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Non-traditional Haiku: Dream's Reality (Poems)

Updated on February 17, 2013
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You and I makes two
Your hand, holding tight,
Walk me to the light.

Step by step, be slow...
Show me the beauty in you,
I see Love so true!

Take me to the land,
Where the souls share,
Beauty of the lair.

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You came here for me,
In the land far away,
I want you to stay!

You're by my side,
Seeing my soul's delight,
Hold me close to life.

Forever with me,
In our dreams we will be,
True reality!



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A Non-Traditional Haiku as it doesn't have the proper counts in every line. Second attempt .....


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    • LaThing profile imageAUTHOR

      LaThing 

      6 years ago from From a World Within, USA

      You are too kind, Aubrey! I am glad you did stop by..... And thank you for you encouraging comment.

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      A.E. Williams 

      6 years ago from Hampton, GA

      That was beautiful La, lol. :) I love the romance in that and it's definitely a nice thing to read in the morning. I always love reading your stuff. It's good to visit this today. :)

      -Aubrey

    • LaThing profile imageAUTHOR

      LaThing 

      6 years ago from From a World Within, USA

      LOL, Leslie, thanks for the wonderful comment! I am glad you liked it ;)

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      Movie Master 

      6 years ago from United Kingdom

      Haiku or not haiku - what does it matter?! I loved this, beautiful!!

      Voting up

    • LaThing profile imageAUTHOR

      LaThing 

      6 years ago from From a World Within, USA

      Hi, Sue! Thanks for the encouraging comment.... I will try to write properly next time :)

      Always good to see you, thanks for stopping by and everything .....

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      Sueswan 

      6 years ago

      Hi LaThing

      These may not be traditional haikus but you have painted beautiful pictures of love.

      Voted up and beautiful

      Take care :)

    • LaThing profile imageAUTHOR

      LaThing 

      6 years ago from From a World Within, USA

      Appreciate your dropping in..... Thanks for the wonderful comment. Take care....

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      BeyondMax 

      6 years ago from Sydney, Australia

      Very nice indeed =) Love the flow, it's beautiful, doesn't matter the tradition, the depth is amazing.

    • LaThing profile imageAUTHOR

      LaThing 

      6 years ago from From a World Within, USA

      @ Gypsy Rose, Thanks beautiful friend :)

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      Gypsy Rose Lee 

      6 years ago from Riga, Latvia

      Voted up and awesome. Beautiful poem. Passing this on.

    • LaThing profile imageAUTHOR

      LaThing 

      6 years ago from From a World Within, USA

      Hi Darryl, thanks for stopping by, and glad you enjoyed it. Appreciate your sharing it!

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      Darrylmdavis 

      6 years ago from Brussels, Belgium

      I rather enjoyed this...thanks for sharing :-)

    • LaThing profile imageAUTHOR

      LaThing 

      6 years ago from From a World Within, USA

      lol, don't you just love Shakespeare for his free spirit! :)

      Thanks for the encouragement, MH...... I should try the 3-5-3, :))

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      Martin Kloess 

      6 years ago from San Francisco

      great haiku! don't worry about tradition... Shakespeare didn't. One contributor writes very nice 3-5-3 haiku,

    • LaThing profile imageAUTHOR

      LaThing 

      6 years ago from From a World Within, USA

      Hi Jake, thanks for stopping by, appreciate your comment. Glad you enjoyed it!

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      Jake Frost 

      6 years ago from London, United Kingdom

      I did really enjoy this one

      Well done!

      ~ Jake

    • LaThing profile imageAUTHOR

      LaThing 

      6 years ago from From a World Within, USA

      Thank you for such a sweet thought!

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      cleaner3 

      6 years ago from Pueblo, Colorado

      hi, Lathing, poetess.

      I have written you a poem. go to my site for my dedication to your beautiful soul and see your reflection.

    • LaThing profile imageAUTHOR

      LaThing 

      6 years ago from From a World Within, USA

      Lol, Valleypoet, yeah I can see it too ..... A self porclaimed poetess introduces a new genre.... LOL, LOL GREAT ONE!!

      Thanks for having faith in me! Love to see you here, always :)

    • LaThing profile imageAUTHOR

      LaThing 

      6 years ago from From a World Within, USA

      Hi Laurinzo, thanks for the sweet comment! Appreciate your dropping by and glad you enjoyed it......

    • LaThing profile imageAUTHOR

      LaThing 

      6 years ago from From a World Within, USA

      lol, thanks Mark, for the encouraging comment!

    • LaThing profile imageAUTHOR

      LaThing 

      6 years ago from From a World Within, USA

      Hi Micheal, thanks for stopping by and your encouraging comment.... Always love to see you here....

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      Valleypoet 

      6 years ago

      You may have started a new genre here 'non-traditional Haiku'....I can see it now...' This is a form of poetry that was first introduced by LaThing in 2012..........' What do you think?..loved your poem :-))

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      LJ Scott 

      6 years ago from Phoenix, Az.

      "Show me the beauty in you..." Very nice La Thing

      I love haiku poetry, and even though your lines weren't the "count",

      They counted! cause they are beautiful!!

      Wow , I love it!

      Laurinzo

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      Mark G Weller 

      6 years ago from Lake Charles, LA.

      These are beautiful even if they are not "Formal Haiku."

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      cleaner3 

      6 years ago from Pueblo, Colorado

      I echo rcrumple's statement . very visual and full of meaning. I like the way you personalize it with,

      "Take me to the land

      where the souls share

      beauty of the lair,

      you came here for me

      in the land far away

      i want you to stay"

      sweet words LaThing, love it.

    • LaThing profile imageAUTHOR

      LaThing 

      6 years ago from From a World Within, USA

      Awww, thanks buddy, you made my day :))

      Love you comment, and thanks for stopping by!

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      Rich 

      6 years ago from Kentucky

      Haiku...ahchoo, who cares? It's very visual and meaningful. Obviously, I'm not a purist, just a person that appreciates a good poem when I see it. Great Job!

    • LaThing profile imageAUTHOR

      LaThing 

      6 years ago from From a World Within, USA

      Maybe, I shouldn't even call it a Haiku.... But don't you just love that word :) thanks for your lovely comment, and for stopping by, JDC....

      50 hubs?! I am slow...... I don't think I will ever reach 300+ like some people :))

      Have a great day....

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      Joseph De Cross 

      6 years ago from New York

      Not that I want our LaThing smile, but my fingers were counting non traditional syllabes and I forgot to read the Haiku. Not too bad from a woman who is full of love. Please don't blush now! Aside from jokes I liked your inspiration. My dream's reality just woke me up.

      P.S. Congrats on your 50th hub. Cheers! Going to the mall every other day is overrated..!

    • LaThing profile imageAUTHOR

      LaThing 

      6 years ago from From a World Within, USA

      Hi Frank! Glad you like it..... I guess I am ruining the rules of Haiku, naughty me!! :))

      Thanks for stopping by!

    • LaThing profile imageAUTHOR

      LaThing 

      6 years ago from From a World Within, USA

      lol, Thanks Phdast.... Yes, it's a struggle for me :))

      Appreciate your stopping by, and commenting!

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      Frank Atanacio 

      6 years ago from Shelton

      I dunno if it's in the effort but I loved it!!!

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      Theresa Ast 

      6 years ago from Atlanta, Georgia

      Nice effort. :)

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