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On the Span's Brooklyn Side

Updated on March 20, 2015

The dark clouds filled the skies,

whatever he preached about life were all lies,

these thoughts were rushing in like the tide,

as his reality, died,

from the right lane of the bridge,

he could make out a cluster of emergency vehicles

on the span’s Brooklyn side,

his sanity just wanted to go for the ride,

he wanted to take his own life,

and he had nothing to hide,

it was his suicide

so he would jump without pride,

all this because his cover was blown,

the scene closed to the public,

and a yellow police ribbon marked the zone,

the bridge, colossal in its architecture,

and straddling the river with its massive concrete,

its where the souls would meet,

after lives fell to defeat,

and angels would cry,

because they knew it was just a dreary place to die

© 2015 Frank Atanacio

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      Frank Atanacio 2 years ago from Shelton

      @ AC... ariel was that a shot? LOL thanks for jumping off the bridge..LOL.. and smilealot means a great deal coming from Mr. Poet :)

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      Frank Atanacio 2 years ago from Shelton

      Im so sorry Flourish..bless you

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      FlourishAnyway 2 years ago from USA

      Awesome. It made me think of someone I know, sadly.

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      Frank Atanacio 2 years ago from Shelton

      winged you hit it right on the nail's head.. I write poetry to see if it'll make a good short story.. crime poems for crime flash fiction.. good eye my friend and thank you for reading today

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      William Thomas 2 years ago from That Great Primordial Smash UP of This and That Which Gave Rise To All Beings and All Things!

      You know, Frank, I don't usually read poetry. I never thought I had much of a head for it. But your dark verse interests me because its not about the usual sentimental stuff; and your language is direct.

      Tell me, Frank, I'm wondering if you ever get ideas for stories from your poems. It seems like you could.

      Anyway, its like you've decided that the dark side either deserves or needs its own (tribute?) in verse.

      I've got it: Your verse is like the world of Maleficent, dark but not without its own beauty in its shadow.

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      Smilealot 2 years ago

      The theme and the pictures worked perfectly together, a sense of despair permeates through the words. Great work Frank:-))

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      Evelia Veronica Rivera 2 years ago from Bridgeport, CT

      Thumbs up+interesting +beautiful sir! Where do you find the time!

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      Frank Atanacio 2 years ago from Shelton

      thank you pstraubie for commenting and visiting, and thank you too Sara bless you both :)

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      Sara Sarwar Riaz 2 years ago from Michigan, USA

      Poignant, and yet beautifully penned.

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      Patricia Scott 2 years ago from sunny Florida

      Sad and dreary and alone although many are around...how heart breaking that a magnificent structure can be a lure to those who fail to find a reason to go on.

      thoughtfully constructed, Frank..

      Know that Angels are on the way to you this evening ps

      Voted up+++ and shared

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      Frank Atanacio 2 years ago from Shelton

      thank you so much MsDora for reading and commenting :)

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      Dora Isaac Weithers 2 years ago from The Caribbean

      What a pity that this impressive structure becomes a meeting place for disappointed, departed souls. Your poem calls attention to the mental state of the people who participate. Good job every time!

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      Frank Atanacio 2 years ago from Shelton

      thanks Jodah, good to see you my friend :)

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      John Hansen 2 years ago from Queensland Australia

      Your portrayed his feeling of despair excellently Frank..if you are choosing a place to die it may as well be a dreary one like the Brooklyn Bridge. Wonderful poetry and story combined.

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      Frank Atanacio 2 years ago from Shelton

      flourish and clive thanks so much for visiting my bridge bless you guys :)

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      Frank Atanacio 2 years ago from Shelton

      thank you so much til for reading my bridge and thank you too Jackie bless you both

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      Frank Atanacio 2 years ago from Shelton

      really Faith... they seem not to know the content..LOL thank you for not jumping off this bridge LOL

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      Frank Atanacio 2 years ago from Shelton

      annart, billybuc, and zighod thanks for checking out my bridge :)

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      Frank Atanacio 2 years ago from Shelton

      always exploring, and eric thank you for visiting the bridge Frank

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      Clive Williams 2 years ago from Nibiru

      sad jumper, he couldn't live with his cover blown. Had to go one way or the other.

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      FlourishAnyway 2 years ago from USA

      Awesome poem, Frank. I could feel the poor guy's desperation. There is a large bridge near my neighborhood and there have been "jumpers" before ... not a nice way to die.

      The creepiest thing is that the HP gods have suggested a related hub as fun things to do in Brooklyn. Kinda weird, huh? Almost like they have a wicked sense of humor about your hub here.

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      Jackie Lynnley 2 years ago from The Beautiful South

      Great poem Frank; and looks like the perfect place to die to me! But I am no angel.

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      Mary Craig 2 years ago from New York

      How deep into the heart you've gone with this one. Desolation and despair lead to some pretty drastic actions.

      The Brooklyn Bridge of all places, certainly this death would make the angels cry!

      Voted up, awesome, beautiful, and interesting.

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      Faith Reaper 2 years ago from southern USA

      Gripping an intense poem here, dear Frank. Your writing sure has excelled in its brilliance here of late, but you have always been great. However, now you are brilliant. That photo is perfect for this dramatic, yet dismal piece.

      Talking about reality, and coincidence, I was thinking of a title of a piece ..."When Reality Dims" ... Great minds think alike ...

      Up ++++ tweeting, pinning, G+ and sharing

      Bless you, oh fab one : )

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      Bill Holland 2 years ago from Olympia, WA

      A dreary place to die for sure, Frank. I think I'll choose the mountains. :) Nice work my friend.

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      mohammed cherrik 2 years ago from algeria

      wow good i ove it

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      Ann Carr 2 years ago from SW England

      Full of despair and gloom; the weather echoed the emotion. You're a great wordsmith, Frank!

      Ann

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      Eric Dierker 2 years ago from Spring Valley, CA. U.S.A.

      I can feel the cold bite of both the weather and the moment. Well done.

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      Ruby Jean Fuller 2 years ago from Southern Illinois

      Sad story told in rhyme. I loved it!

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      Frank Atanacio 2 years ago from Shelton

      no thank you for reading :)

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      Lee Cloak 2 years ago

      Potent stuff, very strong writing, fantastic, brilliant, really enjoyable, thanks you!