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Senryu poetry, The Donor

Updated on March 16, 2012
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I am a writer of poetry and fiction. I especially love flash fiction. My name is Ruby, and I live in Southern Illinois. I am a retired R.N.

Blissful reunion

He was seventeen

Speeding irresponsibly

Steering control loss

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Sharp curve ominous

Deafening loud crash clamor

Dead on arrival

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Wallet examined

Donor card signed and dated

Permission granted

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Organs harvested

Kidney transplant successful

Dialysis ceased

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Lost eyesight restored

Sightless child since accident

Exuberant child

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Donor's family

Requested visitation

Blissful reunion

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    • always exploring profile imageAUTHOR

      Ruby Jean Richert 

      5 years ago from Southern Illinois

      Hello Rolly. Good for you. I have the same. Circle of life. I love the idea. Thank you..Your comments always touch me.

      Hugs and Blessings....

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      Rolly A Chabot 

      5 years ago from Alberta Canada

      Hi Always... like always your words touch all of our basic instinct. I have carried my donor card for years and have a living will that allows another to make my final wishes. If I can reach out and help even after death why not, never know there may be a day when I may need soe help...

      Supper Hugs and Blessings

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      Ruby Jean Richert 

      5 years ago from Southern Illinois

      Hello Justin, So good to see you. Thank you for coming. Happy you enjoyed..

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      Justin W Price 

      5 years ago from Juneau, Alaska

      Haunting Ruby... well done!

    • always exploring profile imageAUTHOR

      Ruby Jean Richert 

      6 years ago from Southern Illinois

      Hello my funny friend, Glad to see you, happy you enjoyed. Thank you..Cheers

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      Terrye Toombs 

      6 years ago from Somewhere between Heaven and Hell without a road map.

      What a beautiful poem, Always. At least there was something good that came out of a tragedy.

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      Ruby Jean Richert 

      6 years ago from Southern Illinois

      Wow, Thank you Denise, Thank you for a gracious comment. I love the Elton John song too. The circle of life continues when we donate our organs..Cheers my friend..

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      Denise Handlon 

      6 years ago from North Carolina

      WOW! I LOVED your work here. Incredible. You have a real talent for capturing the story in poetry, Ruby. This is an amazing hub-the Elton John video/song is the perfect addition. Voted way up and awesome.

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      Ruby Jean Richert 

      6 years ago from Southern Illinois

      Hello Audrey, Thank you. Yes, It is important..Cheers..

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      Audrey Howitt 

      6 years ago from California

      Inspiring pieces and so important!

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      Ruby Jean Richert 

      6 years ago from Southern Illinois

      Hello drpastor, Good for you. The circle of life comtinues..Thank you....

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      Pastor Dr. Carlotta Boles 

      6 years ago from BREAKOUT MINISTRIES, INC. KC

      Great writing very inspiring! I myself am a Organ donor as well.

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      Ruby Jean Richert 

      6 years ago from Southern Illinois

      Hello Debby, I am sure this happens more often than reported. I am happy you came by..Thank you..

    • always exploring profile imageAUTHOR

      Ruby Jean Richert 

      6 years ago from Southern Illinois

      Hello Susan, Yes sad but a happy ending. Thank you..Cheers...

    • always exploring profile imageAUTHOR

      Ruby Jean Richert 

      6 years ago from Southern Illinois

      Hello Sophie, Thank you. I am thrilled that you think i did a good job on this..Cheers my friend

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      Ruby Jean Richert 

      6 years ago from Southern Illinois

      Hello SilentReed, Good to see you. I love doing this type of poetry. Counting the syllables can be difficult, but i love the challenge. Thank you..Join me in doing one, i think you will enjoy it...

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      Debby Bruck 

      6 years ago

      Hi Ruby ~ Every day this happens. Story told in a few words, down to the frame. Sad and happy emotions play out. Such loss, and gain. Blessings, Debby

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      Susan Zutautas 

      6 years ago from Ontario, Canada

      Ruby, Such a sad start with a lovely ending.

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      sofs 

      6 years ago

      Stunning! Chilling! Circle of life... I am so glad that death could not end everything.... :) You have done a great job on this one Ruby. Have a lovely day. God Bless!

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      SilentReed 

      6 years ago from Philippines

      It is hard to express the emotion and create empathy for the reckless driver while telling a story under the limited structure of a Senryu. You have certainly live up to the challenge and given others encouragement to try their hand with this difficult form of poetry. Thank you for the idea and possibilities.

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      Ruby Jean Richert 

      6 years ago from Southern Illinois

      Hello Caroline, Thank you for creatively well done comment. I appreciate you..Cheers my friend..

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      Ruby Jean Richert 

      6 years ago from Southern Illinois

      Hello Annette, So good to see you..Yes, do pick yourself up and move along. I love your writing whatever the genre. Thank you..Hugs.

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      Caroline Marie 

      6 years ago

      This is great Ruby. Written very well. Interesting story line. Creatively well done!

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      Annette Donaldson 

      6 years ago from Northern Ireland

      Oh Ruby, you can certainly write emotive poetry. My goodness this is bitter-sweet. I love your take on life that out of pain comes happiness. Thank you for the awesome reminder to pick myself up and move along. :)

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      Ruby Jean Richert 

      6 years ago from Southern Illinois

      Hello Rosemary. I am thrilled you like this. Thank you so much. I guess if we look deep enough there is always a brighter outcome..Cheers my friend..

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      Ruby Jean Richert 

      6 years ago from Southern Illinois

      Hello Martie, I love doing this type of poetry. I guess i have found my genre. Thank you Dear one..Cheers

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      Ruby Jean Richert 

      6 years ago from Southern Illinois

      Hello Ricky, You are right, our body is just that, it is our soul that matters..Thank you for a thoughtful comment..Cheers my friend..

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      Rosemary Sadler 

      6 years ago from Hawkes Bay - NewZealand

      Ruby this is awesome. For something positive to come out of such a tragedy is something to be in awe of.

      You did a great job.

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      Martie Coetser 

      6 years ago from South Africa

      This one is a stunner, Ruby. Extreme sadness caused extreme happiness. I am in awe...

      This is your genre :)

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      Richard Ricky Hale 

      6 years ago from West Virginia

      AE, this was an emotional poem my friend. I believe being a donor is the right thing to do. If we can save just one life or make it easier on someone, it is well worth it. Anyway, nobody can take our soul and that is what counts in the end.

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      Ruby Jean Richert 

      6 years ago from Southern Illinois

      Hello Elena, Happy to see you. I really never thought too much about being a donor until my friend Tom mentioned that he was a donor. I am glad you thought it was a strong message..Thank you my friend..

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      Elena 

      6 years ago from London, UK

      Lovely Haiku - Touching. It has a strong message...a very important one too.

      Bless you. :-)

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      Ruby Jean Richert 

      6 years ago from Southern Illinois

      Hello b., Your comment is so generous. Thank you very much. Donating a part of one's self is a badly needed gift. Cheers my friend..

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      b. Malin 

      6 years ago

      A truly Poignant Message to be shared with young drivers Everywhere. The Circle of Life is so precious. Your Senru Poetry is Wonderful!

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      Ruby Jean Richert 

      6 years ago from Southern Illinois

      Hello Capedium, Thank you for coming by. We will see how many i receive, maybe your theory will work..HaHa..Cheers my friend..

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      Ruby Jean Richert 

      6 years ago from Southern Illinois

      Hello Lesley, Thank you. Glad you thought it brought a message..Cheers my friend..

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      Ov Overo 

      6 years ago from Oklahoma

      If you can, find out how many few you got.. I just shared and linked.. Atleast, I should be able to generate a 100 view.. Just me.. Or maybe 50...

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      Ov Overo 

      6 years ago from Oklahoma

      Hi Always Exploring.. I maybe busy... But will never be too busy to read a Hub of yours.. This poem is very thoughtful! .... Again!.. Thanks for sharing!

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      Movie Master 

      6 years ago from United Kingdom

      Wonderful writing and message Ruby.

      Excellent work and voted up.

      Best wishes Lesley

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      Ruby Jean Richert 

      6 years ago from Southern Illinois

      Hello raciniwa, Thank you for coming to read. Happy you listened to the video. 'The circle of life' It seems that life does continue in a circle when organs are given. Cheers my friend..

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      Ruby Jean Richert 

      6 years ago from Southern Illinois

      Hello Astra, I couldn't agree with you more. There is a great need now. They can do so much more. I read the other day that a total face was transplanted and was successful. Thank you my friend..Cheers

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      Ruby Jean Richert 

      6 years ago from Southern Illinois

      Hello Senoritaa, I am happy that you thought i captured the essence of donor giving..Thank you my friend.

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      Ruby Jean Richert 

      6 years ago from Southern Illinois

      Hello Ruchira, It is good that he signed a donor card. It is sad when a young person dies, but when his organs are used to help others, in a way, he still lives..Thank you my friend..Cheers

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      Ruby Jean Richert 

      6 years ago from Southern Illinois

      Hello Docmo, Thank you. Your encouragement is highly appreciated..Thank you my friend..

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      Ruby Jean Richert 

      6 years ago from Southern Illinois

      Hello Vincent, It is good to know you are a donor. I am too. They can never take your soul. You will be with the Angels writing them beautiful poetry. Thank you so much for coming..Cheers my friend....

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      Ruby Jean Richert 

      6 years ago from Southern Illinois

      Hello Mck, Your encouragement gives me confidence. Thank you so much. I love doing senryu. I have a new one to try, called Tanka. It is a 5-7-5 lines, then two added lines of 7 syllables at the end. I'll have to think about that one, sounds difficult...Cheers my friend..

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      Ruby Jean Richert 

      6 years ago from Southern Illinois

      Hello Debbie, I am glad you enjoyed this piece. Thank you so much..Cheers

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      Ruby Jean Richert 

      6 years ago from Southern Illinois

      Hello Joyce, For some reason i never liked car races. I was in an automobie accident when i was a teenager, i wasn't critically hurt, just scared. Thank you for coming..Cheers

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      Ruby Jean Richert 

      6 years ago from Southern Illinois

      Hello Savanahl, It is sad. I am glad you thought it was beautiful. Thank you so much..Cheers

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      Ruby Jean Richert 

      6 years ago from Southern Illinois

      Hello drbj, Thank you. I have found that a message can be conveyed in a few words using the syllable count. As you know it is new to me, but i dearly love it. Your words of praise makes me happy..Cheers....

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      Ruby Jean Richert 

      6 years ago from Southern Illinois

      Hello Cardisa, It is sad that he lost his life , but he was able to help those in need. That must be a wonderful feeling for his family. It's like their Son lives on in a way. Thank you...

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      raciniwa 

      6 years ago from Naga City, Cebu

      you have created a great chain here Ruby on a short span of time...great video too...

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      Cathy Nerujen 

      6 years ago from Edge of Reality and Known Space

      What a good message inside this senryu, Ruby. Donating organs to others to help them is a great idea, and I am a donor myself. Life should be like that. What goes around should come around to those who may need it in the end.

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      Rinita Sen 

      6 years ago

      Very inspiring, and your Haikus captured it so well.

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      Ruchira 

      6 years ago from United States

      This guy in your senryu was amazing yet complicated. He was a donor yet driving drunk...what a tragedy.

      However, his organs were helpful for some.

      Amazing!

      voted up as awesome Ruby.

      You did it again :)

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      Mohan Kumar 

      6 years ago from UK

      You do it so well, Ruby. You tell stories and evoke emotions and touch hearts. wonderful, simply wonderful. voted up and awesome!

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      Ruby Jean Richert 

      6 years ago from Southern Illinois

      Hello Billybuc, Your comment gives me great pleasure. I am happy to follow you too. Thank you..

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      Ruby Jean Richert 

      6 years ago from Southern Illinois

      Hello Cleaner, I am glad you thought this piece was worth waiting for. Thank you..

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      Ruby Jean Richert 

      6 years ago from Southern Illinois

      Hello Spirit Whisperer, Happy you thought the message was clear. Thank you..

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      Vincent Moore 

      6 years ago

      Amazing work, you nailed it and it sent chills up my neck. I am an organ donor, they can have all of me, except my soul that's to dark:-) Well done and Voted way Up and shared.

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      mckbirdbks 

      6 years ago from Emerald Wells, Just off the crossroads,Texas

      Always, your poetry gave me the chills. You have really excelled with this one.

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      Deborah Brooks Langford 

      6 years ago from Brownsville,TX

      always exploring.. this is wonderful Senryu poetry.. I am used to the haiku poetry.. thank you I really enjoyed this

      voted up my dear

      Cheers to you

      Debbie

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      Joyce Haragsim 

      6 years ago from Southern Nevada

      Ruby, wonderful writing. Here in Las Vegas we have racing cars.

      Voted up and beautiful. Joyce.

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      savanahl 

      6 years ago

      So sad, yet so beautiful. Great writing. Voting up and beautiful.

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      drbj and sherry 

      6 years ago from south Florida

      How perfect and how beautiful this is, Ruby. You chose exactly the right medium, Senryu poetry, to express your thoughts on the value of donated organs. Voted way Up!

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      Ruby Jean Richert 

      6 years ago from Southern Illinois

      Hello Sky, Thank you. I love this song too, but the buffing drives me crazy. It looks like something could be done to stop it. It said it was high quality and it is but waiting for it to rewind, ugh...

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      Ruby Jean Richert 

      6 years ago from Southern Illinois

      Hello Prasetio, You are right my friend..Giving blood is a life saver....

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      Ruby Jean Richert 

      6 years ago from Southern Illinois

      Hello Eddy, Happy you liked this. Being a donor is so special...

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      Ruby Jean Richert 

      6 years ago from Southern Illinois

      Hello stestifie, Happy to meet you. I know you must feel proud. Thank you for commenting..

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      Carolee Samuda 

      6 years ago from Jamaica

      What a joyful end to a sad incident. Goes to show that we can always find something positive in a negative situation.

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      Bill Holland 

      6 years ago from Olympia, WA

      Ruby, this is beautiful! I marvel at your poetic ability, always with such power and emotion...I am pleased to follow you and honored that you do the same. Peace and love this weekend to you and yours.

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      cleaner3 

      6 years ago from Pueblo, Colorado

      Ruby , this is very nice. was waiting for your next poem, it was worth waiting for.

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      Xavier Nathan 

      6 years ago from Isle of Man

      Brilliantly written with a message that cuts to the chase! Thank you.

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      Sky9106 

      6 years ago from A beautiful place on earth.

      I can feel the great thought which went in to this beautiful poem.

      What a choice of song , perfect for the poem.

      Well done "AE"

      Blessings.

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      prasetio30 

      6 years ago from malang-indonesia

      Very inspiring hub. I hope many people will give what they have and share with others. Blood donors is good example. Beautiful poem as always. Thanks for share with us. Have a nice weekend!

      Prasetio

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      Eiddwen 

      6 years ago from Wales

      What brilliant poetry;great work Ruby and I wish you a wonderful weekend my friend.

      Eddy.

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      Stephanie Pyper 

      6 years ago from Las Vegas, NV

      Love this circle. I AM AN ORGAN DONOR AND PROUD OF IT!

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