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Long Island Isn't So Far Away

Updated on February 2, 2012
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A hamlet I’ve not heard of stands between my love and I

An Ellis Island of hope to lead me to my fresh beginning

Whither it comes on the horizon I wait to see my star

A lad with shining eyes, dark hair there waits in wonder.


We wished on waves and counted the miles between us

Toiled the time drawing sketch of fireflies and writing in moonlight

I heard the song that put me to sleep and brought me to dream once more

Thought of his face as I longed for whispered promises between us.


I wore the emerald marker upon my self with pride

There to denote my intended lover’s fallen demise

At last seen the ridge I have drifted toward in haste

A promise land in a new place.




27 of 30 baby!

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      R9139 5 years ago

      Great work Ardie :)

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      Sondra 5 years ago from Neverland

      Thanks R, its not as pretty as your island but I'll take it :)

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      JS Matthew 5 years ago from Massachusetts, USA

      Wow, this is really well written! You have quite a way with words Ardie! I feel like I am on a giant ship coming to the mainland after a long journey. Not the titanic, but perhaps another voyage that makes it to New York, with stories to tell on arrival. Awesome imagery and diction here. Very well done! Up and SHARING! Good luck with the rest of the 30/30!

      JSMatthew~

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      Sondra 5 years ago from Neverland

      Thanks, JS! You're such a great source of support to me :) I cant believe I am almost done!!!!!!!!!!!!

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      JS Matthew 5 years ago from Massachusetts, USA

      You're welcome! Keep going! Maybe next time you will do the 60/60!!! Haha I have to try the 30/30 myself. Maybe a new resolution for this year. You're almost there! Don't stop!

      JSMatthew~

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      Tammy 5 years ago from North Carolina

      Very creative! This is very good. You are almost there!

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      Rosemary Sadler 5 years ago from Hawkes Bay - NewZealand

      Long Island isn't so far away and neither are you. Keep going. Great job

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      Teresa Coppens 5 years ago from Ontario, Canada

      Lovely poem Ardie. You are indeed gifted and will achieve your goal of 30 in30 with aplomb!

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      raciniwa 5 years ago from Naga City, Cebu

      melodious...your poem is soothing and has a calming effect on me...

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      Haunty 5 years ago

      So beautiful! I will always be in awe of your skill in poetry. :D

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      Bronwen Scott-Branagan 5 years ago from Victoria, Australia

      It's a long way from where I live, but your poem is lovely. Voted up.

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      Linda Bilyeu 5 years ago from Orlando, FL

      I was born and bred on Long Island, what an awesome shout out! Keep on hubbin you are almost at the finish line!!! You should be so proud of yourself. I'm very proud of you!!!

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      alocsin 5 years ago from Orange County, CA

      Is this a true story, Ardie? Voting this Up and Beautiful.

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      Sondra 5 years ago from Neverland

      JS, YOU are going to do the next 30/30 challenge with me. But I need a small break first :P

      Thanks Tammy, sooooo clooooooose!

      Rosemay, I will have to check a map. I hope Im closer to the end than I am to Long Island hahah

      Hi Teresa, thank you! I am so close I can see the end. Sunday night is my deadline because I cant post Hubs on the weekend :)

      Thank you Raci, that means a lot coming from you with your beautiful poetry.

      Haunty! Have a look at your own fine talent :P

      Hello Blossom :) Thank you for your kind words.

      SS625 :) My mentor without even knowing it. I didnt know you were an east coaster! You've lived in all the best places!

      Hi alocsin, no this is purely fantasy :) sometimes I get carried away in thought and this is what I end up with. Thanks for the votes!

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      Linda Bilyeu 5 years ago from Orlando, FL

      It's nice to learn new things about each other. This hub was a fun surprise even if you didn't know I'm originally from Long Island. From one mentor to another ... you are inspiring many along your 30/30 journey also. I'm glad we took on the challenge.

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      Martie Coetser 5 years ago from South Africa

      Lovely poem, Ardie - could be interpreted according to a readers frame of mind.

      Good luck, you are almost there!

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      jacy albertson 5 years ago from Lake Mary, Fl

      Ardie,

      This was really well written. I'm also from L.I., in fact still living there....but I want out. : )

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      Sondra 5 years ago from Neverland

      SS625 - Im glad we took on the challenge too. Ever want to do it again? I am trying to talk JS Matthew into doing it. He just needs a little nudge.

      Thanks Martie! It can take on a few meanings. I actually had several directions I was heading with the poem but I ended up going with the historical idea more than anything else. It was like I could see one of my ancestors coming to America long, long ago.

      albertsj :) Thanks. Now I know you aren't really all that far away either. And look at Sunshine - there is hope. You CAN get out if you look for the way hard enough hahahah

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      Joyce Haragsim 5 years ago from Southern Nevada

      This is such a beautiful poem, love it. Voted up and awesome, my friend, Joyce.

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      JS Matthew 5 years ago from Massachusetts, USA

      Hey Ardie, is that a Challenge? Let me know when you are all rested up. It is about time I face and slay this demon!

      JSMatthew~

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      Christy Birmingham 5 years ago from British Columbia, Canada

      A poem of hope and wonder. Well done.

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      Sondra 5 years ago from Neverland

      writer20, thank you :) I think I like the picture on the poem so much better than the words hahah

      JS Matthew - its on. We will have to wait until after the question and answer contest on HP in March(I'd like to try it some) and then we dance :P

      Thanks ChristyWrites!

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      JS Matthew 5 years ago from Massachusetts, USA

      Sounds good Ardie! Looking forward to the challenge!

      JSMatthew~

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      Ruchira 5 years ago from United States

      Distances can always make a heart grow fonder...Ardie.

      Long island or even Africa would not look far away...lol

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      Gypsy Rose Lee 5 years ago from Riga, Latvia

      Voted up and awesome. My hometown N.Y.C. Long Island is a great place to live in peaceful suburbia. In my case my high school heart throb contacted me through one of the various places I write articles just to say remember me? Then I found out he and his family live somewhere in the Midwest and I am now in Riga. What are the chances that we shall ever bump into each other once again in this life???

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      Kelly Umphenour 5 years ago from St. Louis, MO

      Ardie -- this speaks of your professionality and the ability of a real poet. Very admirable, I love poetry and this makes mine look like childs play:) I am so glad I read this from you!! Amazing job:)

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      Mary Craig 5 years ago from New York

      Long Island or anywhere else, this poem really speaks to separation and new beginnings. It's fresh and I like the picture too. Voted up.

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      Sondra 5 years ago from Neverland

      Hi Ruchira :)I agree and sometimes we NEED those distances to keep the heart fonder hahah

      Hi Gypsy Rose Lee! Wow, that’s quite the story. Gotta wonder how he found you through your articles? He must’ve been looking for a while (unless you write under your real name).

      Hi RHW Aaw you’re always so sweet to me. I must have been very nice to you in a past life to deserve it :D I don’t think I’ve ever seen your poetry! Just your humor so I am heading to your HP page to see what I’ve missed!

      Hi tillsontitan :) thank you so much. I usually ponder over my poems for days trying to get just the right sound but I just threw this one down and I think it turned out alright (for once hahah) Thanks for the vote!

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      Eileen Kersey 5 years ago from Kingston-Upon-Hull

      poignant words

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      Sondra 5 years ago from Neverland

      Aaw thanks Ethel! :)

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