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Raising Dust

Updated on May 8, 2013

Hunger filled their faces,

Their ribs stuck out so far

You could have counted them

At a hundred paces,

Bodies weathered,

Cheekbones looked sharp enough

To cut through leather,

It was a village made up of

Women and children,

Starvation took command,

And hunger presented its demand,

The infants’ lives were taken,

And their mothers, visibly shaken,

Frightened, their stomachs tightened,

And only their sorrows would complain,

They were tired and spent,

As the wind blew ominously

Through the village,

Raising dust as it went.

© 2013 Frank Atanacio

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      Frank Atanacio 4 years ago from Shelton

      thanks Valley for all your support bless you bro :)

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      Valleypoet 4 years ago

      A very sad and tragic image, one that is all too familiar...well written buddy:-))

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      Frank Atanacio 4 years ago from Shelton

      thanks alot X-man :)

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      Jim Higgins 4 years ago from Eugene, Oregon

      Gripping and sad poem Frank, and a too common occurrence in our world today.

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      Frank Atanacio 4 years ago from Shelton

      thank you MrsBrownsParlour :)

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      Lurana Brown 4 years ago from Chicagoland, Illinois

      Worthy topic and well-done. Gaunt, stark imagery and tone of realism. I like how you pulled back from the scene at the end with the wind...it gave a perspective of distance and "moving on" which reminds us how frequently this happens in so many places. ~Lurana

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      Frank Atanacio 4 years ago from Shelton

      thanks Vin and Eiddwen :)

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      Eiddwen 4 years ago from Wales

      Another wonderful share by you my friend.

      Voting up and here's wishing you a wonderful weekend.

      Eddy.

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      Vinaya Ghimire 4 years ago from Nepal

      Hungry world is a dangerous world. The root of all the problems in the world is hunger.

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      Frank Atanacio 4 years ago from Shelton

      thank you sooo much Poetvix... X-man good to see you again and tobusiness always good to see you

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      Jo Alexis-Hagues 4 years ago from Bedfordshire, U.K

      Frank, this is simply amazing!... With your few words, you have painted such a vivid picture of this village, it's people and the hopelessness of their situation, you my friend, are an artist. Well done. :)

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      Jim Higgins 4 years ago from Eugene, Oregon

      Stark and sad, yet well told, Frank!

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      poetvix 4 years ago from Gone from Texas but still in the south. Surrounded by God's country.

      How many times must the scene you painted so well have played out in this world, is still playing out? Heartbreaking. Very few can actually move me with less than several pages, yet you always do.

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      Frank Atanacio 4 years ago from Shelton

      Thank you so Much Phoebe.. for visiting my dust.. always good to see and Faith thanks for keeping the faith.. LOL and thank you too Gypsy and Mhatter :)

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      Martin Kloess 4 years ago from San Francisco

      Very good job on this. In our world, people shouldn't starve.

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      Gypsy Rose Lee 4 years ago from Riga, Latvia

      A tragedy which is much too common in many countries where children are starving. You expressed it so well.

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      Faith Reaper 4 years ago from southern USA

      Whoa, Frank!

      Another amazing write here. I agree with Phoebe, your writing seems to be getting better by the minute, which it was already incredible!

      Pretty harsh picture you have painted here as to poverty . . . really makes a statement.

      Voted up

      God bless, Faith Reaper

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      Phoebe Pike 4 years ago

      Your poetry has gotten much better... which I didn't even think was possible...

      This is the second time your words have made me weep. I'm going to have to start keeping a box of tissues beside me when I go to your page.

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      Frank Atanacio 4 years ago from Shelton

      it could be LOL thanks for asking Chris :)

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      Chris Achilleos 4 years ago

      Great poem Frank! There so many people suffering from poverty and war. I must ask you, is your poem speaking of war? I don't know, I just got that feeling. That you are speaking of what war brought upon a village.

      Thanks for sharing.

      Definitely voted up!

      Chris

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      Frank Atanacio 4 years ago from Shelton

      thank you msdora :)

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      Dora Weithers 4 years ago from The Caribbean

      What a distressful ode to starvation! A sad topic resented in a beautiful form. Good.

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      Frank Atanacio 4 years ago from Shelton

      thanks for checking out my dust whonu and thank you always wayne barrett :) bless you guys

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      Wayne Barrett 4 years ago from Clearwater Florida

      Another well written representative piece. Unfortunately, most of the places we turn to dust were paradises when we arrived.com. Good work, Frank.

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      whonunuwho 4 years ago from United States

      This is so very sad and is common today. Especially in Africa, is this very thing occurring and there is little help for these poor people. Thank you for sharing this and it is a reminder that our works here as Christians and lovers of all humanity, is long from being over. whonu