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Original Poem: "A Dream of Spring and You" with Commentary

Updated on April 4, 2018
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Writing poetry became my major composing activity circa 1962, and taking a creative writing class in 1963-64 deepened my growing interest.

Ripples in Water

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Introduction and Text of Poem, "A Dream of Spring and You"

The Western romantic notion of hearts and flowers, or brooding the loss of love, of the ecstasy of sexual liaison, loses it power in the face of reality: the soul belongs to God, the Divine, the Ultimate Reality, and no one else.

After the heart has suffered over loss of human love, nothing can mend it except the awareness that this heart was not crafted for human love; it was crafted for only two purposes: to pump blood to keep the physical encasement going, and to finally give that love this heart so easily manufactures along with the blood to the Crafter of that heart, the Divine Source, the Spirit, or God.

And although two souls might find each other and prosper in a loving, life-time relationship, if they do not make that Crafter of Hearts central in their lives, they cannot truly love each other.

A Dream of Spring and You

At the edge of the water
We sit together
Talking about heaven & earth
Poems & love.

You ask if I still think of you
While you are away.
I throw a stone into the water.
My answer is the ripples.

Commentary

When thought leads directly to feeling, Zen meditation begins. The poem is from an unpublished manuscript and will likely appear in a forthcoming collection, tentatively titled,"As Tulips Dance and Sway.”

First Movement: 75% Water

At the edge of the water
We sit together

A pair of perhaps erstwhile lovers sits at the water’s edge. The speaker does not reveal what type of body of water it is: it could be a fountain, a lake, a small pond, or a gently meandering river.

The speaker allows the element"water" to speak without limiting it to any specific type of earthly body. The human body is made of about 75% water; thus the human attraction to that element is strong, regardless of the form in which the water might appear.

Second Movement: Philosophically Speaking

Talking about heaven & earth
Poems & love.

It is now revealed that the pair is talking philosophically about pairs: "heaven & earth” and"poems & love.” Without revealing anything either might have said about those pairs, either as pairs or individually, the speaker implies that the two differ significantly—but that implication awaits fulfillment.

Third Movement: A Question

You ask if I still think of you
While you are away.

The speaker then announces that her partner has asked her a question, a rather leading question—a question that makes clear that they have been apart. The partner has asked if she "still" thinks of him when he’s gone from her. The"still” insertion implies that for some reason he is sure she has thought of him and probably continues to do so. It is likely he is not prepared for her answer.

Fourth Movement: The Image of Wavelets

I throw a stone into the water.
My answer is the ripples.

Her answer is the image of many water wavelets resulting from her having thrown a stone into the water. What happens to the wavelets? At first they are strong, moving quickly out from the center of where the stone broke the surface of the water. But then as the wavelets continue, they grow slower and fainter, until they stop altogether.

Sure, she thought of him at first, but then the thoughts diminished as the wavelets diminish after a stone in thrown into water. Imagine the tranquility, the peace, the beautiful silence of not thinking about him at all! That’s what the speaker wants everyone to realize.

And now that the human longing and suffering have gone, there is time and a silent space in which to turn the heart and mind to the Divine.

SRF Lake Shrine - Windmill Chapel

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Life Sketch of Linda Sue Grimes

The Windmill Chapel

In the temple of silence
By the lake, we sit
In stillness, meditating
In divine Bliss.

Returning to our daily minds,
We walk out into the sunshine,
And the flowers greet us.

The Literary Life

After graduating from Centerville Senior High School in Centerville, Indiana, in 1964, Linda Sue Grimes completed her baccalaureate degree with a major in German at Miami University, Oxford, Ohio, in 1967. She married Ronald Grimes on March 10, 1973.

As a writer, Grimes focuses on poetry, short fiction, politics, spirituality, and vegan/vegetarian cooking, which results in her original veggie recipes.

Literary Studies

Although music was her first love, Grimes considers herself primarily a literary specialist as she creates her own poetry, studies the poetry and literary arts of classic writers, and writes commentaries about classic poems.

However, Grimes does continue to express her love of music by writing her own original songs, which she records, accompanying herself on guitar or keyboard. She shares her musical compositions at SOUNDCLOUD.

After completing the PhD degree in British, American, and World Literature with a cognate in Rhetoric/Composition at Ball State University in 1987, Grimes taught English composition in the English Department at BSU as a contractual assistant professor from 1987 until 1999.

Publishing History

Grimes has published poems in many literary journals, including Sonoma Mandala, Rattle, and The Bellingham Review. She has published three books of poems: Singing in the Silence, Command Performance, and Turtle Woman & Other Poems, and a book of fables titled Jiggery-Jee's Eden Valley Stories.

Grimes published her first cookbook in the spring of 2013, titled The Rustic Veggie-Table: 100 Vegan Recipes. She is working on a second cookbook and her fourth book of poems.

Currently, at Owlcation, Grimes (Maya Shedd Temple) posts her poetry commentaries. On LetterPile, she shares her creative writing of poems and short fiction, along with prose commentaries on each piece. She posts recipes resulting from her experimental cooking of vegan/vegetarian dishes. on Delishably. She posts her politically focused pieces at Soapboxie, and her commentaries focusing on music at Spinditty. Pieces on the writing process appear at Hobbylark.

Spirituality

Linda Sue Grimes has been a devotee of Paramahansa Yogananda and a member of his organization, Self-Realization Fellowship, since 1978. A Kriyaban since 1979, she has completed the four Kriya Initiations, and she continues to study the teachings and practice the yoga techniques as taught by the great spiritual leader, who is considered to be the "Father of Yoga in the West."

Grimes practices the chants taught by the guru accompanying herself on the harmonium. She serves at her local SRF Meditation Group as one of the chant leaders.

Online Literary Presence

In addition to the contributions of her literary works to Owlcation, LetterPile, and SOUNDCLOUD, Grimes also curates her original creative literary pieces at her literary home, Maya Shedd Temple, on Medium, where she features her creative writing without commentaries.

Grimes also maintains an additional online presence on Facebook and Twitter.

© 2016 Linda Sue Grimes

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