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Should Never Promised Me - A Poem

Updated on July 7, 2017
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Write down love,

Into lines worth to read,

Sometimes only brought the longing farther,

To the dream,

I'm not usually allowing myself to go.

Because at the end;

The pain usually growing,

And then sadness consuming.

Knowing that my own hope had fooling me...

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Not just this once;

I lost,

From the cruelty of longing.

Stood at bay

Helpless even only for crying

Knowing your boat already sinking deep,

Killing yourself in it,

And mine in the process

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If you don't want a life...

Should never promised me one!

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    The Suburban Poet 5 years ago from Austin, Texas

    Whoa! That ending... don't take me down with you...

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    Freya Cesare 5 years ago from Borneo Island, Indonesia

    The Suburban Poet: LOL! I think you missed the point in that one, Mark.

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    The Suburban Poet 5 years ago from Austin, Texas

    Well I never said I was the smartest guy in the world. Tell me more about it...

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    Freya Cesare 5 years ago from Borneo Island, Indonesia

    Lol.

    "He promised me life but he doesn't want one. What should I feel? That's cruel isn't it?"

    That's the essence of the poem. about woman whose in love with depressed guy. Not my story of course but possible to happen in everybody's life.

    So, may I take you down now? LOL. I have blue belt in karate. not good enough but enough if only for kicking some butt. I helplessly need sparring partner lately. hwahahaha...

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    Mentalist acer 5 years ago from A Voice in your Mind!

    Life seemingly temporary,

    I say,

    To the contrary....

    This poem is a life's treasure,Ira.;-))

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    Freya Cesare 5 years ago from Borneo Island, Indonesia

    You are too kind, Prof. Thank you very much. \^o^/ yaiy!!!

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    Wayne Brown 5 years ago from Texas

    What a strong message in verse. It conveys a deep pain of disappointment; of being misled enough to bet your whole future on one thing then losing it. Very powerful, Freya...Applause! WB

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    Freya Cesare 5 years ago from Borneo Island, Indonesia

    Hello, Mr. Wayne Brown.

    I never meet any cowboy with very deep thoughts like you. That's a very thoughtful comment, thank you very much.

    Everytimes I see you, I remember Charlie. That's another person whose have ability to see poetic side of bugs bunny. Both of you had created poetic banter which so much fun to read. I missed those days. ^^

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    Nell Rose 5 years ago from England

    Hi, very strong meaning to your poem, depression is something thats close to my heart, my brother suffers with it, it does make you want to run away sometimes, loved the poem!

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    Freya Cesare 5 years ago from Borneo Island, Indonesia

    Hello, Nell. Yes, it close to me too because I was in it once. It is absorbed the life from others who loves you because you make them worry every single time. Thank you, dear. ^^

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    Ruby Jean Fuller 5 years ago from Southern Illinois

    I'm happy this is not about you. Heart whenching poem. Thank you...

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    Dora Isaac Weithers 5 years ago from The Caribbean

    It is better to express hopelessness than to keep it one's bosom. Poetry is so helpful and even beautiful in such circumstances. Thanks for sharing.

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    Freya Cesare 5 years ago from Borneo Island, Indonesia

    Always Exploring: Me too, Ruby. Thank you. ^^

    Ms. Dora: True, it help indeed. My pleasure, Ms. Dora and thank you.

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    The Suburban Poet 5 years ago from Austin, Texas

    Ok Freya... you sure talk some good smack for a woman wearing a hijab! I'm 6'0" and 190 lbs so BRING IT ON! Ha.....

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    Freya Cesare 5 years ago from Borneo Island, Indonesia

    lol. Size does not matter. Being small give me several advantage. As single lady who was live in the middle of Borneo jungle I had to learned several tricks to make sure I always come back home in one piece. But I must admit the best trick I have is to cover my whole face and wearing very lose garment. Surely will scared people away, even in Indonesia. The other trick is to used 'puss in the boots' eyes trick and captived someone to do the dirty work for me. it's work all the time! lol

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    ahorseback 5 years ago

    Freya , I love the way you have evolved in writing , You are sometimes a mystery to your poetic father , such a woman you are ! I'm so proud of you and this is even a mysterious writing . I have lost faith in mankind ....a long line of the worlds greatest lovers should be knocking down your door! LOL .....I have missed you Huggy bear!......:-} This little smile always reminds me of you.

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    Freya Cesare 5 years ago from Borneo Island, Indonesia

    Ahorseback: You help me evolved. In fact many Hubbers here help me evolved by allowed me to read and enjoying their works. This is a wonderful journey to be able to share my works which usually only hidden inside my books and celebrating it with others. Also to meet many friends, and people that I respecting so much like you, Dad. Thank you for your kind words and company. Hug back! ^^

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