think there is enough clues to know this was a personal vendetta, and not a robbery. Someone didn't like him, but why? Questioning begins; family members, co-workers, and people like that he could have done wrong. Yes, this should be a case solved for Kimber. :)

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      Frank Atanacio 16 months ago from Shelton

      thank you Shyron for stopping by :)

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      Shyron E Shenko 16 months ago from Texas

      I have no doubt

      The murderer will be found out

      With Kimber on the scene

      Although the clues are scarce and lean

      From almost nothing

      Facts Kimber can glean

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      Very interesting mystery

      Blessings my friend

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      Frank Atanacio 16 months ago from Shelton

      thanks Clive :)

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      Clive Williams 16 months ago from Nibiru

      yet another intriguing episode from an intriguing writer

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      Frank Atanacio 16 months ago from Shelton

      Nope guys I was wrong, not the first one this year :( LOL

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      Frank Atanacio 16 months ago from Shelton

      thank you so much Always and Eric for reading my Kimber.. I think the first one this year.. bless you guys :)

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      Eric Dierker 16 months ago from Spring Valley, CA. U.S.A.

      Man you do a good job of portraying a post murder scene. Kimber has the most depressing job in the world. How could anyone do it? Great story thank you.

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      Ruby Jean Fuller 16 months ago from Southern Illinois

      I have no doubt, Kimber will get her man! You set the scene up perfectly for a suspenseful read. Up and away!