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Investigative Flaws

Updated on December 7, 2014
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Investigative Flaws

 

The situation was grim,

the day was relatively dim,

in the wind

he thought he heard the child’s cries,

as sorrow instantly slid

down the detective’s eyes,

around him were open spaces,

he moved closer

took a few paces,

closed his eyes and he would pause,

unsolved and cold cases

came from investigative flaws,

what strangled his thoughts was death,

as it took a moment

for him to catch his breath,

dried blood and broken baby teeth

was found by a tree stump,

it was the site where the child’s

body was dumped,

the crime scene detectives made sure,

they did everything in the proper order,

losing a life so innocent and pure,

one of the officers threw up near a tree,

but they had to let the little girl’s body be,

until they had to move her,

emotions would stream,

ghosts would scream,

as they bagged her hands at the crime scene,

they carefully chronicled the exact

array of clothing,

emotions pressed,

but they noted that the child was fully dressed,

her blouse seemed to have been

improperly buttoned,

the detectives felt the stress,

the child was dead, but her ghost was depressed.

© 2011 Frank Atanacio

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      Frank Atanacio 4 years ago from Shelton

      thank you so much for the read Frank

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      P. Thorpe Christiansen 4 years ago from Pacific Northwest, USA

      So dark and illustrated so well. Well done Frank.

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      LaDena Campbell 4 years ago from Somewhere Over The Rainbow - Near Oz...

      As always with your writing I see the scene in my mind...gruesome and necessary...another great one Frank!

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      Frank Atanacio 2 years ago from Shelton

      thanks so much duffsmom and justateacher good to see you guys :)

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      Dora Isaac Weithers 2 years ago from The Caribbean

      Frank, today our nation is in shock over the rape and murder of a 15 year old girl who, on her way to church, sought shelter from the rain in a school building. In the building a monster committed this brutal crime.

      I was just thinking, what a pity they have to delay punishment with an investigation!

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      Frank Atanacio 2 years ago from Shelton

      yes I feel the same way MsDora

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      Mary Craig 2 years ago from New York

      Each chilling line drove home more how terrible this must be for a detective or any police officer for that matter. We always find the crime heinous but never stop to think about those who have to investigate it! Your writing is always so thought provoking.

      Voted up, awesome, and interesting.

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      Maria Antonia 2 years ago from North Carolina

      Frank you made us feel for every child that has ever been harmed. It's interesting that Tillsontitan mentioned how those who see the worst of what man can do are often forgotten, that is very true. I for one spend a lot of time thinking about those people and the traumas they suffer on the job. Our military, law enforcement, and first responders, thank you for the work that you do, and please do take care of yourself. I know from experience that you do not go unaffected by these events.

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      savvydating 2 years ago

      I'd have PTSD if I had to witness things like this everyday. A tough job, but it has to be done. Unfortunately, evil exists. If we don't fight it--it only takes more lives. Well done, as always.

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      Frank Atanacio 2 years ago from Shelton

      thank you Tillsontitan... good to see you always.. thanks so much Maria for sropping by and savvydating thanks for commenting bless you guys..:)

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      Pinky de Garcia 2 years ago

      Dear Frank,

      I can feel the heavy emotion in this piece.

      Investigators or police officers are just like us.They have feelings. They need debriefing after any crime or incident.But, there's no time for that. Life cases are ballooning every now and then.

      I admire people in this profession. They always set aside their personal needs in favor of their duties.

      Thanks for sharing this beautiful piece.

      Best regards,

      Sweetpikez

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      Frank Atanacio 2 years ago from Shelton

      thank you sweetpikez :)

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      Patricia Scott 2 years ago from sunny Florida

      O sad that scenes like this do play out day after day.

      I felt so moved by this as we had the Caylee Anthony murder here (she was 3!!!)---I wrote about her case her on HubPages. Tiny lifeless body...alone ...her ghost too, depressed...as she never had justice.

      Angels are on the way to you this morning

      voted up+++ and shared

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      Frank Atanacio 2 years ago from Shelton

      PS.. bless you for having a big heart :)

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