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Saturday, April 14

Updated on February 19, 2015


Saturday, April 14,

a crime scene,

the results were crude,

the dead man was found nude,

his lower half wrapped

in a sports blanket,

sanity had been cornered and trapped,

a single shot to the head,

Lets Go Jets, logo

covered in red,

no one in the building heard the scream,

cartoons on the big screen,

volume loud,

and what followed that dead man

was a dark cloud,

suicide was the cause,

no one had to think, or pause,

nothing else needed to be said,

the remains of his head,

was resting on the back of the sofa,

reality reeling,

his left eye stared at the ceiling,

gravity had pulled the other deep

into its socket,

a note on the chair

which fell out of his pocket,

an eviction notice on the door,

tax papers all over the floor,

the thermostat was on high,

and the heat was rising,

the dead man must have gotten tired

of itemizing.

© 2011 Frank Atanacio

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      Frank Atanacio 2 years ago from Shelton

      LOL.. thanks :)

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      bizarrett81 2 years ago from Maine

      On the contrary. I've been reading Stephen King since I was nine years old. I like a bit of gruesome with my breakfast ;-)

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      Frank Atanacio 2 years ago from Shelton

      sorry biz for ruining your coffee :(

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      bizarrett81 2 years ago from Maine

      Your simplicity and unabashed gruesomeness makes for some awesome, one minute reads that tell a whole story in just a few lines. That went great with my morning coffee :-) Thank you!

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      Frank Atanacio 2 years ago from Shelton

      probably... lol thanks for stopping by :)

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      Patsy Bell Hobson 2 years ago from zone 6a, SEMO

      Can writers and poets be considered minimalist? ^+

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      Frank Atanacio 2 years ago from Shelton

      thank you Lisa

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      Lisa VanVorst 2 years ago from New Jersey

      Wow, powerful and sad. Another great hub Frank.

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      Frank Atanacio 2 years ago from Shelton

      LOL you're correct til.. :) thanks for checking this out

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      Mary Craig 2 years ago from New York

      This has just as much sting and mystery as when you first wrote it. We are certainly left with our own interpretations here though everything points to this poor guy just being overwhelmed by his bad luck or.....

      Voted up, awesome, and interesting. Blessings to you.

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      Frank Atanacio 2 years ago from Shelton

      Good to see you again Marlene hope all is well :)

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      lovedoctor926 4 years ago

      A description creates a picture so that the reader can visualize the details. I even saw the cartoons on the big screen. Good work!

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      Frank Atanacio 4 years ago from Shelton

      Poetvix... thank you for your comments.. bless you :)

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      poetvix 5 years ago from Gone from Texas but still in the south. Surrounded by God's country.

      Wow! Talk about intense. Sadly, while I think this is fiction, it could be the current headline in any city across our nation.

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      Frank Atanacio 5 years ago from Shelton

      yeah Sueswan.. how many times did I really want to end up like this chap after doing my taxes LOL thanks for realizing that light line :) Frank

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      Sueswan 5 years ago

      Hi Frank

      I call this one a comedy of horrors. Gross but the itemizing line made me laugh.

      Voted up and awesome.

      Enjoy your evening.

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      Frank Atanacio 5 years ago from Shelton

      Thanks writer20 for having my back..:) and VG good to see you again my friend cheers ...Frank

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      Vinaya Ghimire 5 years ago from Nepal

      The visuals suggest a painful living. I can't say I enjoyed your work, actually I don't enjoy dark images. But I'm under the sell of the poet, who evoked empathy inside me.

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      Joyce Haragsim 5 years ago from Southern Nevada

      Awesome poem, Mr. Detective. Voted up and awesome of course.

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      Frank Atanacio 5 years ago from Shelton

      Thanks so much enlydia for stopping by and thank you Cara for reading my Saturday, April 14

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      Cara.R 5 years ago from New York

      This is my first time reading one of your hubs. I loved it. I have more reading to do.

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      Enlydia Listener 5 years ago from trailer in the country

      That was very visual. rated up.

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      Frank Atanacio 5 years ago from Shelton

      WD Curry.. LOL thanks for the laugh :) Frank

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      WD Curry 111 5 years ago from Space Coast

      At first I thought this must be in Orlando. Many Jets fans loose heart when they realize that Florida is not what they thought it would be like. They don't realize that they are better off with the 1040EZ. Yankees have to squeeze every nickle and scratch every dime.

      But then I realized . . . who would have the heat on in April? It must be up North and he was weary of saving on heat as well.

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      Frank Atanacio 5 years ago from Shelton

      Our Ms Brooks you always say the right thing bless you :)

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      Frank Atanacio 5 years ago from Shelton

      Sky your memory served you correctly.. maybe this guy should have been born an armadillo... right? LOL

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      Frank Atanacio 5 years ago from Shelton

      Thank you so much V..

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      V Qisya 5 years ago

      I believe you, detective! But let's hear what others got to say.LOL!

      Nicely written,Frank! I liked it. Voted up :D

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      Frank Atanacio 5 years ago from Shelton

      Thank you Senoritaa..LOL yeah you like the mystery here huh? and Just ask Susan Taxes can be a b...h LOL thanks for reading :)

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      Susan Zutautas 5 years ago from Ontario, Canada

      Very vivid poem. Taxes can be a b _ tch.

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      Senoritaa 5 years ago

      There you go again, detective Frank. But maybe it wasn't suicide?