ArtsAutosBooksBusinessEducationEntertainmentFamilyFashionFoodGamesGenderHealthHolidaysHomeHubPagesPersonal FinancePetsPoliticsReligionSportsTechnologyTravel
  • »
  • Books, Literature, and Writing

Poetry: You and I

Updated on June 27, 2015

I had composed this poem in 2000. The Nepali translation was published in a poetry collection titled “You and I” in 2000. I studied poetry in my English class but I knew nothing about poetry. Actually I did not read poetry until I published a poetry collection. I’m still learning the craft of poetry but I see myself as a storyteller. Most of my poems are narrative, because I love to tell a story in a poetic form.

Untitled by Kiran Manandhar
Untitled by Kiran Manandhar | Source

Do you know

Last night I was with you

Your eyes were closed

Breathing deeply

Yes, you were sleeping

And didn't know I was there.

I was very close to you. Very close.

I could feel your pulse

Your breathing

You were calm and quiet

I was restless.


My fingers ran over your flesh

It was so soft, so gentle,

Couldn't help

Kissed

Your forehead, eyes, cheeks, lips…

Nothing remains here,

Your beauty will wither,

Elegance will vanish

And I won't be here to be lost in you

You won’t exist forever, nor I


I went inside you

In your heart, your mind

To etch complicated lines

Memories whispered into ears

Came out to live with life

Life that is slipping off hand

I exchanged skin and borrowed time

Searching for blouse of affection


Slowly…slowly…I entered your heart

Reached the infinite depth

Is this the Pacific Ocean?

I floated in your blood

Travelled through veins

Into the chambers of the heart

Right to left. In and out.

I was within the thick sticky fluid.

The warmth.

Then with the gushing blood I was inside your mind.

Good heavens!

Your mind is so profound

The world outside was

Just a reflection of your inner world


Last night, I was with you, within you.

You were sleeping and didn't know

I was inside. I was outside

Lost inside, found outside

In the deep silence of yours

I entered the universe

Yes, you really did not know,

Last night I was pretty deep inside you.

You were asleep but I was awake

Travelling in your eternal world

Comments

    0 of 8192 characters used
    Post Comment

    • profile image

      Ken Snowdon 3 years ago

      This is a brilliant piece my poetic friend. And being your first at that time, simply profound and stunning. Love can affect us so deeply, we want to be in the presence of our lover night and day, we want to swim in her affection, drown in her perfection. This journey you took yourself on within the realms of her physical being enlightened you on her amazing soul and beauty you feel for her. Well done, bravo. Voted up and shared.

    • Vinaya Ghimire profile image
      Author

      Vinaya Ghimire 4 years ago from Nepal

      @Dreamseaker, this is one of the best compliments for this poem. Thank you very much.

      @Rosemary, I appreciate your interpretation. Thank you very much.

    • Rosemay50 profile image

      Rosemary Sadler 4 years ago from Hawkes Bay - NewZealand

      Just as beautiful as the first time around. Total oneness with your love, both in body and in spirit. You are no longer you but a part of her.

      That was a tough feeling to get across but you did it so well.

    • profile image

      dreamseeker2 4 years ago

      Wow! Pretty powerful piece! : ) Beauty in poetry and passion in its purest, raw form. Most girls would give anything to be loved like this...great poem!! Had to be voted up and then some.

    • Vinaya Ghimire profile image
      Author

      Vinaya Ghimire 4 years ago from Nepal

      @Suzettenaples, thanks for your comment here, there, everywhere. When I wrote this, I did not know I was writing a poem. Thanks for appreciating my work.

      @Gypsy, thank you very much for reading and appreciating the poet's work. Cheers

    • Gypsy Rose Lee profile image

      Gypsy Rose Lee 4 years ago from Riga, Latvia

      Passionately poetic. From this poem one could tell that a poet was emerging.

    • profile image

      suzettenaples 4 years ago

      Wow! If this is one of your first poems, I'd say you are a natural born poet-and writing this in your second language really is impressive, Vinaya. I love the images and metaphors you use and this flows do well. Love this!

    • Vinaya Ghimire profile image
      Author

      Vinaya Ghimire 4 years ago from Nepal

      Hi BongSantos,

      I appreciate your interpretation. Thanks for reading closely.

      Regards

    • BongSantos profile image

      Jobb Gosamo 4 years ago from Philippines

      Was it my wild imagination that made me feel semblant eroticism in your poem? Your love journey into her very soul was full of passion expressed with beautiful words. I'm happy to have paid you a visit.

    • Vinaya Ghimire profile image
      Author

      Vinaya Ghimire 5 years ago from Nepal

      Angel, the girl was sleeping, I did not wait to ask her name after the shot.

      Cheers

    • Angelme566 profile image

      Angelme566 5 years ago

      Soulful ,who that you? the girl in the picture ? and she's beautiful. Voted up !

    • Vinaya Ghimire profile image
      Author

      Vinaya Ghimire 5 years ago from Nepal

      @Onlooker, thanks for your your wonderful comment.

      @Audrey, I'm blessed and honored by your presence on my pages, here, there, everywhere.

      Cheers

    • AudreyHowitt profile image

      Audrey Howitt 5 years ago from California

      This is just such a beautiful write that I came back for another read--

    • profile image

      onlooker 5 years ago

      This is good..brilliant even. What a way to observe and feel, awesome stuff Vinaya. Well done and thank you.

    • Vinaya Ghimire profile image
      Author

      Vinaya Ghimire 5 years ago from Nepal

      Hello Justin, thanks for coming back.

      Cheers

    • PDXKaraokeGuy profile image

      Justin W Price 5 years ago from Juneau, Alaska

      you're welcome vinaya. I'm off to check out your latest!

    • Vinaya Ghimire profile image
      Author

      Vinaya Ghimire 5 years ago from Nepal

      Hi Justin, thanks for stopping by.

      Cheers

    • PDXKaraokeGuy profile image

      Justin W Price 5 years ago from Juneau, Alaska

      good list of poets, Vinaya. I follow all of them, but one, and I swill remedy that....

    • Vinaya Ghimire profile image
      Author

      Vinaya Ghimire 5 years ago from Nepal

    • biancaalice profile image

      biancaalice 5 years ago from Southern California

      Great job! Voted up and awesome!

    • American View profile image

      American View 5 years ago from Plano, Texas

      I am not a poet nor can I write poetry. Very nice work. Up and awesome

    • Jrandol62 profile image

      Jeff 5 years ago from Where ever the road takes me....

      Good stuff!! Kathmandu may be on my bucket list of towns to visit. I want to climb to Everest base camp before God calls me home!! Voted up and awesome!!

    • Perspycacious profile image

      Demas W Jasper 5 years ago from Today's America and The World Beyond

      Creativity in growth shining through.

    • Nell Rose profile image

      Nell Rose 5 years ago from England

      This is so beautiful, to journey through the mind of the one you love! amazing! voted up!

    • ThePracticalMommy profile image

      Marissa 5 years ago from United States

      Absolutely stunning imagery! This is an outstanding, beautiful poem, Vinaya! Voted up and beautiful!

    • Ardie profile image

      Sondra 5 years ago from Neverland

      And you say you know/knew nothing about poetry? I dont believe it. This is beautiful and moving.

    • AudreyHowitt profile image

      Audrey Howitt 5 years ago from California

      This is just so beautiful Vinaya!

    • sholland10 profile image

      Susan Holland 5 years ago from Southwest Missouri

      Vinaya, this is beautiful! I think you have poetry running through you veins. You definitely know how to write verse! :-)

    • Ian Dabasori Hetr profile image

      Ian D Hetri 5 years ago from Papua New Guinea

      Just amazing. great piece of literary work. Voted up..

    • Victoria Lynn profile image

      Victoria Lynn 5 years ago from Arkansas, USA

      Wow! For someone who knew nothing about poetry, as you said in your introduction, this is brilliant! I was taken on quite a wave of emotion with every phrase. You put this together so beautifully, Vinaya. Wow. Voted up, interesting, awesome, and, of course, beautiful! Sharing!

    • Vinaya Ghimire profile image
      Author

      Vinaya Ghimire 5 years ago from Nepal

      Hi Angel, thanks for your compliments.

    • profile image

      angel 5 years ago

      It moves a reader !

    • Vinaya Ghimire profile image
      Author

      Vinaya Ghimire 5 years ago from Nepal

      Hello Sheila, thank you very much.

    • sheilanewton profile image

      sheilanewton 5 years ago from North Shields, UK

      Voted up and across. Fantastic poetry, Vinaya.

    • Vinaya Ghimire profile image
      Author

      Vinaya Ghimire 5 years ago from Nepal

      Hello Jackie, thanks for sharing your views on writing. I'll love to read more from you.

    • Jackie Lynnley profile image

      Jackie Lynnley 5 years ago from The Beautiful South

      Very interesting poem, also that you write story form which I do too but I only started writing poetry about two years ago but since then it is my love. You have a very special style.

    • Vinaya Ghimire profile image
      Author

      Vinaya Ghimire 5 years ago from Nepal

      Radha, thank you very much.

    • radhapriestess profile image

      radhapriestess 5 years ago from Minneapolis, MN

      Some beautiful imagery in this poem. Very heart felt.

    • PDXKaraokeGuy profile image

      Justin W Price 5 years ago from Juneau, Alaska

      you're welcome, Vinaya. it's always nice to read your stuff

    • Vinaya Ghimire profile image
      Author

      Vinaya Ghimire 5 years ago from Nepal

      hello pennyoftheheaven, thank you very much.

    • pennyofheaven profile image

      pennyofheaven 5 years ago from New Zealand

      Wow what a beautiful journey you took me on Awesome Thanks!

    • Vinaya Ghimire profile image
      Author

      Vinaya Ghimire 5 years ago from Nepal

      Hello PDX, thanks for reading and leaving a wonderful comment.

    • PDXKaraokeGuy profile image

      Justin W Price 5 years ago from Juneau, Alaska

      wow! Amazing! Voted up awesome and beautiful!

    • Vinaya Ghimire profile image
      Author

      Vinaya Ghimire 5 years ago from Nepal

      shanaya thanks for your wonderful words of appreciation.

      Well my another account Binaya Ghimire was not banned. I wrote to the Hub team to terminate it. I replaced B with V because I opted to use correct English spelling for my Sanskrit name.

    • shanaya profile image

      shanaya 5 years ago from Living in my Own Dreams:)

      Hello Vinaya! Full of Passion and Wonderful as well. Loved it. Your chosen words are perfect to make it a Piece. Thanks for sharing with us.:)

      voted up, awesome, interesting, beautiful.

      P.S! Sorry for asking but Why your another ID {@Binaya ghimire} is banned from here?

      With Respect

      from SHANAYA:)

    • Vinaya Ghimire profile image
      Author

      Vinaya Ghimire 5 years ago from Nepal

      Frank, I'm ready to take to bed (I'm tired and it is already 10 pm). Your beautiful comment will take me into sweet dream.

    • Frank Atanacio profile image

      Frank Atanacio 5 years ago from Shelton

      This poem by far the best one I read today Up and awesome

    • Vinaya Ghimire profile image
      Author

      Vinaya Ghimire 5 years ago from Nepal

      Sueswan, I feel your warmth in a chilly day in Kathmandu. Thanks for being here.

    • profile image

      Sueswan 5 years ago

      Hi Vinaya

      "I floated in your blood

      Travelled through veins

      Into the chambers of the heart

      Right to left. In and out.

      I was within the thick sticky fluid."

      Amazing imagery! Beautiful and profound.

      Voted up, up and away!

      Have a wonderful day.

    • Vinaya Ghimire profile image
      Author

      Vinaya Ghimire 5 years ago from Nepal

      qlcoach, wow that was wonderful. Thank you very much.

    • qlcoach profile image

      Gary Eby 5 years ago from Cave Junction, Oregon

      Yes to the power of Love that transcends the body and reaches the soul. Here's to the Love-Light that protects, heals, comforts, and sustains until it is time to merge into the blue horizon. Peace....Gary.

    • Vinaya Ghimire profile image
      Author

      Vinaya Ghimire 5 years ago from Nepal

      @lyns thanks for coming back.

      @Sunnie thank you very much for your beautiful comment.

    • profile image

      Sunnie Day 5 years ago

      Passion beyond the physical...mind, body, and spirit..very beautiful!

      Sunnie

    • lyns profile image

      lyns 5 years ago from USA

      @Vinaya Ghimire, You're most welcome, love how you handled all the @'s in one, good idea. Take care hope you had a good one.. 11/2 9p-----

    • Vinaya Ghimire profile image
      Author

      Vinaya Ghimire 5 years ago from Nepal

      @AEvans

      @makusr

      @Ubani

      @Radhapriestess

      Thanks for your lovely comment.

      Manoj you remember that line...thank you my friend

    • ubanichijioke profile image

      Alexander Thandi Ubani 5 years ago from Lagos

      Imaginative, awesome and profound. Great poem

    • profile image

      radhapriestess 5 years ago

      Very beautiful imagery. Very profound. Excellent.

    • makusr profile image

      Manoj Kumar Srivastava 5 years ago from India

      Vinaya,

      Greetings from MAKUSR. What a poem you have written my friend. Very emotional and sensuous. Pleased to see exchange of skin and blouse of affection...

      Lots of Love,

      MAKUSR

    • AEvans profile image

      Julianna 5 years ago from SomeWhere Out There

      Very passionate! Beautiful expression of heart and soul.

    • Vinaya Ghimire profile image
      Author

      Vinaya Ghimire 5 years ago from Nepal

      @lyns

      @rosika

      @sonia05

      @Happyboomernurse

      @jenubouka

      @Movie Master

      Thanks for being with me in this journey of love and passion. Thanks for your tremendous support.

    • Movie Master profile image

      Movie Master 5 years ago from United Kingdom

      Wonderful expresion of love and passion.

      Voting up.

    • profile image

      jenubouka 5 years ago

      The expression of the poem glides ever last to love's fatal touch. Your knack for words is incredible, thank you for sharing.

    • Happyboomernurse profile image

      Gail Sobotkin 5 years ago from South Carolina

      I loved this poem which speaks to anyone who has ever deeply loved and wanted to get inside their love's body, mind and heart. And the photos were stunning.

      Voted up, awesome, beautiful and interesting. Good luck in the contest.

    • sonia05 profile image

      sonia05 5 years ago from india

      simply awesome!!! Very poetic,romantic,heart felt and superbly wonderful!!! What a great way to love and understand your beloved!!

      voted up!

    • rosika profile image

      rosika 5 years ago

      This poem is written so well vinaya...very passionate! voted interesting, beautiful and awesome!

    • lyns profile image

      lyns 5 years ago from USA

      You're so welcome, thank you for sharing have a great evening, good night it's 2am in the morning, lol 11/2/11 2:06am

    • Vinaya Ghimire profile image
      Author

      Vinaya Ghimire 5 years ago from Nepal

      @Denise

      @lyns

      Thanks for being with me. Thanks for your lovely comment.

    • lyns profile image

      lyns 5 years ago from USA

      Excellent passion inside and outside, I love the way you went deep with being inside the mind, so passion for this poem to be 2000, sounds like today, it so much passion loved it thanks for sharing. Have a good evening. lyns 11/1/11 11:52

    • Denise Handlon profile image

      Denise Handlon 5 years ago from North Carolina

      Oh my goodness, Vinaya-passionate and awesome. I really was captivated by both the poem and the outstanding photos. Thanks for sharing!

    • Vinaya Ghimire profile image
      Author

      Vinaya Ghimire 5 years ago from Nepal

      @nenytridiana

      @chanroth

      @The Suburban Poet

      @Flora

      @Rosemary

      Thanks for being with me.

    • Rosemay50 profile image

      Rosemary Sadler 5 years ago from Hawkes Bay - NewZealand

      Beautifully written and very profound.

    • FloraBreenRobison profile image

      FloraBreenRobison 5 years ago

      this is beautiful. I love how wrote this over a decade ago and still the poetry seems fresh.

    • The Suburban Poet profile image

      The Suburban Poet 5 years ago from Austin, Texas

      Awesome man.... great passion here...

    • chanroth profile image

      chanroth 5 years ago from California, USA

      Very beautiful! Vote up!

    • nenytridiana profile image

      nenytridiana 5 years ago from Probolinggo - Jawa Timur - Indonesia

      Beautiful! the passion of mind traveling. Thank you vinaya.