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Love indiscipline

Updated on July 17, 2017

Love indiscipline


Gasping for crumbled-up spaces,

Speech is jumbled-up in jargons.


Making no sense thence,
Lost is the common sense.


With unrelenting immature egos,

In docks is ethos.


With wide gaps intact,

Love has lost its syntax.

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      Hari Prasad S 13 days ago from Bangalore

      Thanks Ann. Do visit my other poems too.

      - hari

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      Ann Carr 13 days ago from SW England

      Interesting poem; I like the concept.

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      Hari Prasad S 3 weeks ago from Bangalore

      Thanks devika. Yes it is, but, with a pinch of indiscipline too.

      - hari

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      Devika Primić 3 weeks ago from Dubrovnik, Croatia

      Love is beautiful and rare.

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      Hari Prasad S 7 weeks ago from Bangalore

      Thanks Tamara for the appreciation.

      - hari

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      Tamara Yancosky 7 weeks ago from No Idea Where

      Interesting and I love the rhythm, too!

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      Hari Prasad S 7 weeks ago from Bangalore

      Yes chitrangada jee, you are right. Love is blind and hence indiciplined too. Thanks.

      - Hari

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      Chitrangada Sharan 7 weeks ago from New Delhi, India

      Nice poetic expressions with deep thoughts! Love has a little bit of indiscipline, I agree with that.

      Thanks for sharing!

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      Kristen Howe 7 weeks ago from Northeast Ohio

      You're welcome. I will stop on by later this week.

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      Hari Prasad S 7 weeks ago from Bangalore

      Thanks Kristen for the inputs. I too had thought a while about it, while writing but nothing could fit to make my point on misunderstanding. :-).

      Do read my other poems.

      - hari

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      Kristen Howe 7 weeks ago from Northeast Ohio

      Great poem, though spaces and jargons don't rhyme.

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      Hari Prasad S 7 weeks ago from Bangalore

      Thanks Harish. Happy to read your comments.

      - hari

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      Harish Mamgain 7 weeks ago from India

      Hari , great poetry my friend ! The title also is so fantastic !

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      Hari Prasad S 7 weeks ago from Bangalore

      Thanks manatita bro.

      - hari

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      manatita44 7 weeks ago from london

      The indiscipline of Love. I like that. Rather cute. Deep poetry!

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      Hari Prasad S 7 weeks ago from Bangalore

      Thanks Eric. Yes it is part of it.

      - hari

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      Eric Dierker 7 weeks ago from Spring Valley, CA. U.S.A.

      Really good Hari. A brilliant capture of a part of love.

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