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Prose - Your Flower Is Dying

Updated on March 27, 2011

And who is wise?
With sayings
From a book
Written long ago?
By men
Who worship
And who is the fool?
Who cannot
Or will not
Listen to her elder?
Who denies
The water
That a rose needs
Does the gardener
Because a rose
Is not a desert flower
Or unable to grow
From a rock?
Who is the fool
Who allows the bees
Their turn
While he looks away?
Assuming everything
Understanding nothing
Yet shouts
At the flower
When instead
A gentle breeze
And drops
Of love
Are needed
Who is the fool?
Who cannot see the flower
For what it is?
Who cannot sleep
Knowing the flower
Attracts others
So instead
He prays
And becomes
An eclipse
A cloud
A shadow
A drought
A blade
To cut down
Her beauty
So he can bury her
Under earthful scorn
Mocking her
For her ungrateful thorns
Because mere life
Was not good enough
Instead she dared
To be who she was
Yes he mocks
Knowing his wisdom
But unknowing his loneliness
Which will become the shadow
Over his life
Who is the fool?
The flower?
Or the gardener?


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      Mark Lecuona 6 years ago from Austin, Texas

      @2uesday - Thank you and of course you can say anything you wish on my hub. I like it when people give me a real opinion and interpret the words. Here I am attempting to out-think a man who is using his own "wisdom" to suppress his young lover....

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      2uesday 6 years ago

      Beautiful poetry, I enjoy reading metaphorical images in poetry, especially when in gives some freedom to interpret the meanings of the words.

      In my humble opinion the happiest and most beautiful flowers grow in a garden where the gardener loves and enjoys them for their randomness, rather than looking for them spring up as planned from the selection in the gardening books. Hope it is OK to say that. Voted up and beautiful.

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      Mark Lecuona 6 years ago from Austin, Texas

      @always - yes it could be for either... thanks!

      @Lora - yeah I know... it takes work but I don't mind watering the right flower....

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      LoraKayAlexander 6 years ago

      Gotta water those Babe's. :-) Great work!

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      Ruby Jean Fuller 6 years ago from Southern Illinois

      I see this as a wise understanding of those around us, be it a child, or a lover. Well done.

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      Mark Lecuona 6 years ago from Austin, Texas

      @dallas - thank you!

      @Deborah - The answer is a fool... they cannot overcome their own inadequacies...

      @Vern - Thank you... who hasn't thought of their lover as a beautiful flower? That is an inspired comment you made about solely focusing on behavior. I'm going to meet with some children in Houston next month to talk poetry and I'm going to speak about being who they are and how poetry provides that forum...

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      Vernon Bradley 6 years ago from Yucaipa, California

      Well metaphored, Suburban Poet. Thanks for giving us that 2 x 4 you mentioned in a comment. I talk about all of us being fools in the foster parent training classes as we, as parents, focus so much on behavior and not the innate goodness of those in our care.

      Anywho, thanks again for the food for our souls


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      Deborah Demander 6 years ago from First Wyoming, then THE WORLD

      Who is the fool who cannot see the flower for what it is? Beautiful writing.


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      dallaswriter 6 years ago from North Carolina

      Loved this! Thumbs up!

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      Mark Lecuona 6 years ago from Austin, Texas

      @Nan - thank you... it could work with a guitar and some intensity... it's a message.. a two-by-four over the head really... it's a "look what you got you fool..." kind of message...

      @Docmo - it can fit any male/female relationship... the domineering "wise one" who cannot enjoy his muse/daughter/lover at her stage of life... As for the father-daughter relationship a father should see who she is and not focus solely on how much she needs to improve... there is magic in today...

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      Mohan Kumar 6 years ago from UK

      beautifully metaphorical.. i read this as the parent/child dichotomy as it lent itself so well to that thought. Very wise indeed!

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      Nan Mynatt 6 years ago from Illinois

      Good Good, you have to get yourself some kind of instrument and try to sing the song!