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Phone Fight: Poetic Writting

Updated on April 28, 2012
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Have you ever had your heart broken?

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Staring at the plastic device,

Palms sweaty.

Wrapping wet fingers

Around neck-like receiver.

Lift

Heavy from pain,

Shaky fingers punch cool numbers,

Tentatively.

In belly,

Anger roars.

Breath.

Head numb,

Whirling into wheel of obsession.

“Bastard,”

Weakly puffed from timid lips.

In chest a dark cloud looms,

Weighty,

Threatening to burst.

Ring, ring, ring.

It was always you.

Hold you, help you, coddle you, screw…

You were the illegitimate child

I sought to raise.

Walked you,

Hand in hand through new life

To watch you pivot,

Change than abandon.

Evil step child to my low self-worth,

I adopted in thought to fulfill

Only to find my demise

In my own self-will.

I burn with the fire

I started.

Ignited by a society that fuels

Fantasies of romance;

Chocolate, candles

Drove in on white car-

Saving me from self-hatred,

Temporarily.

Filling the God-shaped hole,

Seeking wholeness-

Finding emptiness.

Bitterness

Staring at the receiver,

Eyes welling.

Salt,

Dead Sea waters

Spill, blind…

Isn’t disability

When you choose.

I chose you-

Tall, dark and hurtsome.

Visions of duality and deceptions-

Remnants of my father.

Want Ad reads:

Young brown girl

Looks for daddy-

‘Will take substitutions.’

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      Alexander Pease 5 years ago from Maine

      I understood everything in the poem besides the last part. What does she mean by want ad? Is it hers, and the other guy is clicking on it? Or is it someone elses?

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      KrystalD 5 years ago from Los Angeles

      It was the want ad she unknowly placed. I suppose I always think in hind sight what I was actually looking for or even subtly asking for. In this case, she discovers she was looking for her father all along.

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      Alexander Pease 5 years ago from Maine

      I understand, it was a period of reflection. Thank you for clarifying, it is a great poem!

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      KrystalD 5 years ago from Los Angeles

      Thanks for taking the time read and think about my writing. It's an honor to write for any audience.

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      Carolee Samuda 5 years ago from Jamaica

      I absolutely love this. Very powerful and I just love the flow. It's was a whirlwind of emotions.

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      KrystalD 5 years ago from Los Angeles

      Thank you Cardisa. I find that relationships are a "whirlwind of emotions." They make perfect material for poetry :)

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      sabrani44 5 years ago

      Great poem. It was so thoughtful and beautiful. Good work!

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      KrystalD 5 years ago from Los Angeles

      Thank you sabrani44! I love to write poetry and it flows naturally. The trick for me comes in revising, revising, revising!

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      Rachael C. 5 years ago from That little rambunctious spot in the back of your mind :)

      Captivating.

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      Mike Pugh 5 years ago from New York City

      Yes this is a powerful poem indeed, I love poetry that gets at the heart of someones soul, and rages outward onto the page.

      I sense much passion in your words @ KrystalD, this is compelling as well with that Adele video, if you read it simultaneously as her words are sounded out. Nice, voted up for awesome, and many more.

      It almost sounds like it could even be a song that you got here, are you a song writer?

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      KrystalD 5 years ago from Los Angeles

      Thank you CloudExplorer. I love writing poetry and I always feel that music is a perfect accompaniment. I never thought about it as a song but I could see that too. Thanks for the comment and the question.

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      savanahl 5 years ago

      Beautiful write! I love the way you get yanked around emotional. Fantastic imagery!

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      KrystalD 5 years ago from Los Angeles

      Thank you savanahl! That's exactly what I felt writing this!

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      NightFlower 5 years ago

      Awww write it now Krystal...I'm anxious to read more of you work girl -smile but you know I had to get in the poetry first.

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      KrystalD 5 years ago from Los Angeles

      Thanks NightFlower! This was one obviously connected to that same break up! lol! I better thank him (some day) for all this good inspiration :)

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      NightFlower 5 years ago

      I could see that but please don't give'em a cut from your earnings...honorable mention is probably all he deserves lol.

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      Brett Caulton 5 years ago from Thailand

      Voted up and awesome. Nicely written and the short sentences add to that angry energy! lol

      Thanks for SHARING.

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      Deborah Brooks Langford 5 years ago from Brownsville,TX

      Great poem love the video Adele.. You brought out the hurt so well. I could feel it.. I voted up and awesome and beautiful

      Debbie

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      KrystalD 5 years ago from Los Angeles

      Thanks Debbie! You are so encouraging and I thank you for taking the time to comment :)

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