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Snow White's Darkness

Updated on September 14, 2015

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An eternity seemed to pass as she stared,

the witch standing above her glared,

she took a bite of the apple,

and the witch doubled and tripled

in her blurred vision,

biting the apple was an odd decision,

the shadows around her would drape,

but she made no attempt to escape,

then she collapsed into one trembling shape,

she heard laughter, then cries,

her hand moved to her mouth,

but she couldn’t move her eyes,

then she rose and her shadow drifted,

not by her own power,

she was being lifted,

the witch made no sound,

staring as she turned round and round,

little men would call,

she opened her fingers

and she let the apple fall,

it was a late night,

but it was the moon that gave a fragile light,

it came in through the windows on the door,

when she was carried away,

only the apple was left,

spinning on the wooden floor.

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© 2011 Frank Atanacio

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      chrisam01 5 years ago from Los Angeles, California, USA

      Haunting and beautiful last lines: "only the apple was left, spinning on the wooden floor." Beautiful work.

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      Frank Atanacio 5 years ago from Shelton

      thanks so much Chrisam01 actually i did enjoy writing this :) Frank

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      chrisam01 5 years ago from Los Angeles, California, USA

      This reminds me of a historical fiction novel I read about Alice in Wonderland. It's a kind of behind the scenes look.

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      Frank Atanacio 5 years ago from Shelton

      Thanks C.. Yeah I know there is a great deal of dark in our little tales.. I enjoy bringing them out.. Alice ..I love the movie with Depp..:)

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      Deborah Brooks Langford 5 years ago from Brownsville,TX

      Frank you out did you self... wow.. so beautiful and scary in a way.. loved it...I VOTED UP AND BEAUTIFUL...I REALLY like reading your writings.. they are so good.

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      Joyce Haragsim 5 years ago from Southern Nevada

      Great story and I agree with Deborah above you did out do yourself with this one. Voted up and awesome.

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      AshtonFirefly 5 years ago

      Nice work :)

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      Frannie Dee 5 years ago from Chicago Northwest Suburb

      You've created great imagery here. Awesome.

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      Audrey Howitt 5 years ago from California

      Lovely writing! And great ending--Loved this! You could do a retelling of all the grimm's tales

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      LaDena Campbell 5 years ago from Somewhere Over The Rainbow - Near Oz...

      Great once again, Frank. I like how you wrote from the perspective of Snow White as she was falling into her deep sleep.

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      Frank Atanacio 5 years ago from Shelton

      Thanks again Our MS Brooks--Writer2o-- Ashton Firefly--AudreyHowitt and JustaTeacher and you FrannieDee.. welcome to my little darkness :)

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      Frank Atanacio 5 years ago from Shelton

      I actually almost forgot you Franniedee.. sorry about that :) but thanks so much for coming aboard

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      Nicole Canfield 5 years ago from the Ether

      Ohhh, Frank! How perfectly lovely and yet dark at the same time. My favorite type of poem. Great job! Voted up and beautiful.

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      Frank Atanacio 5 years ago from Shelton

      Thanks so much Kitty--:) Frank

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      Debby Bruck 5 years ago

      Hi Frank ~ You brought me back to the Disney movie of Snow White and the Seven Dwarfs. Very very nice poetry! Blessings, Debby

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      Frank Atanacio 4 years ago from Shelton

      thanks again Debby Bruck :)

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      Sunnie Day 4 years ago

      Hi Frank good morning ! Wonderful imagery on a classic story that never gets old. Great job my friend,

      Sunnie

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      Frank Atanacio 4 years ago from Shelton

      thank you so much and have a sunnie day :) Frank

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      LaThing 4 years ago from From a World Within, USA

      Wow, Frank, this is awesome! What a different view of the classic scene from snow white..... The details..... You are some poet, my friend! Voting ++

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      Frank Atanacio 4 years ago from Shelton

      aaawww thank you so much Lathing

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      Peg Cole 4 years ago from Dallas, Texas

      Hey there Frank. I liked the 'spin' on this classic tale. Oh boy, there I go again. You know, an apple a day. . .

      I couldn't resist. Your poem was awesome.

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      Frank Atanacio 4 years ago from Shelton

      lol thanks pegcole

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      Lissette 4 years ago from Central Florida

      Amazing capture Frank! The thoughts swarming that one moment all collected here.

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      Frank Atanacio 20 months ago from Shelton

      thanks so much Moms...:)

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      The Stages Of ME 20 months ago

      Awesome, life really is about choice as depicted here~Well Done

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      Frank Atanacio 20 months ago from Shelton

      thank you stages

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      Missy Smith 20 months ago from Florida

      Wow! I love, love, love, this. I mean, we all have watched Snow White, and we watched as she took that bite, but we could have never experienced how it felt to collapse with the taste of poison in our mouth like a real person would have. The way you put that scene in motion was awesome. I felt like Snow White. Voting ^^^^ So Awesome!

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      Frank Atanacio 20 months ago from Shelton

      thank you so much Missy

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      Jackie Lynnley 20 months ago from The Beautiful South

      Hey Frank; glad to come across this little jewel from before I even knew ya! Brilliant mind, great talent. You should do more like this!

      ^+

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      Frank Atanacio 20 months ago from Shelton

      thanks so much Jackie for visiting this piece...:)

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