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Old Pain (Poem)

Updated on November 23, 2013



We sing through the pain

As we walk through the rain.




The pain is so old,

Through bones now grown cold;




The ancients are gone;

But now we are one.




So bring on the rain,

We've not waited in vain.

Photo Credits

  1. Walking in the Rain by Paul Sawyier, c. 1910. Public domain via Wikimedia Commons.
  2. Robert & Mihaela Vicol; All the photos from Dead Animal Bones found in Woods gallery are free for personal or business use. They are in public domain
  3. Cliff Palace, Mesa Verde National Park ; National Park Service Photo

© 2013 Liz Elias

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    Nellieanna Hay 3 years ago from TEXAS

    I love the dry simplicity of this! It says so much with crisp, clean, true words. I'm especially fond of the last couplet! Yes! "Bring on the rain! We've NOT waited in vain!" Outstanding. And the illustrations fit so well.

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    Liz Elias 3 years ago from Oakley, CA

    Hello, Nellieanna,

    Thanks for being the first to comment! I'm delighted you so enjoyed this poem. It sat around for quite some time before I thought I had it complete; who knows? It may yet be unfinished.

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    drbj and sherry 3 years ago from south Florida

    Great symbolism for poetry, Jodah. For those with rheumatism, not so much. Enjoyed it though nevertheless.

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    Liz Elias 3 years ago from Oakley, CA

    Thanks, drbj, (but I'm not Jodah.) ;)

    Glad you liked it though, and thanks for stopping by.

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    drbj and sherry 3 years ago from south Florida

    Forgive me, Patricia, for my senior plus moment. Of course you're not and no one I know is as special as you. No one! Trust me.

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    Liz Elias 3 years ago from Oakley, CA

    LOL--actually, I'm Lizzy! ;-) And very dizzy at the moment. Hahaha..

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    Nellieanna Hay 3 years ago from TEXAS

    Aren't the best, most ALIVE things all somehow 'unfinished'. Finished implies done, through, no longer active and full of life! ;-) I've had to learn to let go of work not truly finished or be stuck with it indefinitely!

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    Nellieanna Hay 3 years ago from TEXAS

    Eek - my comment didn't post - then posted twice. hehe

    (The second one was better, but the first one was ready to go down in history and wouldn't be changed.)

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    Liz Elias 3 years ago from Oakley, CA

    Hi again, Nellieanna..

    You know, you're probably right. I find myself always tinkering with stuff..and sometimes the hardest lesson is to 'let well enough alone.'

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    Mary Craig 3 years ago from New York

    Beautifully done Ms Lizzy. Unfortunately many of us can relate to the pain we experience on and off as we get older and you've said it so well!

    Voted up, awesome, and interesting.

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    Liz Elias 3 years ago from Oakley, CA

    Hello, Mary,

    Thank you so very much. I'm pleased that you enjoyed the poem. Thanks so much for adding your comment.. I know just what you mean--it was the sort of thing that inspired the verse. This is a rare one--99% of my poetry is in blank verse--rhyme is difficult for me, it usually comes out sounding forced and awkward. The rhymes are usually the ones that just 'hit me,' and I have to scramble for pen & paper before they escape! ;-)

    Thanks, also for the votes!

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    Jamie Lee Hamann 3 years ago from Reno NV

    Well written simple poetry. Thank you for sharing. Jamie

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    Liz Elias 3 years ago from Oakley, CA

    Hello, Jamie,

    Thank you very much; I'm glad you liked this poem.

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    Suzanne Day 3 years ago from Melbourne, Victoria, Australia

    A really nice poem. It was very refreshing to read as it was spaced out correctly and made a lot of sense. Voted awesome!

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    Liz Elias 3 years ago from Oakley, CA

    Hello Suzanne--

    I'm glad you enjoyed this poem and its formatting. I had it quite a while, and couldn't find the right pix to go with. Finally accomplished that task, and it seems to be connecting with folks. Thanks so very much for your kind words and the vote!

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    Suzanne Day 3 years ago from Melbourne, Victoria, Australia

    PS - your vote isn't showing on the Bizarre Shoes....is it a Hubpages bug?

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    Nell Rose 3 years ago from England

    Love the poem Lizzy, my brother smiled when he saw this as he is always saying that his bones ache, I moan at him because he is 56 and doesn't do any exercise! lol!

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    Liz Elias 3 years ago from Oakley, CA

    @ Suzanne---Not sure--I went back and re-did it...if it still doesn't show, then I guess HP is at fault.. ;-)

    @ Nell Rose--Thanks so very much, Nell; I'm glad you liked it, and I'm glad even your brother liked it, despite any aches and pains! ;-)

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    ahorseback 3 years ago

    Funny isn't it , sometimes the simplest says soo much !.....:-}

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    Liz Elias 3 years ago from Oakley, CA

    Hello, ahorseback;

    Thank you very much for stopping by. I'm glad you enjoyed this brief verse. Your comment is appreciated.

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    Greenson 3 years ago

    superb.....

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    Liz Elias 3 years ago from Oakley, CA

    Hello Greenson,

    Thank you very much; I'm most pleased you enjoyed the poem!

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    FlourishAnyway 3 years ago from USA

    For me, this prompts thoughts about the circle of life, how we are just passing through. Lovely images as well.

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    Liz Elias 3 years ago from Oakley, CA

    Hi, FlourishAnyway!

    Thanks so very much for your compliment. Funny you should mention the cycle of life, as one of my other poems is about exactly that. It's called "Circles in Circles--the Cycle of Life," and it's about the birth of my first grandchild.

    I'm most pleased that you enjoyed this poem and the pictures--it was a bit of a challenge to find matching public domain ones. ;-)

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    Shyron E Shenko 3 years ago from Texas

    Elegant Ms.Lizzy, beautiful pictures also.

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    Liz Elias 3 years ago from Oakley, CA

    Hello, Shyron E Shenko,

    Thank you so very much. I'm most delighted that you found this poem to be elegant, and enjoyed my choice of images.

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    Linda Crampton 3 years ago from British Columbia, Canada

    This is a very effective poem, DzyMsLizzy. I love the defiant attitude in the last section!

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    Liz Elias 3 years ago from Oakley, CA

    Hi there, AliciaC,

    I'm so pleased that you enjoyed this poem. Yes, I suppose that last stanza does have a defiant tone about it. LOL Thanks very much for stopping by!

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    Janis 3 years ago from California

    Simple and meaningful. I enjoyed it.

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    Liz Elias 3 years ago from Oakley, CA

    Thank you, WriterJanis, thank you very much. I'm glad you enjoyed this bit of a 'complaint.' LOL

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    Mackenzie Sage Wright 3 years ago

    Beautiful DzyMsLizzy, and I love the choice of pics that accompany the words. Short and sweet and so poignant.

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    Liz Elias 3 years ago from Oakley, CA

    Hi there, WiccanSage,

    I'm delighted that you enjoyed this poem. Thanks so much for your kind praise!

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    Glenn Stok 2 years ago from Long Island, NY

    I like how you rhyme and how you matched your poem to the pictures. Nicely done.

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    Liz Elias 2 years ago from Oakley, CA

    Hi, Glenn--

    Thank you so very much. I'm most pleased that you enjoyed this rare sample of rhymed verse from my pen; it must have been my dear departed mother speaking through me; she was an expert at rhyme; I am not! Most of my stuff is blank verse. :-)

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