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Monday, May 3rd

Updated on September 2, 2014

Monday, May 3rd,

death was loud,

it was heard,

roaring like a crowd,

on Brooklyn’s streets,

so demanding,

the detective finds himself standing,

in a piss stench hallway,

it was going to be a start of a dreary day,


her pants pulled down below her knees,

her hair covered in fleas,

there was no rape,

but she was covered partially,

by a dirty curtain that hung by the window

near the fire escape.

as she laid across the dirty floor,

the crime scene was secure,

no witnesses, no motive,

a fifty year old woman grabbed,

stabbed, and stabbed some more,

causing skin patches, jagged scratches,

fresh damage that was consistent

with the downward thrusts of a sharp edge,

the situation was strange,

because, it would seem,

she was also shot in the head at close range,

the detective slowly walked the crime scene,

pounding his fist,

and running through his mental list,

asking himself why was she dead,

you could almost hear the cards

turning inside his head,

she was found by a neighbor

who lived upstairs,

he said she had many male affairs,

but who cares,

she was a decent woman,

whose last breath,

ended in a meaningless death.

© 2011 Frank Atanacio


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      Frank Atanacio 2 years ago from Shelton

      Bless you Justateacher really I appreciate your stop-overs :)

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      LaDena Campbell 5 years ago from Somewhere Over The Rainbow - Near Oz...

      I love how you put words together to paint us a always you can see the scene in your mind...almost as if we are watching a movie...another great write!

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      Frank Atanacio 5 years ago from Shelton

      oh thanks Alastar for reading didnt see you there :)

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      Alastar Packer 6 years ago from North Carolina

      Like how the picture of the Black man marginalized by society walks alone up the stairs as it compares to the marginalized promiscuous woman dying a lonely and meaningless death. Hyphen recommended you highly Frank, and I'm glad she did.

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      Frank Atanacio 6 years ago from Shelton

      Thanks so much Kitty.. realistic fiction?

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      Nicole Canfield 6 years ago from the Ether

      Frank - Is this a real happening? How sad! But your poem is very well-written and engaging. Voted up and interesting.

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      Frank Atanacio 6 years ago from Shelton

      thank you so much writer20.. see you around my friend

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      Joyce Haragsim 6 years ago from Southern Nevada

      You have a great poem here Frankie that I ejoyed. voted and awesome my friend just for you.

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      Frank Atanacio 6 years ago from Shelton

      Just Ask Susan, what would I do without you? Cyndi10 here in Connecticut we share the same dreay day..LOL thank you so much for reading, Senoritaa, thank you for your loyal visit-- Our Ms Brooks, just having you aboard my Monday May 3rd, makes me feel good-- Audrey, your comments mean a great deal to me honestly.. and Mr. Brooklyn Bound Sky.. so you know some of the plights..LOL Brookln really isn't so bad.. it is the Garden Spot of the world..right? LOL thanks for sharing and caring

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      Sky9106 6 years ago from A beautiful place on earth.

      Brooklyn , I am a son of Brooklyn. With that said , great words , I felt you on the scene, doing what I think you do best. Give us your readers , a poetic account of those great investigative thoughts, that rolls through the head of Frank Antanacio.

      Great read.


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      Audrey Howitt 6 years ago from California

      Very cool write--I like where this one lives Frank--well done!!!!

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      Deborah Brooks Langford 6 years ago from Brownsville,TX

      Great mystery poem.. I love your poems.. always full of mystery and suspense.. I am a fan...

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      Senoritaa 6 years ago

      The plight of the detective, and the sad murder, well written prose Frank!

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      Cynthia B Turner 6 years ago from Georgia

      Hello Frank, Great poem to read on a dreary day like today here in Georgia. Enjoyed it.

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      Susan Zutautas 6 years ago from Ontario, Canada

      Your welcome! Oh and BTW I did enjoy the poem.

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      Frank Atanacio 6 years ago from Shelton

      thanks Susan for sneaking in and catching that error