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No Harm Done - A poem

Updated on May 25, 2011

No Harm Done


Doorbell rings

Open door

Familiar face

Not seen before

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“Your name Jim?”

Nod my head

Young man stares

Nothing’s said

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Clears his throat

Looks around

“Something lost

Something found”

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“Do you know

A Janet Drew?”

Nod again

Indeed I do

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Years ago

A shameful thing

Broke my vows

Removed my ring

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Later with child

“Is he mine?”

“No’, she says

“Not this time.”

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Broken hearts

Many tears

Cruel regrets

Missing years

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Moved away

Began new life

Lost my way

Lost my wife

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Now he stands

Inside my door

Familiar face

Not seen before

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“Mother lied

What’s done is done

I’m here to say

That I’m your son.”

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Handsome lad

A father’s pride

Wave my arm

“Come inside.”

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Talk awhile

Shed a tear

Father and son

Share a beer

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I wasn’t there

To raise my son

To help him grow

What have I done?

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Harmless tryst

Harmless flirt

No harm done

No one hurt.

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The cruelest lie

We’ll ever hear

Is what we whisper

In our own ear

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      BethanyLynn211 6 years ago from Bangor, Pa

      I absolutely love your style of writing. It is simple yet flows so beautifully.

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      ii3rittles 6 years ago

      Short, sweet, love it :)

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      marellen 6 years ago

      I always wondered how it would feel finding out you fathered a child and meeting them as an adult. Nice and heartfelt story, Will.

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      WillStarr 6 years ago from Phoenix, Arizona

      Thank you, BethanyLynn211. You are a rising star.

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      WillStarr 6 years ago from Phoenix, Arizona

      Hi, ii3rittles, and thank you!

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      WillStarr 6 years ago from Phoenix, Arizona

      Hi, marellen,

      How hard would that be? Learning that your own child is a stranger and that they grew up without you?

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      diogenes 6 years ago

      Will: I don't know whether this actually happened to you, and that's your business, but I had something like this happen to me 4 years ago. When we're young, we scythe through people and relationships as if the universe was made for us, but there's a pay-back waiting in the wings.

      Excellent poem...Bob

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      TimBryce 6 years ago

      Very well done Will. Poignant.

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      Augustine A Zavala 6 years ago from Texas

      Timeless story retold in prose. Brilliant!

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      Brenda Barnes 6 years ago from America-Broken But Still Beautiful

      I love the clean simple lines you used to write about a complex subject. Yes, the indiscretions we put behind us rise to haunt for a long time. Choices shape our future and make reality whet it is every day. You write it well WillStarr.

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      Susan Zutautas 6 years ago from Ontario, Canada

      Very nice!

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      Alaster Packer 6 years ago

      WillStarr I do believe in God and sometimes this is the way it must be. Simple but well crafted and beautiful is your poem here. I recently found my birth mom and that side of family and may seek the father. Hyphenbird is right about you; more folks should have an opportunity to find your writings here on HP.

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      Poohgranma 6 years ago from On the edge

      I tried for forty years to find that door to knock on and never could. I'd like to think he would have received me as graciously as the character in your poem did his child.

      This is a hauntingly beautiful poem. You have so much talent.

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      Dexter Yarbrough 6 years ago from United States

      Excellent poem, Will.

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      Diane 6 years ago

      Excellent Will ! You have a special gift for writing anything!

      I believe God gives us all a gift. Some make use of their talents like you do!

      Keep them coming!

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      Amy Becherer 6 years ago from St. Louis, MO

      The straightforward, honest, pure, unembellished truth that your piece perfectly gives could have saved much grief for many if mother hadn't lied. It's sad when one person's choices result in years of confusion, lies and deception. Your poem gives a complex situation hope and the realization that it's never to late to make things right. I believe things happen for a reason, and, ultimately, unfold as it is destined to be. Although, circumstances and outcome may not be the way we want, it's what we got. Your poem, Will, shows great power in the ability to roll with the facts, the punches and surprises in life. The brilliant, pure style of your writing perfectly matches the stark reality of this complex story.

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      Lesleysherwood 6 years ago

      Boy. This is so moving and again its so real. This is what many people experience. It all seems "fun" at the time. But its not is it. It causes so much pain. Thank you for this hub,you are very talented.

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      globehouse 6 years ago

      Telling a heart-felt-story ; with clarity & few words is no easy-thing ; yet , you did it...and did it very-well.

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      Eiddwen 6 years ago from Wales

      Briliantly told Will and in so few words!!!

      I push all the buttons for this one as well.

      Take care

      Eiddwen.

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      Ronnie Sowell 6 years ago from South Carolina

      I don't read poetry. Looks like I do now. Voted up and awesome!

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      Nan Mynatt 6 years ago from Illinois

      Your poem is very moving, and it happens a lot. People lie everyday about who the father is of the child. Adopted children, who don't know their identity. One way to look at it is when you marry you take on a new love and start anew and swear to live with them forever. Excellent verse, and heart touching. I marked you up!

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      feenix 6 years ago

      Will, this is an excellent work of art that effectively expresses that there are always consequences to our actions and that God often steps in to give us what could be described as a second chance to make things right.

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      James W. Nelson 6 years ago from eastern North Dakota

      Father and son "share a beer" yes! Beautiful poem, Will.

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      The Frog Prince 6 years ago from Arlington, TX

      Will - That was absolutely beautiful.

      The Frog

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      maven101 6 years ago from Northern Arizona

      So much said in so few lines...Loved the ebb and flow of this lament....That last line is so true...reminds me of WH Auden's remark, " All that we are not stares back at what we are "...Thanks, Larry

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      drbj and sherry 6 years ago from south Florida

      An ironic but appropriate title, Will, for a positively brilliant piece of poetry. Thanks for the ride.

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      Carolee Samuda 6 years ago from Jamaica

      I am glad you are getting it out Will, it will help you heal and forgive yourself. I hope your son understands that you were lied to. Up and awesome!!

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      mckbirdbks 6 years ago from Emerald Wells, Just off the crossroads,Texas

      Many of our trails are covered with broken glass. This cuts deep.

      Very well said.

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      WillStarr 6 years ago from Phoenix, Arizona

      Hi Bob and thank you.

      No, this is fictional.

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      Doug Turner Jr. 6 years ago

      I know you're a short story guy, Will, but your poetry always does it for me too. It's the brevity; the brevity and the powerful meaning behind the words. I always rush over when I see you've published a poem, only to find that dozens of your adoring fans have already beat me here. Ah, well, doesn't matter when I arrive, as long as I get to read them. Well done.

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      Don A. Hoglund 6 years ago from Wisconsin Rapids

      The past has a way of coming back.

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      WillStarr 6 years ago from Phoenix, Arizona

      Thanks, TimBryce!

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      WillStarr 6 years ago from Phoenix, Arizona

      Hi, A.A. Zavala, and thank you!

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      WillStarr 6 years ago from Phoenix, Arizona

      Hi, Hyphenbird!

      Thank you for your kind words.

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      WillStarr 6 years ago from Phoenix, Arizona

      Hi, Susan and thank you!

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      WillStarr 6 years ago from Phoenix, Arizona

      Hi, Alaster Packer, and good luck on your quest.

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      WillStarr 6 years ago from Phoenix, Arizona

      Hi, Poohgranma,

      I'm sure your father would love you like we do.

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      Wayne Brown 6 years ago from Texas

      Well...WillStarr the poet emerges and spreads his wings. Extremely well done...excellent! WB

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      Movie Master 6 years ago from United Kingdom

      Hi Will, I found you and I found poetry, beautiful.

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      WillStarr 6 years ago from Phoenix, Arizona

      Hi, Dexter!

      Thank you.

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      WillStarr 6 years ago from Phoenix, Arizona

      Hi, Diane, and thank you for your support.

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      WillStarr 6 years ago from Phoenix, Arizona

      Hi, Amy Becherer,

      True. Cheating, lies, and lasting pain go hand in hand.

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      WillStarr 6 years ago from Phoenix, Arizona

      Hi, Lesleysherwood, and thank you for that thoughtful comment.

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      WillStarr 6 years ago from Phoenix, Arizona

      Hi, globehouse, and thank you for reading!

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      WillStarr 6 years ago from Phoenix, Arizona

      Hi, Eiddwen, and thank you so much!

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      WillStarr 6 years ago from Phoenix, Arizona

      Hi, resspenser, and thank you for holding your nose and reading some poetry! :-)

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      WillStarr 6 years ago from Phoenix, Arizona

      Thank you Nan!

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      WillStarr 6 years ago from Phoenix, Arizona

      Hi, feenix, and yes, sooner or later, we must pay for our sins.

      Thank God we can be forgiven.

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      WillStarr 6 years ago from Phoenix, Arizona

      Hi, SubRon7, and thank you.

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      WillStarr 6 years ago from Phoenix, Arizona

      Hi, Frog Prince!

      Thanks, buddy.

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      WillStarr 6 years ago from Phoenix, Arizona

      Hi, maven101, and thsnks for reading.

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      WillStarr 6 years ago from Phoenix, Arizona

      Thanks, drbj!

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      WillStarr 6 years ago from Phoenix, Arizona

      Hi, Cardisa,

      Actually, it's a fictional account of something that too often happens..

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      WillStarr 6 years ago from Phoenix, Arizona

      Hi, Doug Turner Jr., and thank you for your always kind words.

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      WillStarr 6 years ago from Phoenix, Arizona

      Thank you for your comments, dahoglund.

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      WillStarr 6 years ago from Phoenix, Arizona

      Hi, Wayne and thank you for reading!

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      WillStarr 6 years ago from Phoenix, Arizona

      Hi, Movie Master, and feel free to read some of my other work!

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      Angie Jardine 6 years ago from Cornwall, land of the eternally youthful mind ...

      Taut and beautiful poem, Will ...

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      Website Examiner 6 years ago

      It's good, well said with a few precise strokes.

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      WillStarr 6 years ago from Phoenix, Arizona

      Thank you, Angie Jardine, and thanks for the visit!

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      WillStarr 6 years ago from Phoenix, Arizona

      Thank you, Website Examiner. Coming from such a fine writer as yourself, that's high praise indeed.

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      quester.ltd 6 years ago

      short, clear brutally honest feelings

      well done

      q

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      WillStarr 6 years ago from Phoenix, Arizona

      Thank you, quester.ltd!

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      b. Malin 6 years ago

      This Poem seems like it's True, WillStarr, and if so...It's never to late to Bond...Loved this one, it comes from the Heart and Soul of your Life.

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      WillStarr 6 years ago from Phoenix, Arizona

      Thank you. b. Malin,

      It's true in the sense that it has happened many times, but since it was written in first person, it's work of fiction.

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      QudsiaP1 6 years ago

      ~~"The cruelest lie

      We’ll ever hear

      Is what we whisper

      In our own ear"~~

      Simple, elegant and beautifully told. WillStarr, where were you hiding this talented poet? You must allow your this side to surface more. :)

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      WillStarr 6 years ago from Phoenix, Arizona

      Hi, QudsiaP1,

      I've written several here.

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      Kathy 6 years ago from California

      Very touching, I like this Will! The feeling really comes through for me.

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      suziecat7 6 years ago from Asheville, NC

      Loved this. Your simple verse says so much - mark of a good poet.

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      Walt Smith 6 years ago

      Loved it friend and it has a ring of familiarity to it as well. The last part was perfect and oh so true. Voted up, awesome and in my heart beautiful...W

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      Chris Merritt 6 years ago from Pendleton, Indiana

      What can I say that I have not already have said with all of your writings?

      You get the most miles out every word you use....powerful and short...

      I put you in the same class as Walter Payton...not all that big or tall, but he was one of THE most proficient and powerful backs to ever play in the NFL. YOU are the "Sweetness" in the literature world.

      That is about the highest form of compliment I can muster up....and in all seriousness, I really mean it from my heart.

      I am a lifetime member of the WillStar fan club...

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      WillStarr 6 years ago from Phoenix, Arizona

      Hi, Chatkath. Thank you!

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      WillStarr 6 years ago from Phoenix, Arizona

      Hi, suziecat7,

      It's all your fault you know! You brought me to HubPages! :-)

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      WillStarr 6 years ago from Phoenix, Arizona

      Hi, Walt Smith, and thank you kindly!

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      WillStarr 6 years ago from Phoenix, Arizona

      Hi, CMerritt.

      I would have thought that getting the kind of praise you just offered would make me swell up, but it has just the opposite effect...it's very humbling.

      Thank you, my friend.

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      writeronline 6 years ago

      Very nice work indeed. Good too, that we can summarise your skills, explain your pseudonym, and predict your future, in the same concise way...

      "Can Write. Will Star".

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      WillStarr 6 years ago from Phoenix, Arizona

      Thank you, writeronline, for those very kind words!

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      epigramman 6 years ago

      ...you were born to write and move us with your words Sir! (and you have the coolest hub profile picture of all time)

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      theseus 6 years ago from philippines

      Brilliant storytelling. Short yet poignant. The message reaches the deepest core of every reader's being. Keep on writing, you have the gift.God bless.

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      Maria Jordan 6 years ago from Jeffersonville PA

      Will gives me the chills.

      That was so utterly powerful. It convinces me that you could re-write the phone book, and I would be enthralled.

      Voted UP & AWESOME & BEAUTIFUL!

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      WillStarr 6 years ago from Phoenix, Arizona

      Hi Epi, and thanks for stopping by!

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      WillStarr 6 years ago from Phoenix, Arizona

      Hi theseus, and thank you!

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      WillStarr 6 years ago from Phoenix, Arizona

      Hi, marcoujor,

      LOL @ the phone book! Thank you!

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      50 Caliber 6 years ago from Arizona

      Aye a heartfelt poem with a Willstarr twist as it comes to the final lines. It is amazing how we lie to ourselves trying to right some of our actions, dust

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      WillStarr 6 years ago from Phoenix, Arizona

      Hi Dusty!

      You're in my prayers, my friend.

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      Martie Coetser 6 years ago from South Africa

      I admire your ability to tell a story with only a few words. I could clearly feel the emotions of father and son. I’m in awe. It is so-so-so true: “The cruelest lie we’ll ever hear Is what we whisper In our own ear.” This also goes for people who like to be tortured by their own conscience. We do so many wrongs without the intention to hurt others or ourselves. We are reckless and selfish beings and not always able to handle the consequences of our deeds. May father and son now have a wonderful relationship.

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      WillStarr 6 years ago from Phoenix, Arizona

      Hi, MartieCoetser, and thank you. It's a fictional account of the damage we do when we do not consider the consequences of our actions.

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      Nicole Canfield 6 years ago from the Ether

      WillStarr - Absolutely amazingly beautiful poem! I really felt like this was from your heart...as if you had lived this experience. Voted up and beautiful. Simply breathtaking, yet simple. A work of art.

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      WillStarr 6 years ago from Phoenix, Arizona

      Hi, kitty,

      No, but who knows what lives are forever altered by a thoughtless and selfish moment?

      Thank you.

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      Granny's House 6 years ago from Older and Hopefully Wiser Time

      Will, what can I say. It has all been said in the wonderful comments here on your hub. Fantastic

      I will share this

      It is so beautiful

      peace

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      WillStarr 6 years ago from Phoenix, Arizona

      Thank you, Granny's House!

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      tumblintumblweed 6 years ago

      Excellent hub, Will,and very heart-felt! Kudos, my friend!

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      WillStarr 6 years ago from Phoenix, Arizona

      Thank you, tumblintumblweed!

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      Robert Elias Ballard 6 years ago from Zirconia, North Carolina

      Good write Will, I know this actually happened in our community to a fellow. He was so shocked when the son he did not know existed knocked on the door to introduce himself.

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      Nyesha Pagnou MPH 6 years ago from USA

      I find this to be an excellent poem. You are talented. Thanks for sharing.

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      WillStarr 6 years ago from Phoenix, Arizona

      Thank you, Fiddleman. Yes, it does happen.

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      WillStarr 6 years ago from Phoenix, Arizona

      Hi, Journey, and thank you!

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      Nadine M AuCoin 6 years ago from the Island of Cape Breton to the Eastern Shores near Halifax, NS

      Devine!!!

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      WillStarr 6 years ago from Phoenix, Arizona

      Thank you, Maggie-May!

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      K.A.E Grove 5 years ago from Australia

      This was an amazing poem, tight with so much emotion yet so visual, simply a great expression. loved it and voting it up!!

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      WillStarr 5 years ago from Phoenix, Arizona

      Thank you, nighthag, for the great comment!

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      Linda Rogers 5 years ago from Minnesota

      Will-This is a beautiful piece of work. The picture that goes with this hub just pulls at the heart strings. I too love how your poetry is short lines and to the point. It makes it jump out at you:)

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      WillStarr 5 years ago from Phoenix, Arizona

      Hi, Twin, and thank you!

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      ahorseback 5 years ago

      Awesome Will, sad but often true.

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      WillStarr 5 years ago from Phoenix, Arizona

      Thank you, ahorseback, and I agree.

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      Audrey Hunt 5 years ago from Nashville Tn.

      Tears filled my eyes as my heart opened wide, wanting to protect the Father from such pain. Poetry such as this is so magnificent, so well done, there are no words to do it justice. Will, dear man, you have managed to rise to a whole new level with this one. You are filled with talent and sensitivity. I rise to applaude you! All the buttons have been pushed and voted up! vocalcoach

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      WillStarr 5 years ago from Phoenix, Arizona

      Thank you, vocalcoach. That's high praise!

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      Chibuzo Melvin Mobis 5 years ago from Biafra

      Wow! Wow! this is a cool piece that 'lost my life,lost my wife'...inspirational piece.

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      WillStarr 5 years ago from Phoenix, Arizona

      Thank you, Rossimobis!

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      Nellieanna Hay 5 years ago from TEXAS

      Will - my, my, my. This really rings true to life, whosever it may be. Excellent writing about a reality that happens. Your choices of every single word are each so clear and edgy, yet the overall effect somehow encompasses the mistiness of past and softens its edges, bringing into a present moment a beautiful reunion of strangers who just happen to be father and son. I am awed. Voted up and all the rest.

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      WillStarr 5 years ago from Phoenix, Arizona

      Hi Nellieanna, and thank you so much! Coming from you, that's quite a compliment.

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      Nellieanna Hay 5 years ago from TEXAS

      Truth is truth!! :-)

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      lee custodio 5 years ago

      add some melody and this would be a beautiful song!

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      WillStarr 5 years ago from Phoenix, Arizona

      Hi Lee, and thank you!

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      TCM Specialist 5 years ago from Glassboro, New Jersey

      Amazing abilities WillStarr...ever consider song writing? I have the connections.

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      WillStarr 5 years ago from Phoenix, Arizona

      Hi TCM Specialist,

      Actually, I have a country song posted here...Wanton Woman:

      https://hubpages.com/entertainment/Country-song-ly...

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      Aka Professor M 5 years ago

      Poetically short and profound,

      A story told of a love found,

      What should have been so sweet,

      The result of Passion indiscreet!

      +++++++++++++++++++++++++++++++

      Then years later from the past,

      A young man who learned at last,

      What Mom had said about his dad,

      Wasn't the Truth he wasn't bad!

      ++++++++++++++++++++++++++++++

      Time was lost it would not return,

      Missing years what each did learn,

      A father and son each never knew,

      The pain and heartache it did do!

      ++++++++++++++++++++++++++++++++++

      They shared their stories as friends,

      Hopefully this relationship time mends,

      The prayers of the boy without a Dad'

      And the Love of a Father he never Had!

      +++++++++++++++++++++++++++++++++++++

      As with Epi's hubs, I reply to the author as each piece hits me. This piece was magnificent and inspired me to poetically paraphrase your genius, my friend!

      Please accept this as my gift to a very talented and gifted individual, You bill!

      Regards Mike! (Aka Professor M!) ;D

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      WillStarr 5 years ago from Phoenix, Arizona

      Thank you, Aka Professor M!

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      Aka Professor M 5 years ago

      My apologies for the small"b" there ! You are BILL will a capital in my book , Sir! And my friends call me Mike ;D

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      WillStarr 5 years ago from Phoenix, Arizona

      No offense taken, and thank you, Mike!

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      Jennuhlee 5 years ago from Pennsylvania

      great rhythm, so beautiful.

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      WillStarr 5 years ago from Phoenix, Arizona

      Thank you Jennuhlee!

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      jami l. pereira 5 years ago

      Beautifully sad , and worth voting for ! i voted up awesome and beautiful ! thanks for the read:)

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      WillStarr 5 years ago from Phoenix, Arizona

      Thank you, jami l. pereira!

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      quester.ltd 5 years ago

      came back to read again those short powerful words

      q

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      WillStarr 5 years ago from Phoenix, Arizona

      Thank you, quester.ltd.

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      Barbara Bethard 5 years ago from Tucson, Az

      oh so beautiful Will as always...

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      WillStarr 5 years ago from Phoenix, Arizona

      Hi Barb, and thank you!

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      Erin Bower 5 years ago from Georgia

      You really know how to convey emotion in poetry! I voted this up and awesome.

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      WillStarr 5 years ago from Phoenix, Arizona

      Hi Ebower, and thank you again!

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      acaetnna 5 years ago from Guildford

      This is so perfect. I loved the rhythm and your words expressed such emotion. Voting up and pushing those buttons too.

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      WillStarr 5 years ago from Phoenix, Arizona

      Hi acaetnna, and thank you. That's a grand compliment from such a lovely poet.

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      justmesuzanne 5 years ago from Texas

      This is a lovely poem. I like the economy of words, and the message. It evokes a very clear picture of the speaker and the situation. Voted up and awesome! :)

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      WillStarr 5 years ago from Phoenix, Arizona

      Hi justmesuzanne, and thank you!

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      ruffridyer 5 years ago from Dayton, ohio

      It makes me wonder how many men are living their lives never knowing they have a child somewhere.

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      WillStarr 5 years ago from Phoenix, Arizona

      Hi ruffridyer,

      I would guess quite a few, and I would guess that far more have a dead child in their past.

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      Annette Donaldson 5 years ago from Northern Ireland

      Hi Will, you dark horse why have I never noticed your poetry before? This was a full story in prose. Loved it, well done.

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      WillStarr 5 years ago from Phoenix, Arizona

      Hi Annette and thank you! There are also a couple of other attempts at poetry here.

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      Victoria Lynn 5 years ago from Arkansas, USA

      Wow! A complicated situation presented in clear, pure languge. I love how your wrote this. I got goosebumps at one point.

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      WillStarr 5 years ago from Phoenix, Arizona

      Hi Victoria Lynn,

      It's a fictional account loosely based on a collection of old memories, and people who are precious to me.

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      Prisana Nuechterlein 5 years ago from Thailand and Colorado

      Great poem. A sad reality for many, glad it was fiction for you!

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      WillStarr 5 years ago from Phoenix, Arizona

      Hi, Prisana, and thank you!

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      Brenda Durham 5 years ago

      WillStarr,

      Wow. Masterful use of a little language to convey the depth of such an important subject (one that hits close to the heart of myself and many others). Just..wow.

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      WillStarr 5 years ago from Phoenix, Arizona

      Hi, Brenda Durham, and thank you for that thoughtful comment.

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      LABrashear 5 years ago from My Perfect Place, USA

      Beautiful. So much said in such few words. Talent.

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      WillStarr 5 years ago from Phoenix, Arizona

      Thank you, LABrashear!

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      femmeflashpoint 5 years ago

      Will - still trekking through your work. Each time I open a new one, I'm never disappointed!

      This one is simply and beautifully written, but what lies beneath the words, in the real heart of the subject, is not so simple at all, is it?

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      WillStarr 5 years ago from Phoenix, Arizona

      Hi, femmeflashpoint,

      How many children, in today's careless ways, will never know their father at all? It's heartbreaking.

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      Bridget30 5 years ago from West Virginia

      Very powerful and flows beautifully! Nice work!

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      WillStarr 5 years ago from Phoenix, Arizona

      Thank you, Bridget!

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      Vladimir Uhri 5 years ago from HubPages, FB

      awesome, good written.

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      WillStarr 5 years ago from Phoenix, Arizona

      Thank you, Vladimir. A moment's pleasure can create a life and a lost child.

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      Barbara 5 years ago from Stepping past clutter

      Yes WillStarr, but the reunion sounds amazing. Lucky boy. Ditto on all the kudos above.

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      WillStarr 5 years ago from Phoenix, Arizona

      Thank you, Barb!

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      Alexander Thandi Ubani 5 years ago from Lagos

      Wow! What a great narrative. Glad all ended well with your son. Great piece of poetry

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      WillStarr 5 years ago from Phoenix, Arizona

      Hi, ubanichijioke!

      No, it was strictly fiction. Thank you!

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      Justin W Price 5 years ago from Juneau, Alaska

      wow! Another well done piece!

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      WillStarr 5 years ago from Phoenix, Arizona

      Thank you, PDXKaraokeGuy!

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      Justin W Price 5 years ago from Juneau, Alaska

      You quite welcome. Can't wait to read more!

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      WillStarr 5 years ago from Phoenix, Arizona

      Try my Christmas Trilogy!

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      Audrey Howitt 5 years ago from California

      I had to scroll down a long way to leave this comment. Your poem was not what I expected when I first started reading it. It took me in an unexpected way and that is a good thing I think--and I loved the truth of it--Loved it--did I say I loved it?

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      WillStarr 5 years ago from Phoenix, Arizona

      Hi, AudreyHowitt, and that's high praise indeed, coming from a superb talent like you.

      BTW, unexpected is my trademark.

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      Audrey Howitt 5 years ago from California

      I guess I will get to know that about you then! Thanks so the compliment--mighty gracious of you to do so within your own hub--

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      WillStarr 5 years ago from Phoenix, Arizona

      You're quite welcome, Audrey.

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      Justin W Price 5 years ago from Juneau, Alaska

      willstar, I love your trademark!

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      WillStarr 5 years ago from Phoenix, Arizona

      Thank you, PDXKaraokeGuy!

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      Justin W Price 5 years ago from Juneau, Alaska

      u are quite welcome

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      Audrey Howitt 5 years ago from California

      Came back for a second look--this is still as good as it was the first time!

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      WillStarr 5 years ago from Phoenix, Arizona

      Thanks, Audrey!

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      Joanna Chandler 5 years ago from On planet Earth

      This is Magnificent Will and you tied a whole story into a poem. Wonderful!!!!

      Excellent work, keep it up

      Have a bless week

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      WillStarr 5 years ago from Phoenix, Arizona

      Thanks for commenting, LadyFiddler!

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      Wayne Brown 4 years ago from Texas

      No doubt you have a distinct style here, Will. It so matches the way you write in terms of short stories...the element of surprise and twist is ever present in the work. Excellent....just excellent. WB

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      WillStarr 4 years ago from Phoenix, Arizona

      Thank you, Wayne!

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      Kimberly Shelden 4 years ago from Idaho

      Outstanding writing, love it- well done.

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      WillStarr 4 years ago from Phoenix, Arizona

      Thank you for reading, k2jade31!

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      Victoria Lynn 4 years ago from Arkansas, USA

      I read this months ago but read it again today. It was worth a second read. So lovely and poignant!

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      WillStarr 4 years ago from Phoenix, Arizona

      Thanks for the re-read and the sweet comment!

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      ahorseback 4 years ago

      Hey will , I just read this again , pushed the buttons again and wonder .........of the story between the lines . For so many ! Anyways ,awesome turning of lives !

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      WillStarr 4 years ago from Phoenix, Arizona

      Thank you, ahorseback,

      Whatever we do in life has an inescapable consequence, good or bad.

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      Aunt Jimi 3 years ago from The reddest of the Red states!

      Beautiful poem Will. So well said and so true. Letting a moment of weakness run our lives has it's price.

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      WillStarr 3 years ago from Phoenix, Arizona

      Thank you, Aunt Jimi!

      All our actions have consequences, even if we are unaware.

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      Nan Mynatt 3 years ago

      Will my lst training was one as a Medical Technologist, and we did research on blood types called "Panacells, we could determine the father of a child. People make mistakes, but it can be determined who the father really is! No where to run, no where to hide. Now days it's called DNA. (There is no real mystery). The child is the one that is hurt! Again, you are really gifted.

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      WillStarr 3 years ago from Phoenix, Arizona

      Thank you, Nan. In my story, the woman lied, and he believed her. It actually happens quite often, because the mother does not want either her husband or her lover to know the truth. Eventually, it almost always comes out in the end, and that's the tragedy of having an affair.

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