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Master Minded: A Short Story by cam

Updated on January 15, 2017
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Chris has written more than 100 flash fiction/short stories.Working Vacation took 21st out of 6,700 in the 2016 Writer's Digest competition.

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You finally screwed up, you son-of-a-bitch. When you left the apartment yesterday, the keys to my shackles and chain were lying on the table and a broom was leaning against the wall within my reach.

Ten years I spent in that windowless room you constructed in the center of the second floor apartment so that no passersby could hear my screams. A decade with you as my warden, my guard, my unwelcome lover. You were my personal chef, fed me once a day in a stainless steel dog bowl, while another bowl just like it, although for a different purpose, sat in a corner without so much as a lid to cover it when I was finished.

I was seventeen when you took me from my family. I salvaged a portion of my sanity by remembering my life before you crept into it, into my bedroom where stuffed animals adorned my bed and family photos told the story of a happy childhood. You knew I was alone that night. You overpowered me, gagged and bound me without even needing to worry about my screams.

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Sometimes, when you watched TV, I'd sit in the doorway to my room. But I paid no attention to the television. I was looking at the door in the kitchen that led outside to freedom. But in my despair, I named it the door to nowhere, for I knew I would never have the opportunity to open it.

When you left yesterday evening, I knew you were going out drinking. And I knew that when you came home around two-thirty in the morning, you would go straight to your recliner and pass out without poking your scraggly bearded face and rotten toothed grin into my room. So I grabbed the broom, retrieved the keys from the table and left. It’s still early, and you won’t wake up until late afternoon. I know you well, Master. I'm looking at the curtains to the darkened apartment from the alley below. You still don’t know I’m gone.

I know what television shows you like, what your favorite kind of porn is, and I know that you like rough sex. Which reminds me, you worthless scum. You still haven’t told me what you did with the baby.

I also know your fears. The rats find their way from the alley, into the garage downstairs, to the second floor from time to time, and when they do, your face turns ashen, you scream like a little girl, and you pee in your pants.

There are an amazing number of rats under the buildings that line the alley, Master, and it only took a discarded wooden crate, a chunk of rotten ham from a trash can and some patience to capture about fifty of them. They were climbing over each other to get to the meat in the back of the box.

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I left the apartment last night and made some preparations. I used the inside stairway to go down to the basement and unlock the overhead garage door. I scanned the equipment you keep down there for your piano and appliance moving business. I didn’t know yet what my revenge would entail, but I thought your stuff might come in handy.

All the heavy lifting you’ve done over the years has made you a strong man, so when it came to rape, you never had any problem restraining me. And speaking of being strong, Master. Did you know I worked out for hours every day while I was your guest? Push ups, crunches, running in place, anything to keep my muscles toned. And here I am, Master, feeling quite good. When I finally left the apartment, I didn’t leave by way of the basement. I went out that door to nowhere which has become to me the door to anywhere I want to go.

One of your four wheeled moving dollies made easy work of getting the crate full of rats into the garage. And that brings me to this very moment. I’m climbing the stairs to where I know I will find you passed out in your recliner with the television on bringing the news of the day to a man who will be in the headlines tomorrow.

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I’ve never seen you from this vantage point, looking from the kitchen, through the living room to my room beyond. You sleep so soundly when you’ve been drinking. I can smell the piss as it seeps into the fabric of the recliner. I hope you’ve saved some for the rats. The saltiness will be a nice contrast to the sweet syrup I will use.

I retrieve the shackles and chain from my room. I begin with a length of rope from the basement and gently wrap it around your torso several times before tying it off. Still asleep? Good Master. But the chain is certain to wake you. Two wraps around your neck, pull the long ends behind the recliner and snap the padlock in place. You’re squirming now, gasping for a breath with which to cry out.

I circle the chair several times like the Children of Israel walking around Jericho, and the paper thin walls of your pseudo manhood crumple.

“Master– Say it.”

“What’s…”

“Say it now.”

“Master.”

“That sounds very good.”

“What’re you gonna do?”

“Do you have any of that fake maple syrup you like on your pancakes? Oh, here it is. Just what the new Master ordered.”

“Wha….What’re you doin’?”

“I’m pouring syrup all over you, dumbass.”

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I descend the steps to the basement and search my soul for an ounce of emotion, a hint of regret, any sense of horror at what I’m about to do. I find nothing.

I tip the crate into the stairway. A perfect fit. I knock the lid off with one of Mas… No, I’m the Master now. Who are you? What’s your name? Ten years and I don’t even know your name, but I use one of your hammers to knock the lid off the crate and fifty screeching rats surge forward.

The leader of the rat pack reaches the top of the stairs and rounds the corner into the apartment where breakfast awaits.

I take a beer from the fridge. The screams weaken to whimpers until there is only violent shaking. I lean over the counter and watch a rat’s teeth tear away a chunk of the former master’s cheek. One sits atop his head and reaches down for the delicacy of an eyeball. His body is covered with an undulating comforter of fur.

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I venture into old master’s bedroom looking for a money belt I’d seen him use. Under the mattress, of course, and not just the belt, but banded stacks of money and a handgun. The creep was a thief as well as a sadist. I take it all and drop it into a paper grocery bag in the kitchen.

After a final look at the old master, I return to the basement where I find a can of gasoline and some oil stained rags. Burning the place is for my benefit. My fingerprints are most certainly on file from any investigation into my original disappearance. And they're also all over my room upstairs. I don’t want to begin my new life on the run.

I may be a murderer now, but I’m also the new Master of my own fate.

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      Shauna L Bowling 9 months ago from Central Florida

      I responded to his challenge, too. I must have missed your first time around. I'm glad I caught the re-write!

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      Chris Mills 9 months ago from St. Louis, MO until the end of June, 2017

      Shauna, this was my response to Bill's challenge. That was one of my favorite challenges. I've rewritten the story since then. Thanks for reading n

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      Shauna L Bowling 9 months ago from Central Florida

      Chris, a while back billybuc posted a picture prompt challenge called "The Door to Nowhere". This would be an excellent response to his challenge.

      Fabulous story!

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      Chris Mills 9 months ago from St. Louis, MO until the end of June, 2017

      Lawrence, I still squirm when I read this story. I'm glad it has the effect I was hoping it would have. Thanks for reading.

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      Chris Mills 9 months ago from St. Louis, MO until the end of June, 2017

      Deb, spoils? She got some money, some revenge, freedom. Where does she go? Home? She is a different person now. I can see her going out to seek the freedom of other captives and to carry out revenge in all sorts of terrible ways. It could be that she isn't quite as free as she would like to believe. Thanks for reading.

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      Lawrence Hebb 9 months ago from Hamilton, New Zealand

      Cam

      I knew this was going to be a 'cruel' one but it was one I just couldn't help wanting to read right to the very end and almost squirming yet enjoying the delayed revenge at the end!

      I can see by the comments that I'm not the only one who thought that this was a great story.

      Lawrence

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      Deb Hirt 9 months ago from Stillwater, OK

      I recall the older version to some degree and this one shows much more detest. To the victor belongs the spoils...

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      Chris Mills 10 months ago from St. Louis, MO until the end of June, 2017

      Larry, thank you.

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      Chris Mills 10 months ago from St. Louis, MO until the end of June, 2017

      Ann, The critics that have served me best have been merciless in their critiques. At times I've stomped off with hurt pride and then realized I had simply been told the truth. But it only works if I respond and change how I write. I think it has worked for me so far. Thanks for your insight.

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      Larry Rankin 10 months ago from Oklahoma

      Another great read.

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      Ann Carr 10 months ago from SW England

      Oh yes, now I remember, Chris. Huge improvement; it's great to see such progress, from good to very very good! It's proof of how well your system of readers and critics works.

      Ann

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      Chris Mills 10 months ago from St. Louis, MO until the end of June, 2017

      Ann, This story was part of Bill's "Door to Nowhere" challenge. I've rewritten it to reflect what I have learned about writing short fiction. I'm glad you can see the improvement.

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      Chris Mills 10 months ago from St. Louis, MO until the end of June, 2017

      Eric, I'm not sure where she is going, but I have considered carrying her story on. Thanks for reading.

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      Chris Mills 10 months ago from St. Louis, MO until the end of June, 2017

      We've heard these stories in the news, MizBejabbers, and I just wanted to provide a fictional payback for those who have actually endured years of captivity and abuse. Rats, by the way, are my worst nightmare. Thanks for taking time to read the story.

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      MizBejabbers 10 months ago

      Wow! what can I say except what a story. Too bad all of the sadist kidnappers don't end up that way.

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      Eric Dierker 10 months ago from Spring Valley, CA. U.S.A.

      Very cool. Go new master go!

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      Ann Carr 10 months ago from SW England

      Brilliant story, a perfect flesh-creeper! Didn't you do a previous version of this one? This is much, much better. The horror and the revenge are just right; you've actually made me like the murderer!

      Ann

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      Chris Mills 10 months ago from St. Louis, MO until the end of June, 2017

      Nicole, there have been some horrific tales like this in the news, haven't there. Thank you for stopping by to read the story.

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      Chris Mills 10 months ago from St. Louis, MO until the end of June, 2017

      tlcs, I am very happy you enjoyed the story. You will find more on my profile, some darker, some much lighter. I hope you find more to your liking.

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      Chris Mills 10 months ago from St. Louis, MO until the end of June, 2017

      Venkat, I'm glad you liked the story. Thanks for stopping by to read.

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      Nicole Young 07 10 months ago from Chicago Illinois

      Interesting, I feel like I was reading a true to life story!

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      tlcs 10 months ago

      Oh my goodness! That was thriller at its best. That is the best, captivating short story I have ever readvon hubpages. 100% excellent. Can't wait for the next one!

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      Venkatachari M 10 months ago from Hyderabad, India

      Good story. The method of taking revenge is somewhat new. Enjoyed it.

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      Chris Mills 10 months ago from St. Louis, MO until the end of June, 2017

      Ruby, It is interesting how the victim can turn around and do something equally horrible as the bad guy, and we root for the victim to succeed. Like the old saying goes, "I don't get mad, I get even." Thanks for reading.

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      Chris Mills 10 months ago from St. Louis, MO until the end of June, 2017

      Austinstar, you can write the sequel. I'll stay on your good side. Thanks for stopping and reading.

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      Chris Mills 10 months ago from St. Louis, MO until the end of June, 2017

      manatita, thanks for that. I'm partial to gruesome by the way.

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      Ruby Jean Fuller 10 months ago from Southern Illinois

      Lordy, you know how to make a reader root for a sadistic murderer, the second master. What a way to go! Loved it!!!!!

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      Austinstar 10 months ago from Somewhere in the universe

      Oh what i would have done differently. The death of a thousand cuts come to mind. And an alcohol drip into the eyeballs.

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      manatita44 10 months ago from london

      Back to your very best here, and original as well as gruesome. Superb!

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