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Perpetual Torment

Updated on February 14, 2014




Tameka Black was tried twice in the Golden Hill Street courtrooms. The first jury of her peers was hung, and the second found her innocent. She was charged for the murder of Jose Santana, her alcoholic boyfriend from Bridgeport’s PT Barnum housing projects. The next step took place in civil court. Santana’s family wanted some type of closure for their loss.

Tameka Black claimed she was beaten every night and that he threatened to kill her if she left or told anyone about what was happening under their roof. She told the first group of jurors an incredible and almost comical tale. She said that Santana drugged her and brought her down to Wentfield Park near the Railroad Avenue side and shot her three times aiming for the chest. The jurors at the first trial bought it. However, during the second trial, the prosecutor said that according to medical reports she suffered superficial wounds, and a gun had nothing to do with it.

Black disappointed no one at the trial. She said he was drunk and he missed completely so he tried to strangle her with a Victoria Secrets bra she got free when she purchased twenty-five dollars worth of underwear. Then she felt a change taking place within her. The jurors from the second trial bought her sadness. They bought the grief and knew she suffered perpetual torment. A woman who lived in fear had the right to defend herself.

During the civil trial, the change was still in her. She was experiencing the perpetual torment all over again. Her swagger had shrunk and weakened. She paced by herself along the back of the court room, casting dark looks at Jose Santana’s family. She appeared to be succumbing to anxiety and regret. She simply looked exhausted.

Her lawyer approached her with the intent of counseling to bolster her sagging spirit. He needed to help her get her swagger back. That swagger was the source of her effectiveness; without it she could lose in civil court.

“Are you okay?” he asked.

“Nope.”

“Do you want to tell me about it?”

She turned toward Santana’s family and just stared.

“Tameka?”

She strained to fight back the perpetual torment that kept eating away at her. The thought of what happened to Jose Santana was so clear and complete it was nearly a visual image. Then she had a pleasant memory filling her head. She had a young girl sitting on her shoulders, shouting and laughing with joy.

Black bent over as if she was picking up a toddler from the floor. She scooped the invisible child and hugged it tight. The lawyer was baffled for a moment, then remembered that she use to talk about her little girl. He wondered why she stopped mentioning her during the first two trials. He never brought it up because he wanted her solely to concentrate on what happened with Jose Santana.

He looked up at the judge and the judge gave him the “ready” signal.

“We’re ready to start again,” he whispered to Tameka Black.

“I killed Jose because he saw me drowning my baby in the bathtub and he tried to stop me!” she shouted.

There was a moment of stillness, a sort of inner breath taken collectively by everyone in that courtroom. It was a gathering of emotional disbelief. The lawyer could feel the air becoming crowded as it merged into one sustained gasp.

“I was high and I couldn’t get her to stop crying,” she continued as she fell to her knees. “I tried; I tried to make her stop crying. I really tried.”

Her words were bounding and crashing downward, gathering momentum like a rolling stone. It hit the hearts of everyone in that courtroom with tremendous force, shaking everyone as if they were experiencing an after shock of an earthquake.

A great cloud of anger rose in the air like smoke. Santana’s family was shocked into immobility. They stood and stared, but had trouble maintaining footing.

“I buried her in the Fairfield woods,” she continued. “I wanted to tell someone, but I couldn’t. What mother kills her own child?”

Her confession seemed to go on forever. She could feel the warmth of her lawyer’s body as he leaned over her. She was a living being, and she annihilated another living being. Her lawyer picked her up and held her close to him wondering what the hell was she thinking. He looked into her eyes which were only partly visible behind the flickering tears. Her eyes seemed sad, full of regret. At first she avoided his stare, but then she paused for a moment and looked right at him. She thought she saw pity there, but it was no pity. It was hatred, disgust, but not for her. It was self-hatred, for allowing him to defend her when he should have known something wasn’t right…





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      Frank Atanacio 4 years ago from Shelton

      thank you savvy for stopping by :)

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      Yves 4 years ago

      You know someone writes well when you can't stop reading. I admire your talent! (Sigh) Such a powerful, intriguing piece. Plain and simple, you have a writer's heart. This is an awesome piece. Voting up.

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      Frank Atanacio 4 years ago from Shelton

      thank you so much Lisa :)

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      Lisa Williams 4 years ago

      Frank, I love reading your stories, they always have me on the edge of my seat! Great job, I voted up.

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      Frank Atanacio 4 years ago from Shelton

      Express10 thank you so much for stopping by :)

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      H C Palting 4 years ago from East Coast

      Really Mr. Atanacio, when are you going off to Hollywood to write? The stories you tell through a variety of means take me away from life while I'm reading them. Awesome job, love the curve ball you threw. For a moment there I was wondering why the murderous mom would be making a scooping motion.

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      Frank Atanacio 4 years ago from Shelton

      thanks you Seeker7 LOL :)

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      Helen Murphy Howell 4 years ago from Fife, Scotland

      Fabulous story Frank and such a rollercoaster as well!! There's always a delicious tension with many of your stories and waiting for the sting is nerve wracking but thorougly enjoyable - this wonderful story was no exception, I think my silly mouth was slung open with shock, just like those in the court room!!!!

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      Frank Atanacio 4 years ago from Shelton

      lol silly pegcole :)

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      Peg Cole 4 years ago from Dallas, Texas

      Liked that unexpected change in the defendant, Frank. You have a way of capturing the audience immediately, then twisting what they assumed was about to happen. Of all things, a Victoria Secret bra as a weapon. No wonder my hubby won't go in that place.

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      Frank Atanacio 4 years ago from Shelton

      Thanks again Vin...:)

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      Vinaya Ghimire 4 years ago from Nepal

      Frank,

      in the beginning I thought this story is about the case of domestic abuse and the retribution. However, I was completely surprised by the turn of events.

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      Frank Atanacio 4 years ago from Shelton

      Thanks so much ValleyPoet for visiting my torment :)

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      Valleypoet 4 years ago

      Lots of twists and turns to keep your readers fixated right to then end here Frank...so much happens in your stories in very few words, I don't know how you keep churning out these great stories, but I'm glad that you do...great job my friend:-))

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      Frank Atanacio 4 years ago from Shelton

      thanks for foot printing my pages this morning Til.. bless you

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      Mary Craig 4 years ago from New York

      There you go again with that two by four to the back of the head. We never see it coming either! You write the absolutely best thrillers with the best endings.

      Hmm, guess men should keep their women out of Victoria's Secrets ;)

      Voted up, awesome, and interesting.

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      Frank Atanacio 4 years ago from Shelton

      thanks Sueswan, Infection and Audrey for popping by bless you :)

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      Audrey Howitt 4 years ago from California

      Ah Frank no one does this better than you! But, the lawyer in me says that everyone deserves good representation--but it does take something out of you to do it

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      Steven 4 years ago from NY, New York City

      Very descriptive and emotional, great job Frank!

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      Sueswan 4 years ago

      Hi Frank

      "It hit the hearts of everyone in that courtroom with tremendous force, shaking everyone as if they were experiencing an after shock of an earthquake."

      I was shocked as everyone in that courtroom. Awesome write!

      Voted up and awesome

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      Frank Atanacio 4 years ago from Shelton

      Understood :) LOL

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      Faith Reaper 4 years ago from southern USA

      Okay, I am throwing in the towel.

      Hugs, Faith Reaper aka now thug/Faith Reaper? : (

      lol

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      Frank Atanacio 4 years ago from Shelton

      thanks again btrbell

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      Randi Benlulu 4 years ago from Mesa, AZ

      Wow, wow and wow! Great story, well written, so much impact! Thank you!

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      Frank Atanacio 4 years ago from Shelton

      lol silly

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      Faith Reaper 4 years ago from southern USA

      LOL BOOYAAAA!

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      Frank Atanacio 4 years ago from Shelton

      if you want me to keep thugs off the street, stay in doors..LOL BOOYAAAAAA!

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      Faith Reaper 4 years ago from southern USA

      Aha! I knew I could get a confession out of you . . . oops, or me, you know how to get a confession out of someone, but there was no crime on my part yet. : )

      Have a lovely day, and keep those thugs off the street!

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      Frank Atanacio 4 years ago from Shelton

      toobnusiness and Genna East thank you for visiting my torment.. and Faith I'll return the stud... just held it hostage...LOL and Lovedoctor always good to get your feedback bless you all :)

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      lovedoctor926 4 years ago

      Gruesome and horrific. What mother kills her own child? I know right, definitely not someone in her right state of mind. Great story, good plot. I like how you captivate your readers emotionally while keeping them engaged. voted up+++

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      Faith Reaper 4 years ago from southern USA

      Came back to share and look for one of my diamond studs that went missing : )

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      Genna East 4 years ago from Massachusetts, USA

      Excellent, Frank. You never disappoint, and keep us on pins and needles and the suspense builds.

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      Jo Alexis-Hagues 4 years ago from Bedfordshire, U.K

      Frank, you take it up a notch with every new story, this was touching, shocking and masterfully executed.

      Exceptional!!

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      Frank Atanacio 4 years ago from Shelton

      thank you Becky and Ruch for stopping by :)

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      Ruchira 4 years ago from United States

      wow...you brought that courtroom to life, frank.

      again very vivid description. well done!

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      Frank Atanacio 4 years ago from Shelton

      you crazy girl... LOL made my afternoon Faith

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      Becky Katz 4 years ago from Hereford, AZ

      Very good story. I always enjoy your stories.

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      Faith Reaper 4 years ago from southern USA

      I can see the headlines now . . . southern woman who obviously talks the talk, but does not walk the walk, for she unsnapped it, then wrapped it . . . her diamond-studded, 2012 Christmas edition "Angel" VS bra - oh no, she is no angel, as she let down all (no pun)! hehehe

      Okay, I'm done here. LOL

      Know you are glad too : )

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      Frank Atanacio 4 years ago from Shelton

      lol silly...:)

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      Faith Reaper 4 years ago from southern USA

      LOL, I will try to refrain from doing so, only because I know you have faith in me that I will not do so : ) LOL

      Hugs, Faith Reaper

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      Frank Atanacio 4 years ago from Shelton

      thank you rose :)

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      rose-the planner 4 years ago from Toronto, Ontario-Canada

      Amazing! I thoroughly enjoyed this. You are quite talented. Thanks for sharing. (Voted Up) -Rose

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      Frank Atanacio 4 years ago from Shelton

      oh thank you my dearest Faith.. now dont go choking anyone with a VS bra now you here? LOL :)

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      Faith Reaper 4 years ago from southern USA

      Gasp!!! You really did make me gasp!!!

      Great write here as always, dearest Frank!

      Wow, never thought of a Victoria Secrets bra as a weapon, how interesting : ) I will keep that in mind . . . just in case!

      Voted up +++ and sharing

      God bless, Faith Reaper

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      Frank Atanacio 4 years ago from Shelton

      thanks Jackie

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      Jackie Lynnley 4 years ago from The Beautiful South

      Very real, you are a great writer.

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      Frank Atanacio 4 years ago from Shelton

      Thanks Marlin55 and MsDora for visiting my torment :)

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      Dora Isaac Weithers 4 years ago from The Caribbean

      What a complexity of emotions in this one. I heard Tameka. I saw the jury's reaction. For a second, I felt the warmth of the lawyer's body. Great job!

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      Marlin 55 4 years ago from USA

      Great job, Frank, of bringing this courtroom scene to life with your writing.