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Sequel to Ice Caves

Updated on December 21, 2014

Continuation - Ice Caves Sequel

Ice Cave Sequel

Trudging down the mountain face, ice caves on my mind,

I step and trek the slippery slope, those caverns far behind.

Hand on a rock, and then on a branch, my efforts do me proud.

I shout from the ridge top, and then do a hop, the echo seems quite loud.

The light is fading, the shadows abound, I know my pace must quicken.

Time is near, my feelings of fear, oh how the time is tickin.

Open heart, that’s quite a start, no more ice cave blues.

I hear a voice, there’s really no choice, and what do I have to lose?

Hurry away, and down the slope where lonely hearts don’t dwell.

I can’t turn back, it’s a one-way track, back to a living Hell!

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    writinginalaska 6 years ago from southeast Alaska

    Thank you very much Silver! ;)

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    SilverGenes 6 years ago

    Wayne pretty much covered it nicely :) That photo is beautiful!

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    writinginalaska 7 years ago from southeast Alaska

    Big smile here Wayne! Thank you! Yes, i like the suggested change to the last line. I'll use it if you don't mind. Btw, the photo is from an ice cave here in Juneau at the Mendenhall Glacier, cool huh? L

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    Wayne Brown 7 years ago from Texas

    Good job and great sequel to show that there is life beyond the ice cave. I would not change the spacing format as the shift comes in at a good time in the poem and seems to change the pace was it works to conclusion. if you had rather change it, go back to the edit mode and that will move everything back to single spacing automatically. Then you can add your spacing once again. I always have to double space between my verses to get the formatting to hold a single space...something in the transition. One last thing...on the last line, to keep the timing smooth try "I can't go back, it's a one way track, back to a living hell." WB