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Perspective...short story thoughts

Updated on February 25, 2009

City mouse--Country mouse???

I read a short story and it reminded me of how special our friends and families are. And how we should always appreciate them and what we do have. I spent the week-end in Seattle for my son-in-laws 40th BD party..and it was while waiting in the ferry line that I read this story and thought about all the friends and family that came to honor his BD.

This wealthy father wanted to show his son just how fortunate they were by taking him to the country, and they stayed on a farm for a couple of days of what was supposed to be a poor family.

And after they returned home the father asked the boy if he had a good time, and had he learned anything from the trip?

The boys answer was as follows :

I saw that we have one dog and they had four, and we have a swimpool that is in the middle of our yard, and they have a creek that has no end.

We also have imported lanterns in our garden and they have bright stars at night time.

Also our patio reaches to the front yard and they have the whole horizon.

We have a small piece of property to live on , and they have fields that never end.

Servants that serve us , but they serve each others.

We go buy our food and they grow all their own.

We have walls around our property to protect us and they have friends to protect them.

Needless to say the father was speechless ! ! And the boy adds "Thanks Dad for showing me how poor we are."

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      Kristen Mazzola 4 years ago from South Florida

      Great writing! I loved the story! I'm glad hubpages suggested it on my hub's page! :) Voted up!

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      Lissette 5 years ago from Central Florida

      Thank you for this. I found it when searching for links to my hub (The Young Widow - Perspective). I was very happy with your writing and chose to link to it.

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      Reynold Jay 6 years ago from Saginaw, Michigan

      I loved this story. No comments in 23 months is heartbreaking for this wonderful story. It could earn you money in the proper magazine. You should market this. See some of my short stories which are similar to this. Ben, Arch. Tiny Tim. Truely wonderful. The first paragraph needs cleaning up as it is difficult to see where this is headed when it opens this way. Drop the colon and go to quotes and use a little slang to bring it to life. "Well,son--did you learn anything today?" Yeah ,Dad. I saw they had... etc. ...See my stuff and you'll get the idea. RJ

      RJ

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      Merle Ann Johnson 8 years ago from NW in the land of the Free

      Jesus_Saves_Us_7..thank you swetie for dropping by...sorry for the late respnse been a bit sick/....G-Ma :o) hugs & Peace

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      Jesus_saves_us_7 8 years ago from Seeking Salvation

      The little boy was sweet and the story was heart warming :) I loved it!!

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      Merle Ann Johnson 8 years ago from NW in the land of the Free

      Well hello..Thank You for your comment and I couldn't agree more..G-ma :o) hugs

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      Ananta65 8 years ago

      It's much more important to be than it is to have. Nice hub, G-Ma *hugs*

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      Merle Ann Johnson 9 years ago from NW in the land of the Free

      Well sweetie there aren't snakes in every country scene.  We have garden snakes when it is 75 or 80 degrees..and the air is so sweet..and the sun rises are so great as are the sunsets...But we can't all live in the country or it would be a city then hee hee...Thanks for your comment.  G-Ma :o) hugs

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      Eileen Hughes 9 years ago from Northam Western Australia

      Really great article. yes we all see things different. But to be honest, it must be far better living in the open spaces and fresh air rather than in the city with its bars on windows of shops etc etc.

      Although I like that (country living) I would not cope well with the snakes.

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      Merle Ann Johnson 9 years ago from NW in the land of the Free

      Terry  Thank You for your comment...and yes our children seem to be our "angels on earth"..to me anyway..We can learn from them everyday... G-Ma :o) hugs

      soyelude...don't we all think we are poor..in one way or the other?  It is surprising how spoiled we can become...but as I get exposed to the rest of the world I know how very lucky I am..for many reasons...you being one....and all the hubbers here are so caring...God Bless  G-Ma :o) hugs/lovingly

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      soyelude 9 years ago from Lagos - Nigeria

      Great story G-ma. Oh yes children are not mired by the materialistic tendencies of adults. They are also so simple minded...quick to forgive and easy to love and be loved. May we learn from them!! Love.

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      Terry Thinktank 9 years ago from India

      lovely story. Only children can accept "not having everything that you think you should" with such ease.

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      Merle Ann Johnson 9 years ago from NW in the land of the Free

      Hi Mr Marmalade..Yes I do agree..children see things so differently then grown ups....Their minds aren't bogged down with selfish, show-off attitudes. They are God's angels here on earth I think. :o) and I hope you and yours are doing well. G-Ma :o) hugs

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      MrMarmalade 9 years ago from Sydney

      I would like to be the young poor boy than the rich boy. The PB will learn to grow up with humility

      Thge RB will tell you what to do, not ask yPerhaps the Poor father should have been put someoner's knee at a earlier age.

      Good story