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"Never Let Me Go"; "Never Will I" - A Poem on Lost Love

Updated on June 29, 2014
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Never let me go
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"Never let me go" she begged

"Never will I" he promised, reassured

On souls that have departed

And that still existed


Patiently she waited

Heart filled with hopes and trust

Building dreams

For life together eternal

And happiness ever after


"Will be back in a fortnight" he assured

For I have a commitment to fulfill

"Come back soon my love" she whispered

For days will seem like years

Without you by my side


She hoped and prayed and waited

Patiently With hopes

Built on promises he made

A fortnight passed, a month passed

She waited and waited


Cried in pain but still in hope

Wrote to him but in vain

Days turned into weeks

And weeks into Months

But nothing heard

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And he sends her a note

One fine day

“I have no choice, But to let you go" it read

She hears from friends of his

His lies, his games, his pre-planned tricks


She screamed in pain, in heart ache, in fear

Wetting her pillows day and night

Although the waiting was over

In a way least expected

Love turned into anger

And into hate it seemed


No it wasn't true

For she could not let go

That feeling she had for him

Deep inside her little heart

A beautiful feeling called "Love"


~Livingsta

P.S: This is my first attempt in writing a poem, that has exceeded 5 lines. I would sincerely appreciate any honest feedback and advice please.



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      livingsta 17 months ago from United Kingdom

      Hello Ian, thank you for reading and the feedback. I am glad that you liked!

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      Ian D Hetri 2 years ago from Papua New Guinea

      A very sweet poem. Moving and romantic aroma

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      livingsta 4 years ago from United Kingdom

      Hi Lisa Williams, thank you for reading. Also thank you for feedback + appreciation and vote. I am pleased you liked it! Have a great week ahead!

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      Lisa Williams 4 years ago

      Wow, I would have never imagined that this was your first attempt at writing a poem (longer than 5 lines). You definitely nailed it. It flows well and evokes emotion. I thought it was beautiful . I voted up..

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      livingsta 4 years ago from United Kingdom

      Thank you so much for the appreciation Anglnwu. I am glad you liked it :-)

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      anglnwu 4 years ago

      Lovely yet sad, nicely expressed in this poem. Thanks for sharing your wonderful talent.

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      livingsta 4 years ago from United Kingdom

      Hello Rajan, thank you so much. I'm glad you liked it. Thank you for the votes and share. Have a great week ahead!

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      Rajan Singh Jolly 4 years ago from From Mumbai, presently in Jalandhar,INDIA.

      It's an awesome and beautiful poem livingsta.

      Very expressive. up, beautiful and shared.

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      livingsta 4 years ago from United Kingdom

      Hi CrisSp, thank you for stopping by. I am glad it brings out that feeling. Thank you so much again. You have a good day!

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      CrisSp 4 years ago from Sky Is The Limit Adventure

      Sounding like it came from the heart and your readers can definitely feel it.

      Lovely photos. Well done!

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      livingsta 4 years ago from United Kingdom

      Thank you so much Mr-veg, I am glad you liked it. Thank you so much for the appreciation.

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      mr-veg 4 years ago from Colorado United States

      Wow... for the first timer that's awesome !! I could feel it as I read it, way to go poet :)

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      livingsta 4 years ago from United Kingdom

      Thank you James. I do understand how you feel and how it hurts. Thank you for sharing your thoughts, feelings and all the appreciation and vote. You have a good week. Sending you smiles and blessings :-)

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      Tijani Achamlal 4 years ago from Morocco

      Wow..so beautiful,romantic and touchy.It fills my eyes with tears.It reminds me of someone I believed in did the same thing to me.Good job.You are very talented.Write more poems.I voted up.

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      livingsta 4 years ago from United Kingdom

      Thank you so much Debbie. Happy to hear this from a poet :-)

      Thank you so much for the vote and share.

      Blessings back to you !

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      Deborah Brooks Langford 4 years ago from Brownsville,TX

      your feeling and love lost in this poem has true meaning.. if this is the first attempt at writing a poem.. then I say Bravo!!!

      wonderful I might say

      many blessings

      and thanks for the follow

      Debbie

      voted up and sharing

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      livingsta 4 years ago from United Kingdom

      Hello Vinaya, I hope you are referring to the science fiction movie. I did watch that movie too and was kind of scared about that unusual school what the children were brought up and used for. I am glad you liked the poem. Thank you. Have a great weekend!

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      Vinaya Ghimire 4 years ago from Nepal

      The title reminds me a beautiful movie I watched few years ago. I loved your choice of expressions. Beautiful poem.

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      livingsta 4 years ago from United Kingdom

      Thanks a lot Rosemay50. I am in the process of writing a few more. I hope I succeed in getting my message across! :-)

      Thank you for the follow !!!

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      Rosemary Sadler 4 years ago from Hawkes Bay - NewZealand

      This is excellent for a first attempt. You get the emotions across very well besides creating images through your words.

      Am following to watch your poetry grow. :))

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      livingsta 4 years ago from United Kingdom

      @dghbrh Thank you so much dear Deergha. I am glad you and a few others liked it. It was after a lot of hesitation that I posted it, but now I am glad I did it :-)

      Thank you so much for the vote and share. You too take care and have an awesome weekend!

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      deergha 4 years ago from ...... a place beyond now and beyond here !!!

      Way to go and I am here waiting for your lot - many - more poems with time. First poem and you have made a mark in many hearts. Emotion in true color but so nicely and spontaneously expressed and quite maintained beyond "five lines". Thank you for sharing this one. Votes up and interesting . I am sharing it too. Take care...:-)

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      livingsta 4 years ago from United Kingdom

      Hi Gypsy Rose Lee, thank you so much. Was a bit worried initially, and now kind of motivated to write more. Thank you again for the appreciation and feedback, and also the vote and share :-)

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      Gypsy Rose Lee 4 years ago from Riga, Latvia

      Voted up and beautiful. A wonderful poem. For the first time amazing. You got a knack for this just keep on creating. Passing this on.

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      livingsta 4 years ago from United Kingdom

      Hi Agusfanani, thank you so much. Glad you liked it :-)

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      livingsta 4 years ago from United Kingdom

      Hi Janhorner, thank you so much for the valued feedback. I am pleased and happy that you enjoyed it. Thank you for the vote :-)

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      agusfanani 4 years ago from Indonesia

      A very beautiful poem, although you write it for the first time.

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      Janhorner 4 years ago

      Hi, I see this is a first long poem for you. I loved the first 5 verses they are telling a story. The finishing verses were full of the passions of anger. Enjoyed the read and the style. Voted up,

      Jan

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      livingsta 4 years ago from United Kingdom

      Thank you so much Blossom B! :-)

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      Bronwen Scott-Branagan 4 years ago from Victoria, Australia

      A lovely poem that tells a story as well. Keep writing!

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      livingsta 4 years ago from United Kingdom

      Thank you so much Ruby H Rose for reading and the feedback. Much appreciated :-)

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      livingsta 4 years ago from United Kingdom

      Hi Teaches12345, thank you so much for the feedback and also for taking time to read! I am glad you liked it! :-)

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      Maree Michael Martin 4 years ago from Northwest Washington on an Island

      I found it quite moving, with great pictures.

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      Dianna Mendez 4 years ago

      I can only tell you that your talent is excellent, regardless of poem size! Lovely and so expressive about a relationship.

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