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Once Purgatory

Updated on January 19, 2016

Once Purgatory



This was my story,

with the absence of glory,

once purgatory,

as the stillness stormed,

the lines that formed

the letter M on my palm

was fading,

his voice was painfully calm,

and shadows were dancing,

as he begged me to stay,

he was clutching my wrist,

as I tried to break away,

and the smoke would mist,

almost like rain,

his eyes seemed to flame,

as he spoke my name,

he seemed instantly defeated,

his life, my life, cheated,

he sank back on the bed,

his lips moving feverishly,

as he lowered his head,

I could hear the faint calls,

of the living as they prayed for the dead,

then his eyes began rising,

only to scan the walls,

I felt pity for him of course,

as I gathered my own force,

but he wanted no pity from me,

and as far as I can see,

he seemed excited by his own

diminutive beauty,

his objective was my sin,

then it began to sink in,

it was as I’d always feared,

and I just needed to cope,

I felt lonely,

and my situation was totally without hope,

as the darkness of hell tames,

as I sat back listlessly

watching those licking flames,

no demons here had discourse

with God or with the devil,

I was afraid of my simplicity,

as I felt myself going insane,

and there was no one to comfort me,

but my miserable pain.

© 2011 Frank Atanacio

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      Christopher Dapo and S. 5 years ago from Havelock, NC

      Well mastered! I loved your rhyming, voted up and awesome.

      - Christopher

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      George J Hardy 5 years ago from Southern New Jersey

      First time I have read a decent description of the place - nicely done and revealing too !

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      poetvix 5 years ago from Gone from Texas but still in the south. Surrounded by God's country.

      And here I was thinking hell was all I had to worry about! Up and awesome.

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      epigramman 5 years ago

      ...well some days can be 'hell' but since the first time I had the privilege of reading your words it's been nothing but 'heaven' .... and your mastery of words and language is a beautiful and awesome exercise to witness and read.

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      Frank Atanacio 5 years ago from Shelton

      thanks so much guys for reading

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      P. Thorpe Christiansen 4 years ago from Pacific Northwest, USA

      Moving and Excellent Frank.

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      Frank Atanacio 4 years ago from Shelton

      thanks duffs

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      j.d. williams 4 years ago from Dallas, TX

      i see that you have many writing talents...

      so i'll say it again...i'm going to learn alot from you...keep it coming!

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      Frank Atanacio 4 years ago from Shelton

      thanks Justwrite bless you :)

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      Lissette 4 years ago from Central Florida

      I often wondered if this was what inspired prisons...

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      Frank Atanacio 4 years ago from Shelton

      hmmm.. wondering too.. hey sweetie Happy new year!!!!!

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      Lissette 4 years ago from Central Florida

      Happy New Year Frank! You were not here when the ball dropped...

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      Frank Atanacio 3 years ago from Shelton

      the ball dropped?

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      Joanna Chandler 3 years ago from On planet Earth

      Very nice and profound Frank. Hope you're good

      ~~~Have a bless weekend ~~~

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      Frank Atanacio 3 years ago from Shelton

      thanks Lady :)

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      Phyllis Doyle Burns 3 years ago from High desert of Nevada.

      Wow ! I had not seen this one yet, Frank. Really deep and profound. Well done. I enjoyed reading it and read it again. It has a good flow to it.

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      Frank Atanacio 3 years ago from Shelton

      phyllis thank you so much bless you

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      Rebecca 3 years ago from USA

      This seems sad to me. It's good, but dark and well...sad.

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      The Examiner-1 3 years ago

      This was gripping Frank. I saw on HubPages what Phyllis said and now I can see why. Up and more.

      Kevin

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      Frank Atanacio 20 months ago from Shelton

      thank you Bishop :) that was very kind of you Examiner :)

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      Phyllis Doyle Burns 20 months ago from High desert of Nevada.

      When I saw this poem on the feed I just had to come in and read it once more. Very well-written, Frank.

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      Patricia Scott 20 months ago from sunny Florida

      O my....going insane would be a whole kind of hell in and of itself...I am told.

      Well painted with carefully chosen ideas and imagery....

      Angels are on the way to you this morning...ps

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      Frank Atanacio 20 months ago from Shelton

      thank you Phyllis for rereading once purgatory :) and thank you pstraubie for checking out purgatory bless you both

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      Nithya Venkat 20 months ago from Dubai

      Your poem was gripping from the beginning to the end. I could visualize each word in my mind, great write.

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      Frank Atanacio 20 months ago from Shelton

      thank you vellur

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      Audrey Howitt 19 months ago from California

      Like the ending here a bunch Frank--really well done!

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      Frank Atanacio 19 months ago from Shelton

      thanks Audrey :)

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      Peggy Woods 13 months ago from Houston, Texas

      You give a whole new meaning to purgatory. Sounds very hellish to me with your vivid descriptions. You certainly can paint a picture with words!

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      Frank Atanacio 13 months ago from Shelton

      thank you Peggy For leaving footprints on my pages.. bless you :)

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