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Look at me ....Poetry

Updated on March 17, 2013
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Open your eyes look at me

Tell me what you really see

Do you see the girl you vowed to cherish till the end?

Do you see your confidant, your truest friend?

Or are you distracted by the lines in my skin

Maybe it’s the fact that I am no longer slim

Can you not see past the grey in my hair?

Or is it the marks where my skin stretched, but did not tear?

Why don’t you see the strength in me?

Or the drive to always do the right thing

What about my gentle heart

Did you even notice it was falling apart?

Or are you consumed by my crazy ways

Is it the fact that I no longer have time to play?

Work, cook, clean, sleep ….these things consume me

You say that I used to be fun, I used to be free

Years of burdens have weighed me down

I wish I could say something more profound,

But I am to tired anymore to even think

Guess I will just have another drink

And wonder if you see me trying to catch your eye

Do you see the tears I refuse to cry?

Do you notice me sitting alone?

With the kids asleep, staring at the phone.

Will you even notice when I raise my head high

And finally allow myself to cry

Will you notice when I wipe away the tears one day

Pack up my things and walk away

Will you see me for who I am…will it be enough

Or will you still be stuck on the girl I was?









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      cleaner3 4 years ago from Pueblo, Colorado

      awesomme write.. love the way you put the words that are so hard to say but easy to write on the page .

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      Martin Kloess 4 years ago from San Francisco

      A bleak unending circle, but a well written poem. Thank you

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      Lisa Williams 4 years ago

      Cleaner, Thank you so much for your kind reply!

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      Lisa Williams 4 years ago

      Mhatter, Thank you for stopping by and leaving such a thoughtful comment!!

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      TDM 4 years ago from Welcome to my beautiful world, where magic is no longer a myth.

      terribly sad Lisa,

      but, nice poem no less. You created allot of emotions and great detail. I voted up.

      I. White

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      Lisa Williams 4 years ago

      Isaac, thanks for stopping by and leaving such a lovely comment!

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      TDM 4 years ago from Welcome to my beautiful world, where magic is no longer a myth.

      your welcome. and thanks for an incredible read

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      Bill Holland 4 years ago from Olympia, WA

      An all-too often refrain I'm afraid. The questions you ask are powerful. This is a sadly beautiful poem, Lisa! Well done!

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      Lisa Williams 4 years ago

      Thanks you for stopping by and commenting! It is so nice to be back in touch with my HubPages family! =)

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      Ruby Jean Fuller 4 years ago from Southern Illinois

      Wow Lisa, this is beautiful. I know many can relate, funny how time keeps slippn' away..Bravo!

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      Lisa Williams 4 years ago

      Ruby, Thank you so much!!

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      Rajan Singh Jolly 3 years ago from From Mumbai, presently in Jalandhar,INDIA.

      Very powerful words Lisa! And so much truth in them.

      voted up a bunch and sharing.

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      Jo Alexis-Hagues 3 years ago from Bedfordshire, U.K

      Wow...you've captured this so well!!...loneliness at any time can be too sad to take, but within a marriage it must be even worse.

      We hope when we fall in love and settle down, we will weather all the storms as we grow old together, but it doesn't always work out that way. This is awesome.

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      livingsta 3 years ago from United Kingdom

      Beautifully written, so intense. Thank you for sharing this.

      Votes up and sharing!

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      davidwhoward 3 years ago from Indiana

      Stunning and powerful. Very good!

      Thank you for sharing. Keep up the good work!

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      Tijani Achamlal 3 years ago from Morocco

      Wow,What a beautiful magical piece you have penned.. This really impresses me... So sad but beautiful and descriptive. The imagery that you created is great and so vivid. I like this piece from the beginning to the end, it is very original and creative.The questions are truly profound and direct to the point.

      Your choice of words in it is absolutely fantastic.

      You have true talent!

      Keep up!

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      Karen Silverman 3 years ago

      Sigh...sooo sorry, dear!

      they break that which they profess to love - and then they leave because it is broken..

      love definitely hurts! beautifully expressed!

      voting up and hub-sharing!

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      dreamseeker2 3 years ago

      Wow! Very powerful poem packed with feelings and a desperate plea to be accepted as one is and whom they feel they still are on the inside. Beautifully written. : ) Voted up, for sure!

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      Lisa Williams 3 years ago

      Rajan, Thank you so much for your kind comment and for voting and sharing!

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      Lisa Williams 3 years ago

      Tobusiness, Thank you for your kind and beautiful reply!

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      Lisa Williams 3 years ago

      Livingsta, Thanks for your comment and for voting up and sharing!

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      Lisa Williams 3 years ago

      David, Thank you so much for your encouraging reply!

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      Lisa Williams 3 years ago

      James, Thank you so ouch for you wonderful comment! I really appreciate your kind words!

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      Lisa Williams 3 years ago

      Imkarn23, Thank you so much for your lovely comment and for voting and sharing!

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      Lisa Williams 3 years ago

      Dreamseaker, Thank you for your insightful comment and for voting!

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      Audrey Howitt 3 years ago from California

      Sad place to be really, but really well done--

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      Lisa Williams 3 years ago

      Audrey, Thank you so much for your kind comment!

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      DJ Anderson 3 years ago

      This poem is a realistic look at the state of too many relationships.

      I can hear the painful loneliness and the cry for validation of your worth

      as a wife and mother, but most of all a best friend and mate.

      You have written a piece that should be read aloud in marriage 101 class.

      You have exposed a venerable woman whose heart is bleeding. I do hope

      some good has come to you since you wrote this piece.

      As you mentioned earlier to me; writing can be cathartic.

      Keep writing, my friend.

      DJ.

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      Lisa Williams 3 years ago

      Hi, DJ: Thank you for stopping by! Writing is definitely cathartic. I write when I am at my best, and at my worst! It helps me to really be able to grasp the emotion that I am feeling! Thank you so much for your kind comment, and support.

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      violent silence 3 years ago

      Very emotional and touching poem. Thank you for sharing it.

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      Lisa Williams 3 years ago

      Thank you for your kind comment!

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