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Spirits Sat As Mourners

Updated on October 20, 2016

He Perched On the Precipice Of Forever

As the man looks out on his future, he regrets the deal he made long ago.  He bartered his soul.  Now the evil spirits have come to collect on the debt.
As the man looks out on his future, he regrets the deal he made long ago. He bartered his soul. Now the evil spirits have come to collect on the debt. | Source

Want To Join In The Fun?

Hubber extraordinaire Frank Atanacio created this fun challenge In Honor Of April's Poetry Month.

He kick started the dark poem and invited others to add their segments. Here were the rules of engagement that Frank established:

  1. Follow the theme of the poem: Spirits Sat As Mourners.
  2. Different writers can add segments to the poem, like links in a chain. Each segment must be 10 lines or less.
  3. You can darken or lighten it gradually, but don't create a big difference in tone.
  4. You can continue adding pieces to the poem (like links in a chain) even if you already have added a link previously. However, you cannot follow your own link.
  5. In a second text box, explain your addition, who you are, and what changes you made to the poem.
  6. Dark photos are welcomed -- your own, if possible.

Dead End

Where this guy is going ain't good.
Where this guy is going ain't good. | Source

Read The List Of Contributions

Please ... go check out the original hubs for each author's tantalizing images, and read their explanations behind why they wrote what they did.

Following is roughly the order in which they links were published. If I've missed any, let me know! Enjoy!

Spirits Sat as Mourners

He knew

As death grew,

The lights were dimmer,

As the darkness began to shimmer,

Eyes would glow

As the candles in back

Burnt low

And spirits sat as mourners

Massed together all in a row…

- by Frank Atanacio

But what is this

Rising before them?

Rebel spirit, breaking free,

Unwanted death

in frightened eyes

clinging to life’s final spree.

All astounded,

‘Cept one spirit,

gently restraining,

takes the soul to find the final key...

-by annart

Oh, he had made his choice,

Lost his voice,

And now they had come to claim him.

Wearing solemn stares

With no earthly cares

And eager to collect their debt.

Ashes to ashes, dust to dust

Surrounded by those he could not trust

His bartered soul perched

On the precipice of Forever.

- by FlourishAnyway

He Looks Out On His Future

His future is bleak.  He sealed his deal.
His future is bleak. He sealed his deal. | Source

Reader Poll

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Explanation For My Addition

My intent with this chain was to follow Annart and set the tone that the recently deceased's fate was cast in stone and nothing could save him now. Jo (aka Tobusiness) beat me to the punch with her excellent contribution!

Our poor sad soul had made an ill-fated deal with the dark side long ago, and now it is time to pay up. The evil spirits had patiently waited for him. They are his debt collectors, ready to carry him away. He now contemplates his future -- a long, vast future of regret symbolized by Death Valley. Will he go quietly or resist with all he has?

Time To Pay Up

All is lost.  He made his deal.  Perhaps it's best not to know what happens to him?
All is lost. He made his deal. Perhaps it's best not to know what happens to him? | Source

© 2014 FlourishAnyway

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      FlourishAnyway 7 months ago from USA

      Dolores - I usually don't respond to writing challenges because they get absolutely no traffic. (I thank you for reading!) However, it was really fun to participate.

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      Dolores Monet 7 months ago from East Coast, United States

      I don't pay attention to these things and am wondering why. I love the concept that different people will react in such diverse ways to the prompt. Must read some of the others.

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      FlourishAnyway 21 months ago from USA

      swalia - Thanks for reading! Have a wonderful day.

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      Shaloo Walia 21 months ago

      Interesting!

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      FlourishAnyway 2 years ago from USA

      Peggy W - Thank you for visiting my lonely poem hub! I don't do challenges because the traffic is horrible! Challenges are fun, however.

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      Peggy Woods 2 years ago from Houston, Texas

      I liked your entry and the direction you took it although that soul who had gone to the dark side would undoubtedly regret his decisions for eternity. Well done!

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      FlourishAnyway 3 years ago from USA

      Nancy - I keep add adding the contributions that I know of. Start with Frank's, read down through the various contributions (people have chosen to follow different portions of the "chain") and just decide who you want to go after. I think we're playing it pretty loose, and I don't think it matters whose "segment" you follow. Just just in. Some people have chosen to follow the same segment. No matter, just participate!

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      Nancy Owens 3 years ago from USA

      Well, this looks fun. I used to do it with my daughter when she was little and we would make up stories. I don't get how to do this, though. How do you get into the document to add on to it?

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      FlourishAnyway 3 years ago from USA

      CrisSp - Thanks for reading. It's been very enjoyable.

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      CrisSp 3 years ago from Sky Is The Limit Adventure

      Very creative! Love the images!

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      FlourishAnyway 3 years ago from USA

      Glad you enjoyed it, Suzanne!

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      Suzanne Day 3 years ago from Melbourne, Victoria, Australia

      What a great idea! I'd love to join in but unfortunately it is too gradual for me to copy as I am a loud, statement sort of poet. This is beautiful and relaxing to read and the images work well, especially the first image. Voted beautiful, because it is!

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      FlourishAnyway 3 years ago from USA

      Thanks for stopping by, Nell. I appreciate the compliment.

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      Nell Rose 3 years ago from England

      I am so impressed flourish! to be able to add your part is so difficult, well for me anyway! this is a great challenge, and really enjoyable, well done!

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      FlourishAnyway 3 years ago from USA

      Thanks for stopping by, Crafty! We'd love for you to join us!

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      FlourishAnyway 3 years ago from USA

      Thanks, Audrey!

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      CraftytotheCore 3 years ago

      Wow, I'm impressed Flourish. It's not easy to write poetry to begin with, so this is very creative and superbly done.

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      Audrey Howitt 3 years ago from California

      Love, love the ending here! Well penned!

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      FlourishAnyway 3 years ago from USA

      Kevin - Many thanks!

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      The Examiner-1 3 years ago

      What a poem Flourish. Awesome. It makes a perfect fit with all of the others. It gets voted up and shared in my book!

      Kevin

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      FlourishAnyway 3 years ago from USA

      Thanks, Audrey! It's lowered my darn HubberScore to 99 (having been 100 for ages), but I'm having a bunch of fun and don't care a bit.

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      Audrey Howitt 3 years ago from California

      I love, love this series and your addition here is beautifully done!

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      FlourishAnyway 3 years ago from USA

      MsDora - Thank you. We'd love to see you join in the fun!

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      FlourishAnyway 3 years ago from USA

      Frank - How nice of you.

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      Dora Isaac Weithers 3 years ago from The Caribbean

      Flourish, I like your intent and your contribution. Good poetry. I admire all you talented poets.

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      Frank Atanacio 3 years ago from Shelton

      flourish just gotta say it again wow

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      Frank Atanacio 3 years ago from Shelton

      expert poet's are just falling out of the wood work wow again blown away

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      FlourishAnyway 3 years ago from USA

      Rafiq23 - Thanks for the encouragement.

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      Muhammad Rafiq 3 years ago from Pakistan

      Nice poetry FlourishAnyway! Keep it up!

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      FlourishAnyway 3 years ago from USA

      Liz - Thanks. You should join in. Just pick it up where Jo Goldsmith leaves off.

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      Elizabeth Parker 3 years ago from Las Vegas, NV

      Awesome- this is great to read!

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      FlourishAnyway 3 years ago from USA

      Sha - Join in! It's quite fun!

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      FlourishAnyway 3 years ago from USA

      Rajan - Thanks for following along. I appreciate your stopping by.

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      Rajan Singh Jolly 3 years ago from From Mumbai, presently in Jalandhar,INDIA.

      You maintain the flow of the preceding poem so well, Flourish. It is a treat to read this. The pictures go very well with the poem and explanation.

      Voted up and sharing.

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      Shauna L Bowling 3 years ago from Central Florida

      Flourish, your addition is so vivid. I'm getting drawn into this poetic chain with all the wonderful contributions.

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      FlourishAnyway 3 years ago from USA

      Always exploring - Glad you enjoyed this. Fun challenge eh?

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      Ruby Jean Fuller 3 years ago from Southern Illinois

      Chilling and awesome. I love it! Thank you...

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      FlourishAnyway 3 years ago from USA

      You might have a point about me not stringing them all together. I don't want to take away from any one individual's traffic. It is nice to see themm all together to see how it flows. it's coming along quite nicely and I hope others add to it. Quite fun!

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      John Hansen 3 years ago from Queensland Australia

      Please ignore my last comment, my computer or Internet is acting up. I tried to edit it and it froze and wouldn't let me.

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      FlourishAnyway 3 years ago from USA

      cecile - I tried to string along them the best I could for you so you could know where to pick up, what the tone was, etc. I think it would suffice to copy the previous person's "link in the poem" and continue along giving them credit, of course. You might ask Frank about any questions since it was his terrific idea. Hope this helps!

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      John Hansen 3 years ago from Queensland Australia

      you start a hub and only write a verse or stanza less than 0 lines that follows on from the last one written. You don't have to rewrite all the previous ones, just refer to which one you are following on from and leave a link to your hub.

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      Devika Primić 3 years ago from Dubrovnik, Croatia

      Your beautiful work surprises me all the time. A challenging effort indeed.

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      Cecile Portilla 3 years ago from West Orange, New Jersey

      I would like to participate but I am not sure that I understand the instructions. Am I supposed to go to "start a hub" and rewrite all previous lines before starting my section? I clicked on the link but it took me to someone else's hub.

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      FlourishAnyway 3 years ago from USA

      Jodah - Thanks. This is the first time I have done this but it is fun.

      Shyron - I've tried to find your link but cannot yet? It says unpublished?

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      Shyron E Shenko 3 years ago from Texas

      Flourish, beautiful addition to this traveling poem. I don't know where my verse went, maybe I did it all wrong.

      Anyway voted up, UABI and shared.

      Shyron

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      John Hansen 3 years ago from Queensland Australia

      Well done Flourish, you followed the theme perfectly.

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      FlourishAnyway 3 years ago from USA

      AliciaC - Thanks for reading. It is a fun group challenge. I look forward to seeing where it goes and how it gets there.

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      Linda Crampton 3 years ago from British Columbia, Canada

      I love this poetry challenge and all the contributions! It's very interesting to see how the story is progressing. Your addition is a great one, Flourish. It's very dramatic. I appreciate seeing the poems that I've missed, too.

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      FlourishAnyway 3 years ago from USA

      Jamie - Not my usual thing, but this is fun! Thanks for reading!

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      FlourishAnyway 3 years ago from USA

      Faith Reaper - I appreciate the encouragement!

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      FlourishAnyway 3 years ago from USA

      Bill - Thanks for the feedback! You should join in!

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      FlourishAnyway 3 years ago from USA

      Jo - Thank you. This is quite fun!

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      Jo Alexis-Hagues 3 years ago from Bedfordshire, U.K

      I knew the lady with the silver quill would do us proud. Well done, really loved it. Sorry to have beaten you to the draw...well maybe not because you've done a sterling job.

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      Bill Holland 3 years ago from Olympia, WA

      What a great answer to the challenge. Beautiful images here, Flourish! Well done my friend.

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      Jamie Lee Hamann 3 years ago from Reno NV

      I love how this is coming together. Jamie

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      Faith Reaper 3 years ago from southern USA

      Awesome, Flourish, it is wonderful to see your poetry side shine! Love your version too and explanation. Perfect imagery too. Cool! Up and more, pinning, tweeting and sharing. Enjoy your Sunday, Faith Reaper