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Updated on October 22, 2015

a quiet touch poem...


The red lace slipping

over her hips,

tongue wetting her delicate lips,

the skirt dropping to her feet.

© 2012 Frank Atanacio

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      Ruchira 5 years ago from United States

      Yes, Frank. You scored it!

      You have delivered a sensuous haiku :)

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      Susan Zutautas 5 years ago from Ontario, Canada

      Although this is quite good Frank, the traditional form of Haiku is 3 lines. The first line has 5 syllables, second line has 7 syllables and the 3rd line has 5 syllables.

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      Frank Atanacio 5 years ago from Shelton

      thank you Ruchira.. and Susan thanks I hope I get an A for effort :)

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      Eanatas 5 years ago from Ohio

      This is a Haiku. It is your Haiku. It is a very well written Haiku. You show a skill for painting a picture for the reader. The mood, and the momment were captured. This is what the Haiku represents. The 5,7,5 is only one of many, true it has taken the forefront, but you should define your own writing style, if you want to be respected.

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      Cynthia B Turner 5 years ago from Georgia

      Definitely an A for the visual. Valentine delivery all over it. Get it to 17 syllables and you're golden.

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      Sueswan 5 years ago

      Hi Frank

      A proper Haiku or not, this little number is really hot. ;-)

      Voted up.

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      Alastar Packer 5 years ago from North Carolina

      Well Frankie boy, uncross those fingers cause you did it magnificently; especially for the groom! Really good Frank. You got a future in the haiku biz.

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      asmaiftikhar 5 years ago from Pakistan

      A well knitted image.

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      Sky9106 5 years ago from A beautiful place on earth.

      Brethren this world is equally yours . As you explore the boundaries of your own human imagination. That's your playing field also.

      My fingers are crossed.

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      time2rite 5 years ago from Navarre, Fl, USA

      Still not a big fan of the Haiku but, Frank, you have enticed me with your well-penned imagery...wow, HOT!

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      Frank Atanacio 5 years ago from Shelton

      Thanks Eanatas.. I see so many of them written and I just had to jump on the band-wagon.. :) Frank

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      Frank Atanacio 5 years ago from Shelton

      Cyndi10 I'll take that A thanks for reading.. Sueswan not or hot? LOL I'll take that too.. Alastar going to buy an open for business sign for my Haikus LOL thanks for reading folks :)

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      Frank Atanacio 5 years ago from Shelton

      Asma thank you so much for the comment.. Sky you know how we do it in Da Block..LOL Time2rite that was so generous of you bless you :) thanks again one and all :)

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      John Sarkis 5 years ago from Los Angeles, CA

      Great..., ---ah, the wonders of languages (Japanese in this case) that use characters instead of alphabets...lol

      Enjoyed it and gave it thumbs up

      John

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      Frank Atanacio 5 years ago from Shelton

      thanks John for the vote of confidence :)

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      P. Thorpe Christiansen 5 years ago from Pacific Northwest, USA

      Wonderful. A story told with just a few lines. Excellent Frank.

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      Frank Atanacio 5 years ago from Shelton

      thanks so much Duffsmom

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      poetvix 5 years ago from Gone from Texas but still in the south. Surrounded by God's country.

      Oh my goodness! HP is heating up for Valentine's Day. Frank, I love your poems of crime drama. After reading this, I know for a fact you could do erotica as well as any! I have to leave now. I hear a cold shower calling my name... geez it's hot!

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      Joyce Haragsim 5 years ago from Southern Nevada

      Your poem sounds well. Voted up and awesome

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      Frank Atanacio 5 years ago from Shelton

      Poetvix.. LOL let me run that cold shower for ya..LOL thanks for reading what I thought was a Haiku.. but im learning thanks to folks like Hyphen and Just ask Susan and the other great Haiku..ers..:) and Writer20 thank you for leaving your footprints yet again bless you ...:)

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      Theresa Ast 5 years ago from Atlanta, Georgia

      Freezing,cold showers

      I do not care for them, what

      ever shall I do?

      My, my, my Frank. That was quite a change of style for you. :)

      Forgive my pathetic attempt at a Haiku response. Theresa

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      Frank Atanacio 5 years ago from Shelton

      I know.. Phdast.. right? LOL thanks for stopping by Frank

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      Linda Bilyeu 5 years ago from Orlando, FL

      Hot attempt at Haiku! Keep 'em comin! 5-7-5 :)

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      Frank Atanacio 5 years ago from Shelton

      oh now I get it.. I thought Susan was secretly giving me her phone number when she explained the 575.. I get it now.. Sunshine eyes open.. and those dirty thoughts of Susan gone..:) OOOPPPPs..:) cleared up thanks so much Sunshine

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      Eiddwen 5 years ago from Wales

      Oh yes brilliant Frank;a great haiku and here's to so mny more to share on here.

      Take care my friend and enjoy your day.

      Eddy.

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      Frank Atanacio 5 years ago from Shelton

      thanks Eddy..bless you :)

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      Sky9106 5 years ago from A beautiful place on earth.

      I know you are quite capable of handling you self in all seasons , Remember Moses!

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      Frank Atanacio 5 years ago from Shelton

      thanks Sky :) Frank

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      Richard Ricky Hale 5 years ago from West Virginia

      Nicely done. Up, awesome, and interesting. Whats not to love? Such a great ending:)

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      Joyce Haragsim 5 years ago from Southern Nevada

      Great first Haiku, looking forward to more. Voted up.

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      Frank Atanacio 5 years ago from Shelton

      Thanks the Lyric writer for reading and thank you writer20 for reading my first and my last Haiku you r the best :)

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      Deborah Brooks Langford 5 years ago from Brownsville,TX

      ohhh.. Mr. frank.. this is so hot.. this is first? wonderful sir... you are so awesome..

      i am a big fan.

      i voted up

      debbie

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      Frank Atanacio 5 years ago from Shelton

      You are simply way too generous with your comments Our Ms Brooks :) Frank

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      Susan Britton 5 years ago from Ontario, Canada

      Wonderful. I like reading haiku and your's paints a very sensual picture. Well done.

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      Frank Atanacio 5 years ago from Shelton

      thank you for sharing your comment with me Suzzycue :) Frank

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      Vinaya Ghimire 5 years ago from Nepal

      I one word,sensual.

      Hubpages has gone gaga with haiku. Many hubbers are doing haiku for the first time. I hope to read more from you in the coming days.

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      Frank Atanacio 5 years ago from Shelton

      thanks VG I gotta leave the haikus for the professionals like Just Ask Susan Sueswan, and Super Hyphen! LOL thanks for reading though

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      Surabhi Kaura 14 months ago

      Ah! Lovely!

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      Frank Atanacio 14 months ago from Shelton

      4 years old and you still found it LOL thanks for checking this out

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      Surabhi Kaura 14 months ago

      Well, yea... it's always a pleasure to read old writes. Will catch up with your other hubs soon after my licensing exam, Frank. You write very well. It's cool.

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      Frank Atanacio 14 months ago from Shelton

      thanks Surabhi.. Ill stop by to return the favor.. peace and good luck on your exams

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