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My Children are Hollow

Updated on June 3, 2012

Subliminally Thoughtless Challenge

Title "My Children are Hollow" created

by Voronwe

Poem written

by Cruelkindness

My Children are Hollow

Dark shades of days have shadowed my children


Pockets of aloneness reveal caves for child's eyes


Steep ledges of sadness fall lengths into deep depths


Thuds of rain bleed pain beats into their red heart


Nightmare's frozen blanket shells the souls for comfort


Dirt fields breathe with mock lurking faces of freight




Chills chatter riddles in my doubtful thoughts


Terror crawled with wither by my side with no disturbance


Shedding dust of haunts to ash cover my children


Fault disappears into wicked chalk cover blurred cracks


For the smog burns clouds of fault smoking my shut vision


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    • Carlos Catatonia profile image

      Carlos Catatonia 4 years ago from new orleans, louisiana

      Good work, I was so focused when I was reading this. It sucked me right in.

    • BeyondMax profile image

      BeyondMax 5 years ago from Sydney, Australia

      Emotional read, touching deep heart and soul. Sad but so true.

    • Gypsy Rose Lee profile image

      Gypsy Rose Lee 5 years ago from Riga, Latvia

      Really deep and powerful. It's always the innocent children that suffer the most in any situation. Voted up and awesome.

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      Nithya Venkat 5 years ago from Dubai

      WOW powerful and fantastic. Great poem.

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      Joyce Haragsim 5 years ago from Southern Nevada

      Great written poem although it's rathe dark. Voted up and interesting.

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      DragonflyTreasure 5 years ago from on the breeze.........

      This couldbe written for my children and I. Currently going through a divorce from a 36 yr physical and emotional abusive marriage. We're all suffering from PTSD. your poem says it all. You are an excellent poet/writer.

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      Voronwe 5 years ago

      This one is drenched in the dark tone painted by your words. And interesting choice and placement of words. Thank you, cruelkindness! Love your take on the title.

      Some intensely powerful phrases of depth...

      "dust of haunts" and "clouds of fault smoking my shut vision"...infact this goes to every line.

      Thanks for the links as well! :) Your undertaking has been one of the most interesting poetry challenges here on HP. Kudos to you!

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