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Spontaneously Violent

Updated on March 1, 2015

There was an odd hatred flowing,

He couldn’t bury guilt so portentous

Or a fear so cloying,

It was tearing him apart,

Each passing second

Was a nail in his heart,

His fear could fill oceans,

No matter how he grasped

For steady emotions,

His body at times rocked,

If religion could be spontaneously violent,

Then God could be spontaneously shocked,

This left him at the end of his rope,

He was praying for a trickle of hope,

Fear gave him no choice,

As he fought the effort to maintain

Stability in his own voice,

Of course he was frightened,

His stomach automatically tightened,

What could the world be?

That uncertainty in itself was unsettling to see,

Humanity seemed dazed, puzzled, unsure,

Nothing seemed pure,

He heard his mother crying,

She suffered a tremendous loss,

Then he suddenly realized,

He was her son nailed to the cross.

© 2013 Frank Atanacio

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      Anna Haven 3 years ago from Scotland

      A very thought provoking and profound piece of work. Anna :)

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      Frank Atanacio 3 years ago from Shelton

      Anna thank you

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      Jo Alexis-Hagues 3 years ago from Bedfordshire, U.K

      This event you so cleverly described was indeed portentous!..Excellent write...you can still surprise and amaze me, well done. :)

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      Frank Atanacio 3 years ago from Shelton

      thanks so much tobusiness :)

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      Jackie Lynnley 3 years ago from The Beautiful South

      How amazing Frank, you have taken us to know the Son as man, which He was. He knew what He had to do but reading it we know it was not an easy thing just because He was the Son of God. He prayed in the garden preparing just awhile before this and of course Mary was His mother and He had to have felt love for her especially for that reason. You really amaze me on this Frank, I see a new side to you. All up votes and sharing.

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      Frank Atanacio 3 years ago from Shelton

      thank you so much Jackie :) bless you

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      Faith Reaper 3 years ago from southern USA

      Wow, Frank, had to go back and read this one twice. Really great ending and surprising indeed to this wonderful write. Superb! Yes, He did know He had to place himself on that cross and yes, as to those who knew not what they were doing, He even asked His Father to forgive them. He is risen! And I am so thankful, as He is no longer on that cross. Being a mother, I could not even imagine such, and I like how you wrote it from His perspective, seeing His mother there watching it all and how painful that, in and of itself, must have been of course.

      Voted up ++++ and sharing

      God bless you. In His Love Always, Faith Reaper

      I am glad it has been a very fast two weeks. : )

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      Maria Magdalena Ruiz O'Farrill 3 years ago from Borikén the great land of the valiant and noble Lord

      Having a personal experience with God these words mean so much!

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      Frank Atanacio 3 years ago from Shelton

      Faith you are as beautiful as your tag name Faith.. bless you for waiting the two weeks :) and Lastheart thank you for popping by bless you too :)

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      Faith Reaper 3 years ago from southern USA

      Well, thank you very much, you, most kindest of gentlemen. It takes much patience to wait that long : )

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      Frank Atanacio 3 years ago from Shelton

      LOL silly...:)

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      Alastar Packer 3 years ago from North Carolina

      Frank my friend your proficiency in poetry is getting to the point of serious professionalism in a big way- and good for you for it. This Epic poetry write is proof of what I just said.

      Btw, if you'd like check out my latest Rev. War piece go on alastatpacker dote weebly dot com. I know how much you enjoy them.

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      Frank Atanacio 3 years ago from Shelton

      Alastar yeah I do can you send me the link it goes to web not found.. thanks :)

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      Dora Isaac Weithers 3 years ago from The Caribbean

      Frank, even though you wrote about "nail in his heart" the ending still crept up on me. Both the subject and the presentation of this piece are awesome!

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      mylindaelliott 3 years ago from Louisiana

      Very interesting piece. I didn't realize where we were going until we got there.

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      Frank Atanacio 3 years ago from Shelton

      MsDora always a kind word from you Bless you :) and mylindaeliiot thank you for commenting :)

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      Alastar Packer 3 years ago from North Carolina

      Sure Frank, since you do like the Rev. ones and this engagement is a bit different at that. Here's the blog and the story will be first on it: The Carolinian's Archives - Once Upon a History. Hope to get back on Hp more soon my friend. Been tied up with new projects and all but as Arnold said, "I'll be back." lol

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      Valleypoet 3 years ago

      This one really was a surprise ending...you built up the tension superbly, and I sensed the surprise would come at the end but I would never have guessed what it was. Great writing buddy...as always:-))

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      Gypsy Rose Lee 3 years ago from Riga, Latvia

      Awesome poetry. I agree a really surprising ending.

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      Frank Atanacio 3 years ago from Shelton

      Thanks Alastar Ill check it out.. and always good to see you my friend Valleypoet.. thanks for the comment and thank you too Gypsy Rose :)

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      SandCastles 3 years ago

      Jesus was scared when he had to go the cross. He prayed, "Let this cup pass from me". Your poem does a good job illustrating what Jesus might have been thinking when he was near the end. He realized how much his mother Mary was suffering, watching him die. But Jesus was resurrected. I like Dolly's song, "He's Alive!"

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      Barbara 3 years ago from Stepping past clutter

      Such emotion, so appropriately applied... who could be more deserving, than Our Lord, who died?

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      Genna East 3 years ago from Massachusetts, USA

      Ohh, Frank. I think that last line may have caused us all to re-read this poem from a different perspective. Very profound, with layers of conscience and remarkable parable. Well done! :-)

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      Frank Atanacio 3 years ago from Shelton

      thank you so much Sandcastles for stopping by..bless you and Story I accept your comment with so much pride.. LOL bless you

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      Frank Atanacio 3 years ago from Shelton

      thank you so much Genna East :)

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      Richard Ricky Hale 3 years ago from West Virginia

      Frank, this is some deep, well you know. Just remarkable writing Frank. I really feel this type of writing is your calling. Absolutely Grade A Frank, voted up, useful, awesome, beautiful, interesting, and shared.

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      Frank Atanacio 3 years ago from Shelton

      thanks the Lyricwriter :) bless you bro

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      QudsiaP1 3 years ago

      An incredibly descriptive set of emotions penned by you, well done.

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      Frank Atanacio 3 years ago from Shelton

      thank you Q :)

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      Mary Craig 3 years ago from New York

      What do I say to this one Frank? Amazing? Yes, I think that would be the one word description. Not suspecting what was coming I was, as always, glued to the description wondering what was going to happen next. Pleasantly surprised however by the depth of feeling for the most momentous occurrence.

      Surely Jesus suffered those emotions for himself and those around him and above his own pain feeling the pain of his mother.

      Can I add brilliant? Beautifully done.

      Voted all but funny, shared and pinned.

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      Vinaya Ghimire 3 years ago from Nepal

      Frank,

      You reminded me a scene from The Passion of the Christ

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      Frank Atanacio 3 years ago from Shelton

      Till you're so good for my ego bless you :) and Vin thanks for stopping by again bless you too :)

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      Janis Leslie Evans 3 years ago from Washington, DC

      Biting. Disturbing. Those words came to mind as I read this piece . . . three times. I found it hauntingly moving, wanting to know this man, and at the end, found who he was or at least the metaphor for all men who struggle in physical or spiritual death. What power you have as a poet. Wow. Voted up and awesome.

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      Frank Atanacio 3 years ago from Shelton

      thank you Jans :)

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      Killbill3333 3 years ago

      damn this was very well written and explosive

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      Frank Atanacio 3 years ago from Shelton

      thank you killbill

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      Alastar Packer 3 years ago from North Carolina

      This one might make one believe it is set in modern times - surprise. Polished piece, Frank.

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      Frank Atanacio 3 years ago from Shelton

      thank you my long lost friend good to see you bro :)

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      Alastar Packer 3 years ago from North Carolina

      The ol' boy ain't lost my friend, just expanding. You know I'll always have a soft spot for HP as it is basically where i started out. And met so many wonderful writers, friends - from all over the world. Shoot, Frank, if you still want to check out a couple of my recent history writes on the Rev. War in the South and Civil War you know where to go I assume. When things get straightened out there will be some more stories on HP. Good to see you too bro:)

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      Frank Atanacio 20 months ago from Shelton

      send me a link I think the last time I tried to get on your page it says the page is broken or may have been taken down something of that nature

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      Missy Smith 20 months ago from Florida

      Really great poem. You captured what we all have learned by reading and watching bible stories of Jesus's story of being nailed to the cross. :)

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      Frank Atanacio 20 months ago from Shelton

      thank you Missy Smith :)

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