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Poem: WITHOUT YOU!

Updated on April 8, 2013
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When I see you there, I loose my mind.
In your looks I see the loving signs,
Telling me that you are always mine,
Hearts of ours will remain entwined.
On the jagged edge of life, you see,
Undying Love has proven to be,
The true mystery of reality!

Your simple smile just breaks my heart.
Opens my senses, I can't tear apart.
Unseen forces, concealed from the start....


Don't you see, I cannot say,
Those words that come in mind and stay....

Without You, I die everyday!

Dear John
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      LaThing 4 years ago from From a World Within, USA

      Thanks, Aubrey..... I am glad you liked it. Appreciate your stopping by :)

      See you around, take care!

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      A.E. Williams 4 years ago from Hampton, GA

      So beautiful, La! I think this is so sweet and romantic. Good work!

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      LaThing 4 years ago from From a World Within, USA

      LOL, yeah, I saw that! Isn't that something!? Thanks for dropping in again..... Your visits are always welcomed, and it's a breath of fresh air :))

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      Linda Bilyeu 4 years ago from Orlando, FL

      Hello LaLiz! Stopping by for another dose of Channing who also happens to be People Magazine's Sexiest Man of the Year! You got great taste in photos! :)

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      LaThing 4 years ago from From a World Within, USA

      Thanks Richard! Appreciate your comment and stopping by. Love your poems...... :)

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      Richard Craig 4 years ago from West Midlands, England

      Short and sweet. Voted up and Beautiful.

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      LaThing 4 years ago from From a World Within, USA

      Awww.... Thanks, b. that is so sweetest of you! Thanks for the comment, really appreciate your visit :)

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      b. Malin 4 years ago

      You could Write for Hall Mark Cards, "LaThing"...This was Simply Beautiful. I could Truly relate...Especially those last lines "Without You I Die Everyday...Wow!

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      LaThing 4 years ago from From a World Within, USA

      Hi, JW!! Glad you stopped by.... Thanks for the comment and vote, appreciate it :)

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      Tijani Achamlal 4 years ago from Morocco

      That s really so amazing.Short but resonant.I voted up.

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      LaThing 4 years ago from From a World Within, USA

      Hi, Jan! Sorry, missed your comment.... I am always happy to see you :)

      Thanks for the lovely comment, see you around!

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      Faith Reaper 4 years ago from southern USA

      Hi LaThing,

      My very (last) comment, not my initial comment, not your poetry of course, for another. Sorry for confusion.

      Have a great time off. In His Love, Faith Reaper

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      LaThing 4 years ago from From a World Within, USA

      Hey Batman! How is it going :)

      Glad you enjoyed this! And, yes, it's a wonderful feeling isn't it? I know that's how my husband also feels about me..... :) And I am sure you wife also feels the same towards you!

      I appreciate your dropping by, and for all the votes. See you soon .....

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      LaThing 4 years ago from From a World Within, USA

      Hi there, Faith! Good to see you again :)

      Poetry for another friend, hmmm.... The only poetry I wrote for another friend was, 'Is That You?', and the Haiku 'Friendship and Doubts'...... Other then that there are all inspirations from Movies, songs, things, seasons, and yes, my husband, like this one, LOL! So, sorry to disappoint anyone who thinks I am writing for them, LOL...... But, if they feel good about reading it and thinks its for them, then no harm! I don't usually explain why I wrote the poem as I want the readers to take what they want to feel from the poem.

      Anyway, I will be gone again tomorrow for a while. Have a wonderful week...... Take care!

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      LaThing 4 years ago from From a World Within, USA

      Hi, Gypsy Rose! It's good to see you, and thanks for the votes. Hope all is well over the other side of the ocean :)

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      Cogerson 4 years ago from Virginia

      A beautiful acrostic poem. I am happy to report that is how I feel about my wife....and hopefully how she feels about me. Loved reading this and voting up and across the board.

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      Janhorner 4 years ago

      LaThing, you write so from the heart and soul! This poem is simply beautiful. Voted up,

      Jan

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      Faith Reaper 4 years ago from southern USA

      Dear Lizzy,

      No advice dear to you from me, here, as you need not one ounce. Just me thinking outloud as a result of your poetry of another friend, well person.

      Will miss you here, and I hope you will return soon. God bless you always. In His Love, Faith Reaper

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      Gypsy Rose Lee 4 years ago from Riga, Latvia

      Voted up and beautiful. Much enjoyed.

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      LaThing 4 years ago from From a World Within, USA

      Hi there, Minnitonka Twins! Sorry, skipped you..... Appreciate your stopping by. Sadness comes when I am alone, but at the moment we are still here together :) thanks for reading and commenting. Really appreciate it!

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      LaThing 4 years ago from From a World Within, USA

      Hi there, sweet Blossom! Love your pen name :) Thanks for the encouraging comment. Hope all is well downunder...... See you around!

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      LaThing 4 years ago from From a World Within, USA

      Hey there, MH! Yep, I will remember the date! You are Arlene, right? :)

      Thanks for stopping by......

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      LaThing 4 years ago from From a World Within, USA

      Hi Ruby, good to see you, and thanks for the comment :)

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      LaThing 4 years ago from From a World Within, USA

      Dear Faith, thank you for the wonderful words, and I didn't mean to make this one a sad poem, it just came out to be that way :) Sometime I can't seem to control how it ends..... Sorry! Didn't mean to make you sad!

      I have to read Debbie's Farewell...... I am not that good in French, but can make out what you said.... Thanks for the advice.

      Do appreciate your friendship, my dear, dear Faith! Take care.....

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      LaThing 4 years ago from From a World Within, USA

      LOL @Drbj..... Yes, I am using his pictures, but the poem is totally for my life partner (my husband)..... But, of course, I will read your interview with Channing! Thanks for stopping by and for the lovely comment!

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      LaThing 4 years ago from From a World Within, USA

      Hi LaLinda! How is my dear friend!? :)

      Thanks for the lovely comment, and yes, had to steal him for this poem, BUT it's not for him! LOL...

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      LaThing 4 years ago from From a World Within, USA

      LOL, BraveW, I guess we are both lucky as long as we are happy with what we have! And I an sure you also have that special love larking around somewhere, right? ;)

      Thanks for the wonderful comment, see you around!

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      LaThing 4 years ago from From a World Within, USA

      LOL, Jen, glad you liked it! Poems are strange. I write them, then when I go back are read it after few days, it doesn't seem like I wrote them at all. I am always questioning myself, lol..... Good to see you again.

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      LaThing 4 years ago from From a World Within, USA

      Hi Audrey, good to see you again! Acrostic are fun though, don't you think? This is my first time, and I had fun with it :) thanks for stopping by......

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      LaThing 4 years ago from From a World Within, USA

      Hey Kashmir, glad to see you here, and I am glad you could feel the poem :) Thanks!

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      Bronwen Scott-Branagan 4 years ago from Victoria, Australia

      It takes a lot of concentration to write an acrostic poem - I know from experience, and you have done it so well. Voted up.

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      LaThing 4 years ago from From a World Within, USA

      Thank you, Frank! Glad to see you here, and I am happy you enjoyed it. :)

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      LaThing 4 years ago from From a World Within, USA

      Sorry, Richy, missed you! How could I have missed that wonderful Acrostic poem of yours :)) Thank you! A poet on the go, LOL. always a pleasure to see you here.....

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      LaThing 4 years ago from From a World Within, USA

      Hi Joyce, great to see you here, and thanks for the comment :)

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      Martin Kloess 4 years ago from San Francisco

      Aug. 11, 2003

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      Ruby Jean Fuller 4 years ago from Southern Illinois

      Beautiful acrostic poetry..Loved it..

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      Faith Reaper 4 years ago from southern USA

      So very beautiful . . . Oh, me, here comes another night of tears for me. . . I just read Debbie's farewell and now you have written this acrostic (from French acrostiche) This should be under DRAMATIC poetry . . . He deserves to hear YOUR words, if these are from your heart to his . . .

      Dear one,

      Really, why can you

      Answer not?

      Miserably

      Alone, you are not . . .?

      Tears of mine

      Increase without

      Ceasing.

      Voted up, awesome, beautiful, interesting and useful

      In His Love, Faith Reaper

      Votre inaction en dit long . . . retore ecrit inedit . . . de retablir votre confidance dans la foi . . . vous etes responsable des resultats . . .vous devez etre mature dan les affaires de coeur . . . la fin?

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      Linda Rogers 4 years ago from Minnesota

      great poetry on feeling sad and alone without your sweetie :-(

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      drbj and sherry 4 years ago from south Florida

      Lovely poem, LaThing, and I know you are addressing it to that cutie, Chan Tatum. I like him, too, and devoted one of my interviews to him to introduce him to others - "Interview with Channing Tatum." Take a look and let me know if you agree. :)

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      Linda Bilyeu 4 years ago from Orlando, FL

      Awwww LaLiz, you have expressed beautiful words and a very nice photo of Channing Tatum!

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      Shauna L Bowling 4 years ago from Central Florida

      You are a lucky woman, or maybe I am - I don't feel incomplete without a man in my life. I feel complete being me with no incumbrances.

      I love those who have that wonderful feeling of love, tho! God bless all of you!

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      Jennifer Stone 4 years ago from the Riverbank, England

      LaThing, this is clever and beautiful! Even though I just read it twice, I'm going back for another read! Voted up, awesome and beautiful, lovely work my friend! All the best, Jen

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      Audrey Howitt 4 years ago from California

      So well done! Acrostics are difficult !!

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      Thomas Silvia 4 years ago from Massachusetts

      Very beautifully written with heartfelt feelings !

      Vote up and more !!!

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      Frank Atanacio 4 years ago from Shelton

      very clever without you message and very well written piece Lathing bravo

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      Joyce Haragsim 4 years ago from Southern Nevada

      I love the side message saying WITH YOU in this awesome poem.

      Voted up and beautiful, Joyce

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      Rich 4 years ago from Kentucky

      Lizzy! (Now I can call you by your name!) What a good acrostic poem, especially for your first attempt!

      Lovely is the poem,

      Amazing is the poet,

      Talent overflows,

      Hospitable to all,

      Intelligent is her work,

      Nothing is impossible to her,

      Greatness is here!

      Loved it, lady! : )

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      LaThing 4 years ago from From a World Within, USA

      Hello, Eddy, my dear friend! This is my first, so I kept it short, LOL.... always good to see you, and thanks for the comment :)

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      LaThing 4 years ago from From a World Within, USA

      Hi, Brtbell! Great to see you here.... I have never tried writing an Acrostic Poem before, thought I would give it a try :)

      Glad you enjoyed it, thanks for your comment.

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      Eiddwen 4 years ago from Wales

      A beautiful Acrostic poem and here's to so many more gems like this from you. You are indeed very talented.

      Eddy.

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      Randi Benlulu 4 years ago from Mesa, AZ

      Beautiful, sad. I love the style of using the first letters!

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      LaThing 4 years ago from From a World Within, USA

      Thanks for the wonderful comment, Billy! Wish you and Bev all the best :) Take care, my friend!

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      Bill Holland 4 years ago from Olympia, WA

      Yep, that's how I feel when Bev is gone. Well done my friend....you captured so much in so few lines. :)