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Scarlet - A Short Story

Updated on January 20, 2017

Scarlet


Clee Hanson had been postmaster of Scarlet for five years, and he took the job seriously, including wanted posters, so when he noticed the stranger having breakfast at Mabel’s, he was suspicious. Of course, all strangers made Clee suspicious, but this one was special, because he matched the description of the man who robbed the express office in Prescott in December. Of course, Clee himself also matched the description, but then, strangers always made Clee suspicious.

Clee pulled the circular out of his shirt pocket, and silently pointed at the stranger. One by one, the four other men seated around the table compared the description to the unaware stranger and nodded at Clee. Fat Jimmy Larson grinned, and wiped the grease off his lips with his dirty sleeve. He was the town’s self-appointed hangman, and he liked his work.

Bart Crawford finished the last of his beef and eggs, and cleaned the plate with a slice of bread. The redheaded waitress smiled at him and held up the coffee pot, a question in her eyes. He nodded, and she topped off his cup.

“Will you be in town long?” Her eyes were a clear invitation, and her lips formed a playful pout.

He grinned at her. “Any reason I should hang around?”

She had just started to answer, when her eyes suddenly darted over his shoulder and her lips parted in shock. Bart felt the cold steel of a pistol barrel in the back of his neck, and he stiffened. Men appeared on both sides and he was suddenly surrounded by hard faces. A hand reached over his shoulder and dropped a wanted circular in front of him.

“That description fits you right proper, stranger.”

Bart Crawford read the poster and glanced around side to side. “Maybe so, but it also fits half the men in this room!”

“We know all these men. We don’t know you.”

“That’s mighty thin, mister. My only crime is being a stranger?”

“Stand up, and raise those hands while I check for weapons.”

The red-headed waitress broke her silence. “Clee Hanson, are you going to hang another man? This man don’t look like a criminal at all! He’s just passing through!”

“Shut up Julie. This here is man’s work. You just fetch food for folks, and mind your business.”

“I will not be silent! You have no authority to hang anyone!”

“I am a federal postmaster, and that makes me the closest thing to the law in these parts. I’ll do my duty, and you’ll be silent!”

Bart Crawford slowly turned and viewed Clee Hanson for the first time, and a chill went down his spine. The man was clearly enjoying himself, and he could see the madness dancing in his eyes. He realized that these people were dead serious and he was in mortal danger.

“He ain’t armed, Clee.”

“Well, of course I ain’t armed! Why would I be armed?”

He licked his suddenly dry lips.

“I think I would like to see the town marshal, or the sheriff.”

Clee Hanson’s grin grew larger. “Ain’t got neither. I’m the only law in Scarlet, and I know a bad man when I see one! You robbed that express office sure enough, and now you’ll hang!”

“Hang? That poster don’t say nothing about hanging anyone or that anyone was killed! In any case, I ain’t never even been in Prescott. You’d be hanging an innocent man!”

“Well, we can hardly expect you to ‘fess up, now can we? We hang all you villains and scoundrels here in Scarlet on account of we don’t have no jail. Can’t let you go and can’t keep you neither, so you don't give us no choice, stranger. The way I see it, it’s your own damn fault.”

“My fault? All I did was stop for breakfast!”

“Well, you shouldn’t have robbed no express office!”

Bart Crawford stared all around in exasperation.

“I did not rob no express office. You’re crazy! You are all crazy!”

The grin disappeared from Clee Hanson’s face, replaced by a look of cold anger. Why did they all say that? He was not crazy! He was just dedicated. “Lock him up in the woodshed behind the Post Office, boys. We’ll hang him at noon.”

The town gallows was a good one, and it too was behind the one room post office. It had five steps up the platform, a trapdoor, a lever to pull, and two posts supporting a rough hewn beam. All but the beam had been sanded and varnished. It was obviously a work of love.

Fat Jimmy Larson made a show of tying off the rope, and measuring the drop. He pointed out to Bart Crawford that it was a brand new rope, and would be buried with him. It was deemed the proper thing to do, as a show of respect to the deceased. He patted Bart on the shoulder and reassured him that his neck would instantly break, killing him quickly and painlessly. Bart told him to go straight to hell and Larson scowled at him. Clee Hanson looked at his post office issued pocket watch and glanced at Bart.

“Twenty minutes, son. Best make your peace with the Almighty.”

The tall man with graying hair stepped into the coolness of Mabel’s Café, and looked around. The lone waitress was staring out the window, oblivious of his presence. Her red hair was beautiful in the narrow shaft of sunlight.

“Sort of empty for the noon feed, ain’t it?”

Julie French spun around, and faced him. “There’s a hanging about to happen, mister. All the men are over there to watch. Women ain’t allowed, although I would not watch such a horror anyway.” She put her hand to her heart, looking back out the window. “I think he’s an innocent man.” She looked back at the stranger, but he had vanished.

Fat Jimmy pulled the knot of the noose tight against Bart’s left ear, allowing the slack of the rope to droop off his shoulder. “Ain’t got no black hood, so’s you’ll just have to shut your eyes. We got one on order from Saint Louis, though.”

He positioned Bart over the trap door and stepped over to the lever, nodding at Clee Hanson who began droning in solemn tones.

“Mister Stranger, you have been found guilty by a party of good town folks of robbin’ an express office, and on account of we can’t jail you or let you go neither, we are about to hang you. Any last words?”

Bart glared around, his neck twisting under the noose. “Y’all can go to hell!”

“You’ll be there in a few seconds, your ownself.” Clee signaled Fat Jimmy, who put both hands on the lever.

“Stay your hands mister, or you’ll pull back bloody stumps.” The tall man with the graying hair lifted a short, double-barreled shotgun from beneath his duster, and then pulled his lapel back far enough to reveal the shiny, silver badge of a federal marshal.

Fat Jimmy slowly lifted both hands in the air and stepped away from the lever.

“Take the noose off that man, but leave his hands tied, until I sort all this out.”

“The man what robbed that express office was arrested near two weeks ago, and he confessed in exchange for a shorter sentence. You damn fools were about to hang an innocent man.” He pointed at Clee Hanson. “You have the authority to sort the mail, and that’s about it. The law is my business, not yours. You lick your stamps and I’ll do the arrestin’ from now on.” He glared at Clee, until the postmaster hung his head.

The marshal was seated on a stool at Mabel’s lunch counter, his back to the counter and his shotgun in his lap. He was facing the five men in the hanging party, who were seated at a table, looking very uncomfortable. Bart Crawford was seated at the adjoining table, glaring at them and rubbing his rope-irritated neck.

The marshal sipped his coffee, eyeing the men over the brim of his cup. “If it had been five minutes later, all of you would be under arrest, pending trial for murder. You’d best hope that those you have hung were all guilty, or I may arrest you anyway.” He pointed a finger at Bart. “If I hear you molested this man any further after I’m gone, I’ll come back and arrest the lot of you. Do you hear me?”

The men nodded sullenly, and Bart spoke up.

“If it’s all the same to you Marshal, I’ll ride along with you. I have no further business in this town anyway, and I don’t trust this bunch.”

The marshal shrugged. “Suits me. I can use the company.”

They rode silently, putting miles between them and town of Scarlet. When they made camp that evening, the marshal regarded Bart silently as he built their fire and made coffee. He sipped the cup Bart handed him, and then spoke for the first time.

“Did you rob that express office?”

"Hell yeah! Got five hundred and fifty in gold.”

He eyed Bart, and took another sip. “Where is it”?

“I cached it at the line cabin, behind that loose chimney stone.”

“Dammit, Bart! How many times have Ma and I told you not to do that? I’d lose my job as Marshal if any loot was found on my ranch! Use your head, boy.”

“Sorry Pa. I won’t do it no more.”

“See that you do not. Now let’s get some rest, son.”


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      WillStarr 5 years ago from Phoenix, Arizona

      Hi, Levertis Steele, and thank you again!

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      Levertis Steele 5 years ago from Southern Clime

      At first, I thought that Bart was innocent, but near the end of the story, I expected him to be crooked, and I feared for the marshall's safety. To my surprise the marshall was a crook! This sounds like true life to me.

      Another great one!

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      WillStarr 5 years ago from Phoenix, Arizona

      Thank you again, Kebennett1!

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      WillStarr 5 years ago from Phoenix, Arizona

      Thank you Mister H. There are lots of great writers here!

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      Kebennett1 5 years ago from San Bernardino County, California

      Awesome twist, I loved it! Your a great short story writer, keep it up!

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      MisterH 5 years ago from Singapore

      Good stuff Will, far better than a lot of the stuff I've read here.

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      WillStarr 5 years ago from Phoenix, Arizona

      Hi ziyena!

      I like your stuff too:

      http://ziyena.hubpages.com/hub/Sundown-1

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      ziyena 5 years ago from ... Somewhere Out There ...

      I do like it WillStarr ... I do I do!

      Voting Up

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      WillStarr 5 years ago from Phoenix, Arizona

      Thanks, Mike! Glad you liked it!

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      mckbirdbks 5 years ago from Emerald Wells, Just off the crossroads,Texas

      Another fine read Will. Just what I needed this afternoon.

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      WillStarr 5 years ago from Phoenix, Arizona

      Thank you, April!

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      April Reynolds 5 years ago from Arizona

      That is encouraging! It's nice to know I'm not the only one with doubts about my writing. :) Especially when your stories are so good and you have such a great following.

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      WillStarr 5 years ago from Phoenix, Arizona

      Hi April,

      "...I wasn't sure it was all that good and almost didn't publish it."

      I know. Some of my most well received stories were almost not published because I had doubts.

      Self doubt makes us better writers, so write it, read it, edit it, and hit the publish button.

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      April Reynolds 5 years ago from Arizona

      Thank you so much! That means a lot from someone with as much talent as you, I wasn't sure it was all that good and almost didn't publish it.

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      WillStarr 5 years ago from Phoenix, Arizona

      Thank you, April. "Power" was a great story!

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      April Reynolds 5 years ago from Arizona

      Hi Will, I have enjoyed several of your stories here today, but I think the twist ending of this one has been my favorite. For a moment I suspected the marshall was the guilty, but had no idea it was bart or they were related! You got me, I look forward to reading more.

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      WillStarr 5 years ago from Phoenix, Arizona

      Thank you, wingedcentaur!

      Leading the poor reader astray is half the fun!

      ^_^

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      WillStarr 5 years ago from Phoenix, Arizona

      Thank you, Dog Advisor!

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      William Thomas 5 years ago from That Great Primordial Smash UP of This and That Which Gave Rise To All Beings and All Things!

      Voted up for awesome! What a wonderfully innovative way of running a family crime operation! That was a great DOUBLE TWIST at the end. First, it turns out that the man was the bank robber; and then.... I don't know what I expected after that. Cut the marshall in on the take as a thanks for saving his life? No, it turns out that the marshall was already in on it! As the commenter called breakfastpop said, 'the family that robs together, sticks together.'

      Take it easy.

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      Sarah Falkner 5 years ago from www.facebook.com/Family Dog Advice

      thanks for the great story

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      WillStarr 5 years ago from Phoenix, Arizona

      You tell a great story yourself, Wizzie!

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      Wizzie Crone 5 years ago from wizziecrone@yahoo.com

      You are really a good story teller. Didn't expect that twist.

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      WillStarr 5 years ago from Phoenix, Arizona

      Thank you, Lesley!

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      Movie Master 5 years ago from United Kingdom

      Fantastic - I didn't see that one coming!

      Loved it Will thank you and voted up.

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      WillStarr 5 years ago from Phoenix, Arizona

      Hi, Pop!

      Like father, like son.

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      breakfastpop 5 years ago

      Ah, the family that robs together, sticks together. Up and awesome.

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      WillStarr 5 years ago from Phoenix, Arizona

      Thank you Jackie!

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      Jackie Lynnley 5 years ago from The Beautiful South

      Well that's all right, he still din't deserve no hangin! You got us all again! Great tale.

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      WillStarr 5 years ago from Phoenix, Arizona

      Hi James, and thank you!

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      James W. Nelson 5 years ago from eastern North Dakota

      Oh, what goes through the mind of Will Starr. Another good one, Will, I sure was believing the innocense of Bart, right up until the last three sentences.

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      WillStarr 5 years ago from Phoenix, Arizona

      Thank you, Ronnie!

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      Ronnie Sowell 5 years ago from South Carolina

      Another great one, Will! Keep them coming, friend.

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      WillStarr 5 years ago from Phoenix, Arizona

      Hi Tina!

      Some of us are less guilty than others, but none of us are innocent!

      ^_^

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      Christina Lornemark 5 years ago from Sweden

      Interesting read from the first paragraph! Those few words described Clee Hanson and the town so good! I really thought the stranger was innocent though, it is a shame that people can't be trusted:) Thanks for a great story Will,

      Tina

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      WillStarr 5 years ago from Phoenix, Arizona

      "You left us hanging and twisting in the air"

      Then I was successful!

      ^_^

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      SilentReed 5 years ago from Philippines

      You left us hanging and twisting in the air :) The end was a hearty chuckle.

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      WillStarr 5 years ago from Phoenix, Arizona

      You have me figured out, b. Malin...almost!

      ^_^

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      WillStarr 5 years ago from Phoenix, Arizona

      Thank you, Jim!

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      WillStarr 5 years ago from Phoenix, Arizona

      Hi Lily!

      It does seem that way sometimes, doesn't it?

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      WillStarr 5 years ago from Phoenix, Arizona

      Hi poetvix!

      Judge Roy Bean believed hanging was the cure for all crime. Maybe he was right!

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      WillStarr 5 years ago from Phoenix, Arizona

      Hi Rosemay50!

      He wasn't exactly innocent, but hanging him was a little harsh!

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      WillStarr 5 years ago from Phoenix, Arizona

      Thank you, marshacanada!

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      WillStarr 5 years ago from Phoenix, Arizona

      Hi Diane, and thank you! It was one birthday too many! I am now officially older than top-soil.

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      WillStarr 5 years ago from Phoenix, Arizona

      Hi Nell Rose,

      There are no innocent men!

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      WillStarr 5 years ago from Phoenix, Arizona

      Hi Sueswan,

      Nothing is ever as it seems!

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      WillStarr 5 years ago from Phoenix, Arizona

      Hi G-Ma Johnson!

      Yes, I'm afraid that our marshal dotes on his son a little too much!

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      b. Malin 5 years ago

      And so goes another Great Ending...Although I'm not sure that I thought Bart was innocent knowing how you write...But a Son...NO, I didn't see that one coming. Another Fun Tale. Thanks Will.

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      The Frog Prince 5 years ago from Arlington, TX

      Will - A great story writer at work. Excellent my friend.

      TFP

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      Lillian K. Staats 5 years ago from Wasilla, Alaska

      As always Will, a filling read, and I realize now, the world works along the lines you write about... love yaz, lily

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      poetvix 5 years ago from Gone from Texas but still in the south. Surrounded by God's country.

      OK and here I was rooting for the guy all the way up until you knocked me over at the end. This was classic. Who would have thought the crazies had it right?

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      Rosemary Sadler 5 years ago from Hawkes Bay - NewZealand

      I love your stories, never know just what to expect. I was feeling sorry for him. What a corrupt world even back then.

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      marshacanada 5 years ago from Vancouver BC

      Thanks for another great story Will Starr. I loved it!!!

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      Diane 5 years ago

      HAD A GOOD CHUCKLE WITH THIS ONE WILL!

      THANKS FOR YOUR SENSE OF HUMOR AND HOPE YOU HAVE A GREAT BIRTHDAY!

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      Nell Rose 5 years ago from England

      Hi, and there was me feeling sorry for him! lol! great twist! I love your stories, you just never know what the ending is going to be! voted up!

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      Sueswan 5 years ago

      Hi Will

      This one had a twist that I wasn't expecting.

      "You lick your stamps and I’ll do the arrestin’ from now on.” LOL

      Vote up up and away!

      Take care and have a good evening. :)

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      Merle Ann Johnson 5 years ago from NW in the land of the Free

      Oh Boy!!! corrupt Federal Marshall's,, not surprised though tisk tisk tisk...Good story Will...:O) Hugs G-Ma

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      WillStarr 5 years ago from Phoenix, Arizona

      Thank you, kryptowrite!

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      Rodney C Lawley 5 years ago from Southeastern United States

      Good little story and well written.

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      WillStarr 5 years ago from Phoenix, Arizona

      Ah, my sweet Carolee! Thank you!

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      Carolee Samuda 5 years ago from Jamaica

      You never disappoint my friend. You always manage a little surprise at the end too! I love this.

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      WillStarr 5 years ago from Phoenix, Arizona

      Don't feel bad, Chris! I often don't know where I'm going either!

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      WillStarr 5 years ago from Phoenix, Arizona

      Sweet dreams, John!

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      WillStarr 5 years ago from Phoenix, Arizona

      Hi bethperry!

      Cheers to you, too!

      ^_^

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      WillStarr 5 years ago from Phoenix, Arizona

      Hi Dex, and thank you, sir!

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      WillStarr 5 years ago from Phoenix, Arizona

      Hi Ruby, and I'm delighted to lead you astray!

      ^_^

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      WillStarr 5 years ago from Phoenix, Arizona

      Can't fool Bob!

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      WillStarr 5 years ago from Phoenix, Arizona

      Hi Ghaelach!

      You're right! Eastwood would have been perfect for the marshal!

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      WillStarr 5 years ago from Phoenix, Arizona

      Thank you, hecate-horus!

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      WillStarr 5 years ago from Phoenix, Arizona

      Hi LABrashear,

      The vigilante cure was often worse than the disease!

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      WillStarr 5 years ago from Phoenix, Arizona

      Hi Becky!

      Fat Jimmy Larson was an evil man!

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      WillStarr 5 years ago from Phoenix, Arizona

      Hi writer20!

      I'm delighted that you now like the old west!

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      Chris Merritt 5 years ago from Pendleton, Indiana

      If I zig left....YOU zag right!

      I was trying real hard to get ahead of you on this one!!!

      Lost again....

      but once AGAIN, I loved it.

      Chris

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      WillStarr 5 years ago from Phoenix, Arizona

      Hi, drbj!

      Timing is everything!

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      WillStarr 5 years ago from Phoenix, Arizona

      Hi Kelly! From one BS writer to another!

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      WillStarr 5 years ago from Phoenix, Arizona

      Thank you, faithful Nan!

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      WillStarr 5 years ago from Phoenix, Arizona

      Hi loveofnight, and thanks for the visit!

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      WillStarr 5 years ago from Phoenix, Arizona

      Hi Teaches, and thank you!

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      WillStarr 5 years ago from Phoenix, Arizona

      Hi Sis!

      Hub-Oscar, huh? LOL!

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      WillStarr 5 years ago from Phoenix, Arizona

      Thank you, Marlin!

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      WillStarr 5 years ago from Phoenix, Arizona

      Hi Suzie!

      Vigilantes were often more outlaw than the outlaws!

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      WillStarr 5 years ago from Phoenix, Arizona

      Hi Sunnie, and thank you!

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      WillStarr 5 years ago from Phoenix, Arizona

      Hi nighthag!

      Thanks for the read and comment!

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      WillStarr 5 years ago from Phoenix, Arizona

      Hi Don! Glad you liked it!

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      John Harper 5 years ago from Malaga, Spain

      Great stuff, now off to bed with a neat tale to replay!

      John

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      Beth Perry 5 years ago from Tennesee

      Humorous tale, Will. I have to admit, for a little while you had me wondering if the Hang-em-high Postmaster was going to turn out to be Cheers' Cliff Claven, lol!

      Voted up!

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      Dexter Yarbrough 5 years ago from United States

      Very enjoyable story, Will! I loved the twist at the end. You indeed are excellent at this!

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      Ruby Jean Fuller 5 years ago from Southern Illinois

      I kept looking for the twist, i didn't see it coming. This is a great story. Like Father, like Son..

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      diogenes 5 years ago from UK and Mexico

      I guessed he was a partner, not his dad, but I guessed the ending half way through and that's half the fun and takes nothing from the tale.

      Another good read Will.

      Bob

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      Ghaelach 5 years ago

      Morning Will.

      With all the other comments you have become, I can only add that it's a shame that Clint "Roddy Yates" Eastwood isn't just starting his career in films as I think he'd fit in well with your characters

      Great hub.

      Take care.

      LOL Ghaelach

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      hecate-horus 5 years ago from Rowland Woods

      Great story, I really enjoyed it!

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      LABrashear 5 years ago from My Perfect Place, USA

      Ha! Liked the ending. I don't usually root for the bad guy, but you gotta give the family kudos for being clever! Voting up and sharing.

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      Becky Katz 5 years ago from Hereford, AZ

      Wow, I really disliked the hangman. This is probably the only man that was guilty of the one's they've hung. He was so lucky that the Marshall arrived. Great twist.

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      Joyce Haragsim 5 years ago from Southern Nevada

      Will, another great story. You converted me to read cowboys stories, now I love them. voted up and amazing.

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      drbj and sherry 5 years ago from south Florida

      If the marshal had arrived just a few minutes later, Will, this suspenseful story would have been a lot shorter. Happy he got there in time. So is Bart.

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      Kelly Umphenour 5 years ago from St. Louis, MO

      Will- I loved the line "he was the town's self appointed hangman, and he liked his work.". You had me right there...

      I just read about a guy who spent 22 years in jail for a crime he didn't commit...I kept wondering if I'd rather be hanged or sit in jail for 22 years? You're guy lucked out:) nice twist!

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      Nan Mynatt 5 years ago

      Will I like your surprise ending, father of the robber? And the robber hid the money at their home. Smart thinking here. I marked you up on this one. The truth is always hidden in your stories!

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      loveofnight 5 years ago from Baltimore, Maryland

      A real page turner.

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      Dianna Mendez 5 years ago

      Better than the movie endings... I was caught off guard. This sounds like it could be one of those Oceans 11, 12, 13 movies. Great story and enjoyed the read.

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      Angela Blair 5 years ago from Central Texas

      Great one, Will -- you had me, too -- right up until the end. The way you built up the suspense in this one deserves a Hub Oscar -- may suggest that! LOL! Hope you're getting a book together on these stories? Best/Sis

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      Marlin 55 5 years ago from USA

      Another great story Will and with a very good twist.